[Or] [ZuNoWriMo] When And How

Szerenade · 10:16 PM

[font="Tahoma"]This is not so much a continuation of my NaNoWriMo attempt as a whole new kick-off with the same general idea (although I kept the same title because I love it). It's very nonsensical and if there are any physics involved, they're more than likely very, very wrong.

Enjoy!
[b]

Since ZuNo is over, I removed my chapter just because.

Lantean

Interesting. Very interesting. ^_^

Though, I think you could've gone softer on usage of "Sub-lieutenant." When it's first implied that they have a weird rank like that, "Lieutenant" or plain old "sir" is fine to use afterwards. ^_^

Hombre de Mundo

That's some serious writing skills right there. Myself, I'm way too lazy to paint a picture the way you do. Keep up the good work

Selah

I adore the dialogue. Scrupulously polite, with neither speaker forgetting to "sir" or "Sub-Lieutenant" the other - and such smiles as they exchange! And yet, for all their etiquette, rancour in its palest form flows like stream water! I love it love it love it. The ease of the writing is doubly wonderful. Looking forward to more!

Szerenade · 10:17 PM

Thanks for your comments, guys!
You're absolutely right, Blizzie. I think Lt. or Mr. Dunman would have been more appropriate, but the repetition of Sub-Lt. amused me when I was writing.

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[Or] [ZuNoWriMo] When And How

Lantean Reverting Join Date: May 2006 Location: Solla Sollew Posts: 6,713	Interesting. Very interesting. ^_^ Though, I think you could've gone softer on usage of "Sub-lieutenant." When it's first implied that they have a weird rank like that, "Lieutenant" or plain old "sir" is fine to use afterwards. ^_^ __________________ - Zeldish returns to Zelda Universe! - Coming Soon: Chapter 2 Part 3 - We're Off to Find a Wizzrobe! - A Small Victory Over Tyranny -

Hombre de Mundo Your one and only Man of World Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Uppsala, Sweden Posts: 4,653	That's some serious writing skills right there. Myself, I'm way too lazy to paint a picture the way you do. Keep up the good work __________________ FOURTH message to the Humulation Army Colonel Hombre, leader of the Humulation Army, the most powerful group on ZU. Join now! So who's this Mana? You should read my Double ALttP Theory

Selah ... sold her soul to Murtagh and Anti-Shur'tugal Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Ensconced in a library Posts: 1,936	I adore the dialogue. Scrupulously polite, with neither speaker forgetting to "sir" or "Sub-Lieutenant" the other - and such smiles as they exchange! And yet, for all their etiquette, rancour in its palest form flows like stream water! I love it love it love it. The ease of the writing is doubly wonderful. Looking forward to more! __________________ [the bluestocking chronicles]

Szerenade Sage of Wisdom Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 1,262	Thanks for your comments, guys! You're absolutely right, Blizzie. I think Lt. or Mr. Dunman would have been more appropriate, but the repetition of Sub-Lt. amused me when I was writing. Last edited by Szerenade; 03-07-2008 at 10:17 PM.

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