Ganon's Imprisonment (a play)

I just thought of this. This a play about Ganon's imprisonment in the Dark World after OoT. Enjoy!

Nararator: Long ago Ganon, the King of Darkness, was sealed into the Sacred Realm.
Ganon: Curse you Link! Curse you Zelda! Curse you sages!
Nararator: During this time he thought up a plan and built up an army to conquer Hyrule.
Ganon: What am I to do? I can't do anything in here. Oh I know! (summons a Moblin).
Moblin: Yes Lord Ganon?
Ganon: I need you to do my laundry.
Moblin: What? Um why? Don't answer that. What you're saying is that you summoned me to do your laundry.
Ganon: Yes. Yes it is.
Moblin: (Grabs sword stabs self and dies.)
Ganon: Okay what just happened.
Octorock: (Suddenly appears.) Well I believe that the Moblin didn't want to do your laundry and killed itself.
Ganon: (Jumps in air.) Where did you come from?
Octorock: I have no idea!

Well this is all I can write right now. I will write more if people like it.

Funny lol the Octorock should have like glasses and a moustache that would be hilarious.

Lol that would be funny but you have to wait and see.

Okay looking forward to it.

o.O came out of now where and says "I have no idea!" it has some humor to it, we shall see though

Thanks! Here's more!

Ganon: What? You can't just appear out of nowhere!
Octorock: Oh I did? Just to let you know I want my retirement money now!
Ganon: (Mouth open wide.) What retirement money? I created you.
Octorock: Oh yeah I forgot you did create me. My bad. What do you want to do my king?
Ganon: I want to get out of here and takeover Hyrule.
Octorock: Um there's a problem with that. Isn't that Seal thingy inescapable?
Ganon: Well... yes. The one thing that the Sages forgot was that I have the ToP!
Octorock: What is the ToP exactly?
Ganon: (Getting angry.) The Triforce of Power. You know Power of the Gods.
Octorock: (Puzzled.) I have no idea what that is master. (Gets idea.) Master you could break out of here with that fancy ToP of yours and conquer Hyrule.
Ganon: I really am dumb aren't I? If I escape I'll get sealed again probably though.
Octorock: (Puts on sunglasses and sings "Bad to the Bone".) I need to get back to the Light World. I have a wife and 110 kids to feed. (Whispers so Ganon can't hear.) Thank goodness I found a way out of here. (Picks up the Magic Mirror and warps out.)
Ganon: Now where did that Octorock go? (Yells for hours.)

That's as much as I can probably write tonight. Write more when had more sleep.

Pretty good funny too.

Thanks. Like I said I'll write more later.

This play needs work. At this point, it just seems like a bunch of ranting about unrelated things. I know what you're trying to do (make a comedy), but you aren't quite achieving it. Well, actually, you have, but you went way past that line. In the future, try to limit the amount of random, pointless dialogue to a bit less than what you've been doing. If you do that, you could very well have an excellent comedy on your hands!

For the first couple lines, I thought it was going to be serious. I found it to be quite interesting

Thanks EzloSpirit for the advice. I will do that. Thanks -Link-182-
Okay here's more!

Ganon: I'm so bored.
???: I can help you.
Ganon: Who is that?
???: Your worst nightmare. Your mother.
Ganon: Mother you're here?
???: I was joking you nitwit. I'm not your mother. I am Dark Link.
Ganon: I'm not a nitwit. Good Idon't want her to be here. Um who's that.
Dark Link: (Mouth dropped open) Me stupid it's me. I'm in your shadow.
Ganon: Oh! How'd you get in here?
Dark Link: (Comes out of Ganon's shadow.) I was in your shadow ever since Link defeated me. Oh and by the way you smell really bad.
Ganon: Oh! Link defeated me too. Yeah I know.
Dark Link: I know I saw him defeat you. You're a loser.
Ganon: You did? I am not a loser.
Dark Link: I was in your shadow I told you that. You are a loser.
Ganon: (Pulls out Trident and trys to kill Dark Link)
Dark Link: (Jumps out of way) I was joking no need to go all piggy on me.
Ganon: You were joking. (Laughs maniacally). I know that you weren't.
Dark Link: (Thinks up plan) Truce?
Ganon: Truce! Now with you by my side I might be able to rule Hyrule once more.

Okay how was that. I might write more later.

That was great! I like how you used Dark Link in that chapter. Can't wait for more!

Thanks!! Thank you well you'll have to.

STUPID AWSOME, CRAZY COOL, AND SUPER RANDOM!!!!

p.s. that random comment is a compliment.

Thank you! I don't kow what to write. Anyone got any ideas?

Well here's more!

Ganon: Dark Link I need you to go get King Moblin.
Dark Link: Yes sir!
Ganon: (summons a darknut) Go get my trident.
Darknut: Okay.
Dark Link: I brought King Moblin sir!
Ganon: Good.
King Moblin: What do you want?
Ganon: I want you to figure out how to get out of here.
King Moblin: What? This place is sealed.
Darknut: I couldn't find your trident.
Dark Link: Don't believe him. It's behind his back.
???: Oh Dark Link!
Dark Link: Who's there?
Dark Zelda: It's me Dark Zelda. I want you join me in taking over Hyrule.
Dark Link: Okay! See you later Ganon.
Ganon: Okay? What just happened?

That's all I can write right now. I'll write more later.

Glad I could help! Nice work by the way!

Thank you!

So far I have to rate this a 1.5/5.

The format is like a format I used to see quite often, a parody format, one that Grass started. This is more like that then a play.

I'd have to say that this is very random, but not in the good way.

You have some grammar mistakes as well.

Also, these chapters are way too short. Try to make them longer.

I'm sure that this could get better, and I hope it does, but so far, its future looks bleak, at least in my opinion.

Thank you for the advice. I will try to make the chapters longer.