Starfox: The Mysterious Human (Anyone interested?)

Yeah yeah yeah, I know what yall's goin to say. "This's a friggin *Insert three hundred lines of swears/rants here* zelda site! x_X" But seriously people who love zelda can and might also like other games and stories about these games am I right? Here's a few things you should know before considering your response. Should I decide to post the fanfiction.net link to my story here.

First, don't complain about grammar, OTHER people seem to be reading and LIKING my work anyway. I've been getting pretty nice reviews that surprisingly only deal with the story from my latest work. So the general public doesn't seem to care what "level" of grammar it is as long as they can READ it. And call what we know as english.

Second, although this will be a starfox story with a human in it. It will have nothing to do with earth. Except at the near end where he possibly returns home.

Third and Finally, this story is NOT centered around Fox and his buddies, at least not in the way it should. It focuses more on the human and main character Alan and Krystal as the side Character. But team starfox does play a major role.

Now that all those messes are out of the way. Here's the main plot.

Alan is nineteen years old and cannot remember anything about himself other than his name since a traumatic incident when he was around five. Since then he's been using his unusual strength and speed to save lives Ala batman (though not as dark xD) for the last five years. One of these times he's critically injured saving Krystal from a new breed of monsters that have been attacking Corneria lately. Even though he causes unnecisary excitement when he first awakes in the hospital that saved him. The two eventually become pretty close.(Close to the point of a mother-son relationship) And decide to help each other solve their own mysteries. But there's a problem, the evil General Scales plans on capturing this "rare" breed of human for some un-explainable but obsessive reason!

Okay now for another thing. I'm tired of you people assuming that all my characters are flawless Sara sues. Well in a way they are. See when i think of their lines actions and stratagies. I do a tad of method acting, using that good old "what would I do?" question. But in case you still think he's gonna be one heres some about him BEFORE you read the story.


Alan's personality is much like the average teen. But unlike the average teen. He is incredibly bright with an IQ of nearly 400. He's also so mechanical he could build and design a supercalculator in a cave if he had to. The problem, he doesn't really give a #$%^ about it! At least in the way Krystal thinks he should. He's also rather un-stable and reckless. This is because he's both blessed and cursed with the might of at least two silverbacks. This's actually just his point of view. Depending on the situation and his current mood of course. Along with a slightly usible magnetic field(But nowhere near say...magneto in Xmen) and blinding speed. Otherwize he's pretty much like a human version of Sonic. Of course he's usually running TOWARD the girls around him. xD His major problem is accepting any prejudged mistakes on the people he meets. And he's also pretty flaky about girls. Not quite to the point of him being a "playa" but still. He can't summon his strength at will like say superman ether. He has to be really friggin pissed, more like the Hulk.

Soooo...whatchya think? Sound like a good story? Keep in mind i'm only going to put it up for viewing purposes only.

One last and important thing. Any of the stupid, poinless complaints will be reported as abuse. Stuff like (highly sensored btw) a waste of my friggin time. If that is the case, especially for certain other...members. Remember that it was you who decided to read it and waste your time. I'm only responsible for INVITING you to do so if that's how you feel afterward.

Other than that, feel free to discuss the story. Oh yeah, sorry for so much emphisis on those last few lines. I just wanted to make my "point" clear!^_^

The character sounds like a Mary Sue.

Sounding like and being like are two different things bud. Besides I was posting to see if anyone was interested in reading the story and that's all. The fact that he's got in-human characteristics is what seperates him from being a real world human even slightly.

The only thing that will even resemble me is his *ahem* sense of humor and ethics.(Trust me, you'll see what I mean.) That is the ONLY part of my personality I plan on using for him. Besides, a lotta the general public doesn't seem to notice that fact anyway unless they've read a lot of fics on that site anyway.

Umm...I need some help coming up with some new aliens too. Mine just end up looking like a rip off of star wars. Which basically that's what some of the dudes in Starfox Look like. xD credit will be given of course ^_^

Sounding like and being like are two different things bud. Besides I was posting to see if anyone was interested in reading the story and that's all.

Seems like no one is.

Originally Posted by Twilight Wolf

Seems like no one is.

Well nobody here obviously, cause it's all about stinking zelda. Maybe they need a forum so pple can talk about other games here too? At least I'm not concerned about what you think about my work. Not in the manner I used to anyway, everyone is intitled to their opinion and I should respect that. But even still, please at least refrain from your annoying pics and constant swears. A simple I don't like it is good enough.

I put a lot of heart into my characters, I really do. Even if some or all tend to have some likeness of Mary Sue, Gary stue, exct. It's only because of the way I think about their lines.

For example I think of the characters past and the way people treat him/her when a game/show character speaks to them. (In any manner, flirting, torture, mocking, picking fights exct.) And then I think about the personality of that person, afterward I think to myself "Now what would I say or how would I feel about that in THEIR shoes?" and then if it fits. I usually write what comes into my head down. alsoI write in a "as you go" fassion, meaning I sort of make it up as I go along.

Of course this is more method acting than anything else. Heck I can pretty much nail a lot of the Naruto cast, Avatar cast, and even Starfox cast right on their heads in the same way. That's probably why my characters seem to be Sara sues and such. Sometimes it happens so quickly and naturally that I don't even notice!

EDIT: Oops...I typed WAAAAAAYYYYY too much again huh? All well, at least I got it all off of my chest. That's the only good thing about this post I think. ^_^

Originally Posted by SonicTheLegend

Well nobody here obviously, cause it's all about stinking zelda. Maybe they need a forum so pple can talk about other games here too?

General Gaming - Zelda Universe Forums.

Ermmm right, forgot about that xD Seriously I did! I'm gonna post a link to this thread and then post the first chapter and see what happens.