My Wind Waker parody!

Just for those who haven't noticed, Grass' parody is back! WOOHOO! Because of this, I predict that there will be even more parodies in the fiction board and more people will be commenting on this (Not sure, though). I don't have my new chapter yet, but I think I'll be making one soon.

Right now, I'm waiting for this thread to earn more publicity...

It is??? Holy Crap!
And you should probably update your sig, mate. Might help draw people if it was right.

lol. I'm editing this post just to be less spammy.

Holy crap, I can't believe I forgot to update my sig after such a long time! I really wanna laugh at my self right now.

I'm such a moron!

Alright, here comes the next chapter! It's a little too short, though. I've gotten into a bad habbit of making short chapters, so forgive me for that. I'll try my best to break this bad habbit of mine as soon as possible!

Oh, and Grass Rubrics are more than welcome here. We haven't had one of those in quite a while.

PART 42: The Potion

*All four enter the waterfall*

Fox: Oh wow, this place is way bigger than I expected. I didn't know such a big place could be hidden behind such a small waterfall.

Falco: Yeah, you're right. Heck, this place is like the size of a thousand hydro-electric plants for cryin' out loud!

Slippy: What are hydro-electric plants? Are they like banana trees or mango trees? 'Cause I don't like those things. I like vegetable plants like lettus, cabbage, carrots, and other things like Pe--

Falco: I'm not talking about those, you moron! I'm talking about those powerplants that they use to produce electricity!

Peppy: Like....duh.....what are powerplants? Are like.....the rivals of power rangers or something?

Falco: Idiot.

Fox: Hey, you can't blame them for not knowing about powerplants. Those things haven't even been invented yet!

Falco: Well if they haven't been invented yet, then how's it possible for me to KNOW about them, huh?

Fox: Good point.

Falco: Hmmm....

Slippy: So Fox, what are we supposed to do now? Should we go and randomly poke people's heads in the village?

Fox: No, I was thinking we go and find Makar. That's why we're here anyway.

Peppy: Uh....is that true? 'Cause like......uh.....I thought we were here to like.....do stuff.

Fox: Uhuh....right. So umm....*Looks at door* Maybe Makar's behind that door! Can't be too sure about that, though.

Falco: Well, judging by the sign nailed to the door that says 'Makar', I'm thinking IS his room.

Fox: You have a good point there, Falco!

Slippy: *Points at wall* Do I have a good point?

Falco: Nope. Not at all!

Slippy: *Points at ceiling* What about now?

Falco: Shut up, Slippy! We don't need your useless blabbering at a time like this!

Slippy: Alright, whatever you say, Falco. *Shuts up*

Falco: Thank god! Fox, you might as well just open the door now.

Fox: Yeah, might as well. *Reaches out for the doorknob*

Korok: INTRUDER ALERT! INTRUDER ALERT! ACTIVATE SECURITY MISSLES NOW!

Security Missles: *Are activated*

Falco: *Is hit by Securitle Missles* AAAH! What the hell is going on here!?

Korok: I'll tell you what's going on here! You guys have just invaded our privacy, and you're gonna pay for it!

Falco: Not if I can help it! *Shoots Korok with an arrow*

Korok: *Is hit by the arrow* .....*Cries* WEEEEEHHHH! WEEEEEEEHHH! That evil person just shot me! Somebody, help!

Korok2: *Comes in* Hmm....what the hell just happened here? Hmm....YOU! *Points at Fox*

Falco: Yeah?

Korok2: What did you do to my brother?

Falco: Oh, umm....nothing much, really! I just brought a toy that he didn't like, and then he started to go all berserk and stuff.

Korok2: Is this true?

Fox: Yes-

Slippy: No! Actually, he got pissed off by your brother and shot him with an arrow, which apparently hurt your brother a lot!

Korok2: Oh, so you're a criminal, huh!?

Slippy: Yes, he is!

Falco: Grrrr! Slippy, I wanna kill you so bad!

Slippy: Why? What did I do?

Falco: You just freaking told him about the--

Korok2: SHUT UP! Falcons, foxes, toads and rabbits don't have the rite to blabber about nonsense in here. Only koroks could do that! Now get out of here right now or else!

Falco: Or else what? Or else you'll use your tiny old wimpy body to try and beat me up? I mean seriously, you're so tiny, I could just squish you with ease!

Korok2: That's it, you've gone beyond the line here! Korokian twins, bring out the tank!

Korokian Twins: Aye aye, sir! *Bring out their tank*

Fox: Woah, that is one freaking huge tank you've got there!

Peppy: It's really huge, too. It's also big and gigantic. And large.

Korokian Twins: Agreed! Face the wrath of our atomic bomb, losers! *Bring out an atomic bomb*

Falco: Holy crap, you actually have atomic bombs in here!? That's freaking hardcore.

Korok2: Don't think those are the only things we have here, man. *Brings out an ultra-hot laser gun* We just have too many gadgets for you to imagine.

Falco: My gosh, that's insane.

Korok2: Well of course it is! And we're gonna use these overly strong gadgets on YOU if you don't get out right now!

Falco: Alright, alright, fine! We'll leave already!

Fox: Yeah. Come on Falco, we don't wanna lose our lives now, do we?

Slippy: What's a life?

Peppy: Like....duh.....I think it's something that you usually die for.

Slippy: Ah, right. I knew that.

*All four run out of the waterfall*

Falco: My gosh, can't the people in there get a life!? I mean, what kind of idiot would hire an entire patrol of security koroks to bomb up intruders?

Slippy: Makar would!

Falco: Umm...yeah, that's exactly what I was thinking, Mr. Obvious.

Peppy: So like.....uh....duh....how are we supposed to meet Makar without his security trying to bomb us?

Fox: Good question, Peppy. Not even I know how we're supposed to do that. Maybe we should go get a cameleon suit and camaflouge ourselves by blending in with our surroundings.

Falco: Pretty good idea, but cameleon suits are way too expensive. Maybe we should stink bombs at them to knock them out unconscious, then we could meet Makar.

Fox: Hmm...that's a pretty good idea, but I don't think It'll work.

Falco: What!? Why not!?

Fox: 'Cause you see, the nitrogen and helium produced by the stink bomb will eventually colide with the Hydrogen and Oxygen of the waterfall, resulting in nuclear fission and--

Falco: Okay, okay, I get the point already! Man, you don't have to be so technical.

Fox: Sorry about that. I was just trying to help. So um.....does any one else have any other ideas?

Peppy: Like....uh....I do! Maybe we should like.....forget about the entire thing and spend the rest of our lives eating ham instead.

Falco: Horrible idea, Peppy! Absolutely horrible!

Slippy: Oooh, I know! Maybe we should just become koroks ourselves.

Falco: You know what, Slippy? That would actually work out if only it wasn't completely impossible!

Fox: Actually, Falco, Slippy seems to have a point.

Falco: What the--Okay Fox, you have definately lost your mind!

Fox: No I haven't! Just think about it, Falco. How in the world is it possible for us to have a sword that has the power to banish evil? And how in the world are we supposed to have magical arrows? If these things are possible, then it's definately possible for us to transform into koroks!

Falco: Yeah, but how in the world are we supposed to do that? Are we gonna go to some kinda potion shop and buy a potion that will mutate us into koroks or something?

Fox: Good idea! Maybe we should go check out that potion shop right there! *Points at potion shop* Maybe the people there will have that kind of potion. What do you think?

Falco: Well, even though I find this idea to be completely ridiculous and boring, I have no choice but to agree with you. Come on guys, on to the potion shop!

Slippy: What's a potion shop?

Peppy: Like....duh....I think it's a shop where they sell lotion.

Slippy: Good guess.

*All four enter the potion shop*

Korok: Hello everybody, and welcome to my potion shop! My name is Flylite Layman Optiflex, and I'm here to give you any potion you want.

Fox: Flylite Layman Optiflex, huh? That's a pretty....long and unusual name.

Korok: Yeah, I know. Everyone calls me that for some reason. I wonder why.....

Slippy: Hey, could I just call you 'Dooby'?

Korok: Dooby? That's a pretty cool nickame! People should probably call me that from now on.

Falco: Alright, Dooby, so could we get some kind of potion from you? Maybe one that could transform us into koroks?

Dooby: Nope, I hate blue falcons too much to give them my potions?

Falco: WHAT!? Why I oughtta--

Fox: Dooby, could you give ME four potions that could turn us into koroks?

Dooby: Sure thing, foxy guy. But I need you to give me all the ingredients I need for the potion.

Fox: Why, what ingredients do we need?

Dooby: Well, you guys need to bring me four kargaroc feathers, twenty joy pendants, five yellow chu jellies, eighteen blue chu jellies, three servings of bait and of course, fifteen red chu jellies.

Falco: What!? Are you saying we need to bring you all of that!?

Dooby: Why yes, I am. But because you....well....SUCK, you will only be needing four baba seeds.

Falco: Wait a minute....did you just say that we...suck?

Dooby: Actually, I was specifically refering to you.

Falco: Grrr! That's it! You're going down, Dooby! *Prepares to punch Dooby*

Fox: *Grabs Falco* Calm down, Falco! I'm sure he's just kidding!

Dooby: Actually, I'm not. Blue falcons really do suck, anyway.

Falco: Shut it, Dooby!

Dooby: YOU shut it, sucker!

Falco: Anger.

Dooby: Anger.

Fox: Pain.

Slippy: Ham.

Peppy: Like....uh....duh.....stuff.

Fox: Back to the topic, guys! We're here to grab some potions, not turn this shop into a war zone! So come on Dooby, what do we need to do now?

Dooby: Oh, you guys should just go and kill some Deku Babas and bring their seeds back to me.

Falco: Alright then! I can't wait to bomb some Babas!

Dodongos: Thank god!

Dooby: Not you, stupid falcon. You're gonna die because you suck.

Falco: GRRRRRR!

Slippy: What's a 'grrrrrr'?

Fox: You don't need to know that, Slippy. Now come on, guys! Let's go and kill those Deku Babas!

Falco: Might as well just come with you. I'm sick of this sucky place, anyway.

Dooby: Yeah, and I'm sick of having sucky YOU in here! Now, GET OUT!

Falco: I'm getting outta here!

Slippy: Me too!

Peppy: Me fifty-hundred.

Dooby: Oh yeah, and just one more thing before you leave!

Falco: What?

Dooby: You suck!

Falco: Ass.

*All four leave the potion shop*

Falco: My gosh, that Dooby guy's out of his mind! If you guys weren't here, I'd beat him to a bloody pulp.

Fox: Just look at the bright side, man. I mean heck, at least he's giving us potions.

Falco: Yeah, but he's actually making us WORK for the ingredients! Heck, I saw four baba seeds hanging right on his wall when he just HAD to give us this stupid Baba-Killing task! I hate that guy so much.

Slippy: If you hate him so much, then why don't you just go and feed him some oily ham?

Falco: Stop being ridiculous, Slippy. I'm not in the mood for ridiculous things.

Peppy: Falco is currently stepping on dog crap.

Falco: *Looks down and sees dog crap* Now THAT was ridiculous!

Fox: Stop it with the ridiculositiness, alright!?

Falco: Is that even a word?

Slippy: Yeah, I think it means 'mashed potato'.

Fox: Enough! Instead of having yet another session of useless blabbering, why don't we just go split up and get the baba seeds already?

Slippy: Split up? SPLIT UP!? I don't wanna make my body split up! I want my arms, my legs, my chest, and my head perfectly intact!

Fox: That's not what I meant, Slippy. Alright, everybody, split up in three, Two, ONE!

Everybody except Slippy: *Splits up and runs away*

Slippy: *Pulls leg* Aaah! Ooof! Man, I can't get myself to split up! *Pulls arm* GAAAH!

Deku Baba: Could I, as we say it, help you with that?

Slippy: Aaaah! It's a Deku Baba!

Deku Baba: Why yes, it is. Prepare to meet your death, stupid toad!

Slippy: WAAAH! Stand back, you monstrous beast! I have a sword! *Brings out sword*

Deku Baba: You're ridiculous! *Eats sword* Oh, wow. It tastes like feet!

Slippy: Oh, my bad. I guess it didn't help when I rubbed my foot on that thing.

Deku Baba: You rubbed your foot on your sword!?

Slippy: Yup!

Deku Baba: And you actually let me eat it!?

Slippy: Yeah, pretty much.

Deku Baba: Gross! You're gonna pay for this, toad! *Opens mouth really wide*

Slippy: Woah! You're not gonna eat me, are you!?

Deku Baba: Of course I will! What else can I do with this overly large mouth, huh?

Slippy: Not if I can help it! I'm gonna hide in a dark and lonely place where you can't find me! *Jumps into Deku Baba's mouth*

Deku Baba: Uhuh.....right.

Slippy: Oh boy. I guess I chose the wrong place this time around.

Deku Baba: Victory is mine, toad! Down my esophagus and into the stomach you go!

Slippy: *Is inserted halfway into Deku Baba's stomach* Oh man, it's pretty dark in here! It's pretty stinky, too. Have you been eating fungus again!?

Deku Baba: Umm.....well....I...

Slippy: Ah, whatever. *Feels something* Hey, what's this?

Deku Baba: Aaaah! That's my pancreas, you idiot! Keep your hands off of that thing now or I'll....do stuff!

Slippy: Oh, alright. *Feels something else* Hey, what's this?

Deku Baba: That's my freaking liver! GET YOUR HANDS OFF OF THAT THING!

Slippy: Alright, fine, I'll just--*Feels something else* Wait a minute, is this my sword?

Deku Baba: Yeah, I think so.

Slippy: Well, that's bad. It's peircing your liver.

Deku Baba: Well then, you'd better not take it off or I'll--

Slippy: What? You want me to take it off?

Deku Baba: No, I said I--

Slippy: *Takes sword out of Deku Baba's liver*

Deku Baba: AAAHH! YOU IDIOT! YOU SADIST! YOU DOWNRIGHT MONSTER! WHY'D YOU HAVE TO DO THAT, HUH!? WHY'D YOU HAVE TO IGNORE MY ABSOLUTELY CLEAR AND BEAUTIFUL INSTRUCTIONS, AND INSTEAD END UP PULLING THAT FREAKINSHLY SHARP SWORD OUT OF MY FREAKISHLY PAINFUL LUNG, AND NOT CARE ABOUT IT!? I HATE YOU! I HATE YOU SO MUCH!

Slippy: Uh....what did you say?

Deku Baba: I SAID I--*Dies*

Slippy: Alright then, thanks! *Exits Deku Baba's body and grabs a baba seed* Hurray, I finally got a Baba Seed! I'd better show this to the rest of the guys when they get here! YEAH!

*Meanwhile...

Falco: Prepare to die, Deku Baba! Take this! *Stabs Deku Baba*

Deku Baba: Hehe. That tickles.

Falco: And that! *Slashes Deku Baba*

Deku Baba: Like....uh....that also tickles.

Falco: Idiot. *Stabs Deku Baba again*

Deku Baba: Duh....that tickles even more.

Falco: What the--Why aren't you ever hurt by my attacks!? I try and try to beat you, but all I get is a comment from you that says my attacks tickle! What the...!?

Deku Baba: Uh....maybe it's because you're like....a weakling and stuff.

Falco: What? Did you just say that I, the great Falco, am a weakling?

Deku Baba: Yeah, pretty much.

Falco: Why I oughtta--

Deku Baba: *Flies*

Falco: Hey, what the hell!? That's freaking impossible!

Deku Baba: Hehe, I know. But like...I'm still flying, anyway.

Falco: Hmph. So you wanna break the laws of nature, huh? Well then, I'm gonna break you!

Deku Baba: Jubular.

Falco: *Shoots Deku Baba with an arrow*

Arrow: *Goes through Deku Baba*

Falco: Grrr! What's up with you and braking the laws of nature, huh!? Do you take any pleasure in doing that!?

Deku Baba: Like....sorry. I Just can't help doing that.

Falco: I'm pissed, you know that?

Deku Baba: Uh....yeah.

Falco: And for pissing me off, I'm gonna go grab you and kill you right now! *Grapples on to Deku Baba with Grappling Hook*

Grappling Hook: *Pushes Deku Baba away*

Deku Baba: That was coooool.

Falco: What the heck was that, huh!? My grappling hook's supposed to pull you towards me, not push you away from me!

Deku Baba: Once again, I couldn't help it.

Falco: That's it, man! If you can't break the laws of nature, then I should be able to do it too! Laws of nature, get broken!

Laws of Nature: *Aren't broken*

Falco: Crap.

Deku Baba: Sorry dude, but only I could break the laws of nature, not you.

Falco: You think so? Well then, I'm gonna try using one of my items again, and if it doesn't work, I'm gonna blame you for it! *Plants a bomb*

Bomb: .....*Implodes*

Falco: BOMBS ARE SUPPOSED TO EXPLODE, NOT IMPLODE! GRRR!

Deku Baba: Hehe. Like....duh...you're very entertaining.

Falco: You know what else is entertaining?

Deku Baba: What?

Falco: Your death! Hahahaha! hahahahahahaha!

Deku Baba: Like....uh....duh......hahaha?

Falco: Aw, forget it! If you really won't let me kill you, then just gimme a baba seed instead! That's what I came here for, anyway.

Deku Baba: Then why didn't you say so? Here, take this.

This: *Falls from the sky* Am I ever gonna be respected, or what!?

Falco: Umm......I don't think the dude meant you, This.

This: What do you mean he didn't mean me? Am I being ignored again!?

Deku Baba: Uh....yeah, pretty much.

This: So none of you care about me, huh? That's it, I'm moving to Ohio! *Moves to Ohio*

Falco: That was one strange thing....Anyways, could I have that baba seed now?

Deku Baba: Like......uh.......duh......errr.....gah.....alrig ht. *Gives Falco the Baba Seed*

Falco: Yes! Victory is finally mine! *Runs away*

*Meanwhile...*

Peppy: Like.....uh....duh....Hello, Baba.

Deku Baba: Why hello, stranger! You have come at just the perfect time! I just finished reading a very long and intricate book, and I thought I'd interview someone about it. So, flostering rabbit, have you read the book called 'The Wind Raker'?

Peppy: Uh....yeah, I read it when I was like......eighty-nine halves of thirty fourths of ninty months old.

Deku Baba: Excellent! So, rabbit, could you please tell me what your favorite part of the book was?

Peppy: Like....duh....I liked the part when they ate ham, but like....they didn't eat enough, so like....they ate even more ham, but they didn't eat enough so uh....they decided to eat even more ham, then they ate ham, which was more, 'cause they didn't eat enough, but they were like....still hungry, so they ate the ham that was more, even though more ham came their way, yet ham was sacred, and peanuts were cool, so they smiled, and more ham they ate, and then they got a stomach ache.

Deku Baba: Uhuh...right. But for your amusment, I simply adored the part wherein they had to obtain the blade of evil's sane to defeat the master of darkness, Bandonlorf.

Peppy: Kewl.

Deku Baba: So rabbit, what's your favorite dialogue in the book?

Peppy: Like....uh....I like it when Brink says 'I like spam, and I have a pet ram, but if you were jam, then I'd eat you like ham. But you're a dam, whose name is Sam, so if I were a lamb, I'd ram you down'. Yeah, like...that line rocked.

Deku Baba: Seriously? I don't recall reading any sort of line similar to that.

Peppy: Like....uh.....maybe it's a hidden line. You unlock hidden lines by pressing X, A, R and Select all at the same time.

Deku Baba: Alright, that's quite a little...interesting. For the sake of your amusement, I more than loved the part when the Bling of Fred Xions said 'Thou art thee, Shalt I thoo? Where thee art thou, thou thee ye yoo'. It was such a creative, yet somewhat touching line!

Peppy: Jubular.

Deku Baba: Oh, and I also have yet another interrogative question for you. Do you think that the book was worth the unimaginable price of a thousand rupees, or do you think it was worthless?

Peppy: Like....uh......I couldn't answer that. I didn't pay for it, I got it as a Christmas present.

Deku Baba: Right, so I guess the answer would be an automated N/A if asked by a person who received it for Christmas.

Peppy: Actually, I got it as a Birthday Present.

Deku Baba: What!? But didn't you just say that you got it for Christmas?

Peppy: Uh.....yeah, exactly. I got it during my Barmitsva.

Deku Baba: Okay, you're doing nothing but confusing me now. Did you receive it as a Christmas gift, a Birthday gift, or a Barmitsva gift?

Peppy: Like.....uh.....duh.....errr.....gah.....I dunno.

Deku Baba: *Sigh* I guess some people just aren't intelligent enough for interrogations like these. So, on to the last question! Do you think the book was long enough, or was it a tad too short?

Peppy: Like....uh....I think it was too long, cuz like....I spent a hundred years reading it.

Deku Baba: But that's downright impossible! You can't possibly start reading a book before you were born!

Peppy: Like....duh.....I know, but I still did it anyway.

Deku Baba: Ah, whatever. Well, that was the last of the interview. I usually give my customers a golden trophy with shining wax of Carbon and Zinc, but because you were a below-average customer, I'll just give you a single Baba Seed instead. *Gives Peppy a Baba Seed*

Peppy: Like....uh......duh.....thanks. *Walks away*

*Meanwhile...*

Fox: Hey Baba guy, could I have a Baba seed of some sort? 'Cause you see, I need it to give this potion maker guy so he could make me some kind of transformation potion thing. So....could I have a seed?

Deku Baba: Stranger = Found
Conversing Priveleges = Unapproved
Analyzing features......
1%......23%........54%......71%....

Fox: Umm.....hello? Are you in a trance or something?

Deku Baba: 87%......100%
Features Analyzed!
Name = Fox
Race = Fox
Color = Fleshy Orange
Temperature = Hot
Coolness = Cool
Conversing privilege = Yes
Comment = "I may now speak to you, Fox."

Fox: Umm...yeah. So anyways, I was sent on a task to find a Baba Seed, and I was wondering if you could give me one. Just this one time, please?

Deku Baba: Analyzing Retrieved Message......
Retrieved Message = I FINDING BABA SEED AND WONDERING IF
YOU GIVE ME ONE PLEASE.
Coming Up With A Reply........1%......86%......100%
Reply = "Sure, I could give you a Baba Seed if you could help me fix my virus."

Fox: Why? What's your virus problem, anyway?

Deku Baba: Analyzing Retrieved Message......
Retrieved Message = WHAT YOUR VIRUS PROBLEM?
Coming Up With A Reply.....
Reply = "I'll go activate the virus scanner so I could present the problem in a much better manner."

Fox: Alright then, go ahead.

Deku Baba: Activating virus_scan.exe.....
Virus_scan.exe activated
Analyzing virus problem......1%...99%...100%
Virus = 'Chords are tangled up'
Closing Virus_scan.exe
Coming Up With A Reply.....
Reply = "Yeah, so it seems like my chords are all tangled up"

Fox: So....you want me to untangle your chords?

Deku Baba: Analyzing Message
Message = SO YOU WANT UNTANGLE CHORDS OF YOU?
Coming Up With A Reply....
Reply = "No, I'm gonna go and find some other solution to my problem. My chords are to Fragile."

Fox: Alright, go ahead.

Deku Baba: Baba is finding a solution to the Problem......
Solution Found!
Solution = Step on Dung

Fox: What in the world!? What does stepping on dung have anything to do with viruses!?

Deku Baba: Analyzing Message....
Message = WHAT STEPPING ON DUNG HAVE TO DO WITH VIRUS?
Reply = N/A
Stepping On Crap = Required

Fox: Alright, fine! I guess I'll do it just for the Baba Seed. Hmmm....*Looks around for dung* Man, I feel like such an idiot looking for dung!

Deku Baba: [Insert Laugh Here]

Fox: *Finds Dung* My gosh, this is gross! Oh well, I guess I'll have to do it for the Baba Seed. *Steps on Dung* Blueh!

Deku Baba: Haha, you're such a jerk! You just stepped on dung, and you're actually OKAY with it!?

Fox: No I'm not! It's just that--Hey, wait a minute! Why are you talking normally all of a sudden? Aren't you supposed to be talking technical?

Deku Baba: Dude, did you actually think I'd really talk like that? I was just pretending to sound like a compy! You're very gullible, Fox.

Fox: Ah, whatever! Just give me that Baba Seed you promised me!

Deku Baba: Alright, whatever. *Gives Fox a Baba Seed*

Fox: Thank god! Alright, thanks for the Baba Seed, man! I'm gonna get going now!

Deku Baba: Okay, bye! And next time, don't be so gullible!

Fox: Whatever. *Runs to the potion shop*

*Fox, Falco, Slippy and Peppy meet up in front of the potion shop*



Will the team's hard work pay off? Will they be able to succesfully transform into koroks? Find out in Part 43 of the Parody.

Thoo, I'm just checking in. My IE is all screwy, but I'll hopefully be able to do a grass reveiw tommorrow.

Opinion: A bit below average, I think.

All right m8, be advised I may have to finish this after school.

GRASS' COMEDY WRITING GRADING RUBRIC OF DOOM
Used by Kekenkenka
HUMOR: (35/40)


General Humor: (15/20)
Was it funny in general?

I much prefer your new style to your old one. If there's such a thing as too random, it was too random. Maybe I was just in a bad mood, but it seemed substandard to me... Who can say?

Originality: (10/10)
Were the jokes original, or were they just stolen or clichéd?

Well, Slippy's ham thing continued (GO HAM ) but other than that I didn't see any repeats.

Swearing, Violence, and Raciness: (10/10)
If there is no swearing, violence, or raciness, this gets a 10/10.
If there is, this is graded based upon how effective it is- if it’s only occasional and used properly, it gets a high grade, but if it appears too often or is confusing, it gets a low grade.

Maybe I'm forgetful butI didn't see any. I should do these right after I read a chapter, shouldn't I?

STORY: (29/30)


Characters and Personalities: (14/15)
Are the characters well-defined? Are they all unique and not clichéd? Do they add humor to the story, or do they not add much at all?

Yes, except for fox who still doesn't seem to have much of a personality. Maybe you should just have him in more?

Plot: (15/15)
If this story is a parody: Does the plot adhere well to the plot of the original story? Is it easy to understand what’s going on?
If this story is not a parody: Is the plot well-defined and easy to follow? Is it easy to understand what’s going on?

Yep, well enough. Although aquiring deku seeds was a bit stretched out, it was clearly supposed to be.

READABILITY: (30/30)


General Readability: (15/15)
Is there a space between each line of dialogue? Are action lines put in “*”s? Did the author make an effort to bold the name before each line of dialogue? Is it easy to read?

Yes, yes, missed a few, and yes.

Spelling and Grammar: (15/15)
Are there any notable spelling or grammar mistakes?

I didn't see any that weren't supposed to be there.

GRAND TOTAL: (94/100) A

That's the technicality of it. But I really didn't like this one as much as the one before it. I don't really know why.

Hey man, guess what! Grass PMed me around a week ago or something saying that he's slowly progressing through my parody. He told me that he'd bust out his rubric based on the later chapters. I hope he finishes the parody soon, 'cause I really wanna see what he thinks about it.

And just to clarify a little, I purposely gave Fox a sort of....neutral and indefenite personality. I wanted him to be a serious character, with his personality varying on the situation. Remember what happened to him back in the Forbidden Woods? He became all crazy because Krystal liked him like that. So yeah, that should sort of clear up the confusion.

Ok. And, hey, since you like random things, here's an English to NOOB!!1!! OMG OMG WTF LOL!!!11! translator. It does this:

Originally Posted by english

Hurrah for ManWithThoo's parody! It rocks!

Originally Posted by NOOB

HURAH FOR MANWITHTHOS PARODY1!1111! WTF IT IS TEH ROKN3S1!!!!!!! OMG WTF

TIME TO BUST OUT MY RUBRIC!

Kekenkenka, thanks for taking good care of it ;D To be honest, my rubric is more for looking at an entire parody rather than just the latest chapter; that's why it takes so long to fill out. XD But whatever.

Anyways, here it is. This rubric will be focusing on your latest chapters since they will more accurately represent your work. :]



GRASS' COMEDY WRITING GRADING RUBRIC OF DOOM


HUMOR: (37/40)


General Humor: (18/20)
Was it funny in general?

Of course! You've definitely got the humor thing down. I've docked you points for your randomness. In many places, it's far too random. Peppy's completely random lines are becoming a bit overused... you could at least make them somewhat relevant to what's being discussed, otherwise, they're just awkwardly random and not too funny.

Also, you tend to extrapolate on random ideas too much, which deviates from the plot. This last chapter, however, was better in that respect, so hopefully that'll improve.

In general, I recommend that you cut down on complete randomness, so that the parody seems more coherent.


Originality: (10/10)
Were the jokes original, or were they just stolen or clichéd?

Originality is not a problem at all. :]

Swearing, Violence, and Raciness: (9/10)
If there is no swearing, violence, or raciness, this gets a 10/10.
If there is, this is graded based upon how effective it is- if it’s only occasional and used properly, it gets a high grade, but if it appears too often or is confusing, it gets a low grade.

Sometimes the violence is overdone... But not often enough to dock more than one point. Just watch out for it, that's all.

STORY: (24/30)


Characters and Personalities: (15/15)
Are the characters well-defined? Are they all unique and not clichéd? Do they add humor to the story, or do they not add much at all?

Your personalities are great. Even though Slippy and Peppy are both the "retards" of the group, they still have distinct personalities. And everyone else does, as well. Good job!

Plot: (9/15)
If this story is a parody: Does the plot adhere well to the plot of the original story? Is it easy to understand what’s going on?
If this story is not a parody: Is the plot well-defined and easy to follow? Is it easy to understand what’s going on?

Mkay. Here's where I think your weakness is. :\ I decided to write about it here rather than in the humor section.

You've got good twists for your dungeons and all. The problem is, you focus too much on the twists and not enough on the dungeons. Aside from including enemies and bosses in the themes, sometimes I find myself not even knowing which dungeon the four are going through while reading the chapter!

Really try to make it clearer what exactly they're doing. For example, in the Deku Baba Seed part, it was very understandable what they were doing. But in the Earth Temple school part, I had no idea

And, also, the Deku Baba Seed part was a bit dragged out as well, but at least we knew what was going on. But that's another problem- sometimes, you drag your jokes out too long, and that makes you deviate from the plot even further, making it too confusing.

Sorry for being a bit harsh on this section, I just felt you needed to take special care of this.

READABILITY: (30/30)


General Readability: (15/15)
Is there a space between each line of dialogue? Are action lines put in “*”s? Did the author make an effort to bold the name before each line of dialogue? Is it easy to read?

Yup. Sometimes you forget to bold, like, a name or two. It leads me to beleive that you're actually manually doing them...

Exactly how are you bolding the names? Do you bold them right before you type the name? Because that's quite painstaking. If I were you, I'd type it in word, then do a Ctrl+F to replace "Falco:" wich "[b]Falco[ /b]", for example. Much easier! (I dunno if this is what you're doing already, and maybe you just slipped up once or twice, but whatever.)

No points taken off here.

Spelling and Grammar: (15/15)
Are there any notable spelling or grammar mistakes?

Nothing significant!

GRAND TOTAL: (91/100) A-


You've been doing awesome, MWT. You've got great formatting, great humor, and you've kept personalities consistent all throughout. You really need to work on the randomness and the plot cohesion, though!




As for publicity? I would recommend providing a download link for all the current chapters or something. Having to read through so many chapters must be intimidating for people. Reading through them on a word document would be much nice for them.

Well, good luck! I'll periodically drop comments in here, so see ya!

OHMIGOSH, Grass! You finally commented! Thank you so much!

Yup, that last rubric-busting of yours really helped me out a lot. Don't worry about being too harsh to me, though. I really appreciate all the good critiscism your giving me at the moment. And while I'm quite a little depressed that I got a lower score than last time, I knew that was coming, anyway. I've been so busy with school and stuff that I haven't had the time to focus on this parody. Hopefully I'll be able to gather enough time to focus more on the parody. Hopefully.....

So yeah, thank you so very much for your input! It really helped me out.

I feel useless now
Sort of....
Not really....

Just dropping in! I wish I'd learned a bit sooner the rubric wasn't for individual chapters... oh well. Maybe it still helped But then again, I haven't seen Grass since his parody was shut down until it reopened, so how could I have known?

Hey thoo I remember this Parody on gamefaq's now its deleted and I dont want this one deleted on here! You may not remember me from the WW board on gamefaq's. My username there was Suicunes_wrath. now i hang out here heh anyway i am going to vote this the best parody!

Kewl.

MwT, what's the deal on updates? WB?
Have Apotheus nip in with a bunch of Horus guards, snag up Makar and carry him to the Wind Temple. The guys have to join up with the evil Ori to spirit him back to safety, incidentaly completeing the temple in the process. Or something crazy like that.

Yep, I've been on a Stargate binge (SG-1, not that bloody Atlantis). Do the Phillipines get Sci-Fi?

I think thats a great plot!
Im a Stargate fan too.
I like SG1, but Atlantis is getting stupid recently...thier 1st season was the best....the 2nd was pretty good...but going down the drain since then.

Any ways... Im about...on...the 35th chapter right now. Its just sooo LONG ... I LOVE IT!
MwT, this parody rocks!

Originally Posted by man_with_thooo

KoRL: So dawgs, how was that trip of yours?

Slippy: It was alright. How's Fox?

KoRL: Yo, he got owned by a gross chemical dawg!

Peppy: Yeah, like....I gave him all my hamstrings.

Fox: And trust me, they taste horrible!

I dont know why but I laughed so hard at this it made me have tears rolling down my eyes!

MwT, where are you? We haven't had an update in weeks, it doesn't seem unreasonable to ask for one.

EDIT I just checked your user thingygummit, it says you were on today. NO EXCUSES. :glare

Yeah, I guess it's about time I check the thread and actually reply to it. So....what's wrong with the updates?

You see, I've been busy. Again. And this time, I really mean it. I joined a school play and I have to rehearse every day till 8:00 PM with my curfue(sp?) being at 9. My school plays arriving very soon.

But will I continue writing this once the play's done? Most likely, but we're still not completely sure. You see, I haven't really gotten the inspiration to write lately. And that's another reason the updates are coming so lately. Really, I don't know what could possibly inspire me to write even more.

If I don't continue this parody, I'll most likely write a shorter, better parody for PH or TP.

There are advantages making a new parody, though. When I started this parody, I wasn't able to gather enough fans during the early stage. This made the parody unknown during the later stage, and I was left with very few fans. I find it a little frustrating to spend my entire day writing a chapter which only five people would read. So if I ever start a new parody, I'll try to make sure start off better and gather more fans.

But just take note that not everything above is entirely certain.

Originally Posted by man_with_thooo

Yeah, I guess it's about time I check the thread and actually reply to it. So....what's wrong with the updates?

You see, I've been busy. Again. And this time, I really mean it. I joined a school play and I have to rehearse every day till 8:00 PM with my curfue(sp?) being at 9. My school plays arriving very soon.

But will I continue writing this once the play's done? Most likely, but we're still not completely sure. You see, I haven't really gotten the inspiration to write lately. And that's another reason the updates are coming so lately. Really, I don't know what could possibly inspire me to write even more.

If I don't continue this parody, I'll most likely write a shorter, better parody for PH or TP.

There are advantages making a new parody, though. When I started this parody, I wasn't able to gather enough fans during the early stage. This made the parody unknown during the later stage, and I was left with very few fans. I find it a little frustrating to spend my entire day writing a chapter which only five people would read. So if I ever start a new parody, I'll try to make sure start off better and gather more fans.

But just take note that not everything above is entirely certain.

We germans are strong,brave,big,fat?...errr scratch that...
Well I can give you some ideas serously there are plenty of things you can do its just that you got a life and I dont..serously all I do is be on the computer 24/7 and eat soup besides that I am actually trying online dating(Not doing so good...). If you ever try making another parody make sure it has starfox in it ok because I love those guys and you wont get acused(Sp?) of copying grass's parody because everybody says that if you have atleast three links(Or four) it means your copying grass's parody.

Well goodluck!

Doh! Well, if you do start a new parody, make sure you PM me. I don't usually check the forums at large.

Also, have you looked at your sig shop lately? You left a request hanging, I think.