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Old 06-11-2012, 12:10 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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Would anyone be willing to look over Drow? Pinkie Pie's asked before in the critique section, but no one has laid even one comment on the story.

...makes Pinkie Pie feel bad... for all the critiques she's dished out...
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Old 06-11-2012, 02:12 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

I'll check it out! I know the feel of not getting any feedback at all, especially when its something you really want feedback on.
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Old 06-11-2012, 02:12 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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Would anyone be willing to look over Drow? Pinkie Pie's asked before in the critique section, but no one has laid even one comment on the story.

...makes Pinkie Pie feel bad... for all the critiques she's dished out...
I can take a look at it later today. I need something good to read, anyway!
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Old 06-11-2012, 03:00 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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Would anyone be willing to look over Drow? Pinkie Pie's asked before in the critique section, but no one has laid even one comment on the story.

...makes Pinkie Pie feel bad... for all the critiques she's dished out...
Drow is really really hard to critique. With my stuff, you can find something wrong with it pretty quickly. Someone better than me (Devoid, Shadow, Red Shadows etc), eh, give me thirty minutes and a finicky attitude, and I can probably find something to critique. It might be minor, but I'll find something. But Drow...

I'll give it a shot. No guarantees I'll be able to help, though.
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Old 06-14-2012, 07:20 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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I like writing super-serious Legend of Zelda fanfiction. Cold, manipulative Zelda. Undead, apathetic Ganondorf.

SUPER.

SERIOUS.
Where can you find some of this?
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Old 06-14-2012, 10:29 PM
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Where can you find some of this?
If you want it, you can find the link in Pinkie Pie's signature.

She's more interested in feedback for Drow, however.
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Old 06-14-2012, 10:34 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

Well i have written some lyrics for zelda songs so may someone critique them. I have also written some yaoi what all my friends said was my masterpiece of a relationship between Link and Ganondorf.
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Old 06-14-2012, 10:49 PM
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Well i have written some lyrics for zelda songs so may someone critique them. I have also written some yaoi what all my friends said was my masterpiece of a relationship between Link and Ganondorf.
Pinkie Pie is more comfortable critiquing prose, if you want to provide it.

...Drow is still there... if someone would be willing...
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Old 06-14-2012, 10:55 PM
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I can't put the story it have to much sexual themes. Sure i read later because i'm using a ipod.
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:01 PM
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I can't put the story it have to much sexual themes. Sure i read later because i'm using a ipod.
...oh.

It's one of those stories?
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:05 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

Yes is one of those stories.
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:13 PM
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Yes is one of those stories.
...is half the story sex?
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:18 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

Like a third and a half actually.
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:31 PM
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Like a third and a half actually.
You should try cutting it down to... 1%.

Stories should never depend on sex to fill the pages, not unless you're writing for Harlequin Erotic. Sex is a minor aspect of storytelling. You should spend most of the story building up believable chemistry between Link and Ganondorf (which you'd have to do quite well, since the uncanonicity of the pairing disgusts Pinkie Pie), culminating in a sex scene that you might not even need to include.
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Old 06-14-2012, 11:39 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

I know i changed that in my other stories. I'm thinking of destroying that one of Link and Ganondorf and make a new cleaner one.
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Old 06-15-2012, 09:50 AM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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Sex is a minor aspect of storytelling.
This is a subjective opinion. While in my own writing, I haven't used the act itself as much of a device, there are plenty of novels out there that have successfully used sexuality to drive the plot.

My real advice, if you're going in that direction: Be tasteful. Don't waste.
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Old 06-15-2012, 09:54 AM
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I'd have to agree with Holden.
In general (art of all kindzzzz), I think sex and sexuality has it's place. It's a big part of the human experience for a lot of people and there are other themes that can be explored through implementation of a sexual theme.

If you're writing smut, you're writing smut (not that there's anything wrong with that!)
But you can definitely write about sex, sexuality, sex acts, and have them contribute to the plot and development of characters.

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Old 06-15-2012, 01:20 PM
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Actually thr first time they do it they noticed they liked each other. The second is in their honeymoon in the sacred realm. Thats all actually.
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Old 06-15-2012, 04:17 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

Heya awesome people.

Is there anybody to whom I can go to get the general plot of my Destruction Tide mulled over? I want to get an idea of whether or not the idea is worth continuing with. I was going to ask Pinkie or Shadow or Devoid, but then I realised that this many spoilers would ruin it.

Essentially, critics are needed for a fairly detailed synopsis that will completely ruin the story for anyone reading it.

Also, Pinkie, I'm trying to criticise Drow. So far I'm failing.
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Old 06-15-2012, 05:02 PM
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Re: The Writers' Pad II: One Thread to Rule Them All

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Gimme another one!
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