[Or] [ZuNoWriMo] When And How

[FONT="Tahoma"]This is not so much a continuation of my NaNoWriMo attempt as a whole new kick-off with the same general idea (although I kept the same title because I love it). It's very nonsensical and if there are any physics involved, they're more than likely very, very wrong.

Enjoy!
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Since ZuNo is over, I removed my chapter just because.

Interesting. Very interesting. ^_^

Though, I think you could've gone softer on usage of "Sub-lieutenant." When it's first implied that they have a weird rank like that, "Lieutenant" or plain old "sir" is fine to use afterwards. ^_^

That's some serious writing skills right there. Myself, I'm way too lazy to paint a picture the way you do. Keep up the good work

I adore the dialogue. Scrupulously polite, with neither speaker forgetting to "sir" or "Sub-Lieutenant" the other - and such smiles as they exchange! And yet, for all their etiquette, rancour in its palest form flows like stream water! I love it love it love it. The ease of the writing is doubly wonderful. Looking forward to more!

Thanks for your comments, guys!
You're absolutely right, Blizzie. I think Lt. or Mr. Dunman would have been more appropriate, but the repetition of Sub-Lt. amused me when I was writing.