Okay Golgoroth, I'll pass you, because for good news' sake, your event was major, and therefore, passable. However, you were tiptoeing along the edge of failure canyon if this were to be a real roleplay. You follow in your classmate's (Muzzy and Alatian's) footsteps because you describe this event with a lot of detail but not a lot of room for other roleplayers to join unless they try to muscle their way in. I think you are also close to having this become a minor event since the basic premise is: Steal, keep. There's a lot of room for emotions here, which are usually good things in roleplays to develop your character.
For instance, does he feel wrongly taking his master's sword after earning his trust? Consider taking it back? Does he not care? You have to brainstorm ways of having your character grow through this event, not just something happen in which he remains the same. If you have the time, I would like for you to read this roleplay . Take note of the users Reih S'emit and Fish Head particularly as you do. You'll notice how difficult it becomes for them to integrate themselves into the roleplay. This is what I'm talking about earlier when I discuss your character being involved. It is important to leave leeway for people to join, and usually not set parts for them. Before I start on a rant, since I don't know what Coyote's next lesson is for you, I'll stop here, but just keep that in mind. If you have any questions, feel free to contact me.
Tarok had been running from the enemy, but also towards them. He had finally found his dad. He had slipped into the city in the cover of darkness and found the dungeon. He started down to the darkest depths of it. He started looking in the cells, and found him. He was lying the cell in a pool of fresh blood, dead. He was in shock. They had heard Tarok was coming and decided to kill his dad. There was a maniacal laughter echoing down the dungeon. Then the door slammed and there was complete darkness.
Major event= yes. This guy's Dad was just killed and he has been locked into the dungeon in complete darkenss. NEXT TIME ON!- Buuuut you don't really leave much leeway for anyone to join in. Everything seems too plotted out, almost to the point of a character fic with a sad/anticlimactic ending. Not to say this couldn't become a rp with a little tweaking, and you did fulfill the requirements, so you do get a shiny sticker. Yay you. PM Coyote for your next assignment.
As my students have probably noticed by now, there was an extended period of time recently during which I could not log onto my account. There was a whole password hooplah and it just got sorted out, thanks to the lovely miss Aikies over in Staff Relations Management (no, that's not a real staff job ... or is it?). I don't know where anyone is on their assignments. Please post up here letting me know what's going on, if you're still a part of the class.
Calore has heard of The Dome in passing while on his travels. His curiosity has gotten the better of him and he has decided to pay it a visit. While exploring the multidimensional landscapes of The Dome, he comes across a peculiar looking creature. This creature has certain similarities to a wolf, but doesn't seem as fit to live in the wild as wolves do. It also doesn't look very intimidating to him. He stays to do a sort of study on the creature. He tests its reactions to various things he does. It seems very intelligent to him.
After he has studied the animal a bit, it starts running towards a forest. Cale follows it into the forest, and overhears someone. It's very lucky the forest is dense, because the person would probably have seen Cale otherwise. He hears the man (and possibly someone else) talking about trying to find this creature, which they call a dog. From what Cale can gather, this is a domesticated animal that is not normally intelligent, and they've been experimenting with it, trying to see if it's possible to increase an animal's intelligence.
This puts Cale in a dilemma. He is very curious, and knows what it's like to crave information, but he also doesn't like that the dog is being experimented on, because he doesn't know how it affects the dog. The dog doesn't seem to like it. Cale must figure out whether he wants to give the dog up to the man/men, or keep it from harm. Along the way, he may find people who are on either side, who can put pressure on him to decide one way or the other.
Alright—there are two major problems with your write-up for this assignment.
1.) You missed the primary point of the assignment. The assignment was to come up with an idea for an important, life-changing event in the life of your character. None of what you came up with is particularly life-changing.
2.) The opening post for this, as a roleplay, would be either obscenely long or very badly done. There is no real in-between option. You planned it out so that the bulk of your idea takes place in the very beginning, before ever an opening shows up for another person to bring in their own character and ideas.
Something you need to think about with your roleplaying is that you are not really writing about life, only with magic—or life, only with swords—or life, only with dragons and big forests of death. You are writing about a character who, for whatever bogus reason you want to invent, is taking part in an ongoing saga of life-changing event after life-changing event. For that reason, every roleplay should be an opportunity for you to irrevocably alter the path of your character's life. If you don't take advantage of the opportunity, you waste a good roleplay.
All in all, you did not do badly on this assignment. It would probably make a good roleplay if you trimmed some of the opening post and made a very flimsy framework for where it might go from then on—and, despite what I've said, it might become a life-changing roleplay. You never know.
Your next assignment will be forthcoming. Take some time to think about this one and, if you have questions, PM me. In the meantime, I'd suggest finding someone to roleplay with you. If you can't find anyone, either Sakume or I will.