The Legend of Tenshi

Welcome to my sprite comic, this is my first one, but I'm giving it my best shot, I just want to entertain, so if you do read it, please tell me. And yes, I know the beginning seems like a generic plot, but please bear with me, it will spiral into something else. Something much greater. Anyway, that's enough of a description, its comic time!

Episode List:
Episode 1

Extras:
Sprite Clash?

The one thing I would suggest is centering the text inside of the bubbles more - sometimes the text is too high/low or almost falls out of the bubble. Besides that, looks like this should be good. I'm looking forward to seeing your character develop, as well as the "spiral".

GoldStud, Semi-Juggalo strikes back! To arms! To arms!

Zaiku, I'd suggest renting a few body guards until blizz, gs, and lurrrre! run out of ammo. =x

I think your comic's start is as expected, as most comics start off that way: introducing the plot in a slightly funny and "classic" way. At this point, the comic could head down south or ascend to that of greatness. But I give you three options:

Linkmaster30000's way: You should make some shotty graphics and make the humor and plot great, but with this option you will be expected to update you're comic very frequently. But with more comics, comes more joy.

Blizz's way: Make the comic pretty, have a good plot and funny: and take a lot of time with each comic. You'll have to pour your heart and soul to update these comics, because it takes a lot of work! But in the long run, it will become super!

-or-

Somewhere in the middle: From the looks of your comics, it seems you've chosen this path. The comic will have shotty graphics (your link and custom) but will have some cool effects (blurring.) The comic will be issued to a 1:2 ratio with linkmaster30000 and will kind of blend in with the shanty.

Think about it this way:

If I were to give the comics grades I would do as follows

Linkmaster30000's way - B -
blizz's way - A -
yours - C -

A C is average and there really won't be a high point in your comic. It'll be average. Some people will enjoy it, and others will seek other people with better grades.

You could change the way it's going, but if not, please, prove me wrong. Keep us interested.

- Will

You forgot GoldStud's way, which is very much like mine, except he finishes within a fraction of the time it takes for me.

Yeah. I pretty much pushed GS' way in with yours, because you both receive the same "grade"

Originally Posted by William

Zaiku, I'd suggest renting a few body guards until blizz, gs, and lurrrre! run out of ammo. =x

I think your comic's start is as expected, as most comics start off that way: introducing the plot in a slightly funny and "classic" way. At this point, the comic could head down south or ascend to that of greatness. But I give you three options:

Linkmaster30000's way: You should make some shotty graphics and make the humor and plot great, but with this option you will be expected to update you're comic very frequently. But with more comics, comes more joy.

Blizz's way: Make the comic pretty, have a good plot and funny: and take a lot of time with each comic. You'll have to pour your heart and soul to update these comics, because it takes a lot of work! But in the long run, it will become super!

-or-

Somewhere in the middle: From the looks of your comics, it seems you've chosen this path. The comic will have shotty graphics (your link and custom) but will have some cool effects (blurring.) The comic will be issued to a 1:2 ratio with linkmaster30000 and will kind of blend in with the shanty.

Think about it this way:

If I were to give the comics grades I would do as follows

Linkmaster30000's way - B -
blizz's way - A -
yours - C -

A C is average and there really won't be a high point in your comic. It'll be average. Some people will enjoy it, and others will seek other people with better grades.

You could change the way it's going, but if not, please, prove me wrong. Keep us interested.

- Will

Thank you for the advice, I do make my comics on photoshop and they do take time to make. However, since this is my first comic, I can't be expected to be all that good. However, I'm not making an excuse for myself.

I have a busy school life, so assignments and whatnot are always keeping me down. But, I try and make them as quickly as possible.

Also I'd like to know, is it bad to use the Semijuggalo / MMZ style?

However, I will then aspire to do my comic Blizz's way. Yeah, I'll take my time, centre everything and make everything look like its in top form.

Again, Thank you for the advice.

Welcome to the Shanty Town!

Also I'd like to know, is it bad to use the Semijuggalo / MMZ style?

Semi-Juggalo Link = Blasphemy. An abomination to the world of spriting and all things lovely and good in the universe.

A lot of people use it because it's "Adult Link" as opposed to any other sprite (from LA, LoZ, MC, or LttP).

The sprites look awkward more than anything. I would never suggest them, if only because their "standing still" sprites are either looking backwards or looking like they're ready to battle at the drop of a pin (or poop a brick). And, like Megaman, his mouth is always open, leading to a lack of expressive freedom when looking at his face.

At least, those are my problems with that particular brand.

I liked it and the speech bubbles where good and it was very intertaining though I'd go with a diffent link or so, but over all because the storys kicking off 5.7/10

Here's some pointers for you. They may not cover every critisicm I have with your comic, but it's a good start giving you something to consider for your next comic:

-Make tails on the speech bubbles. It's not hard to do even in Paint, and it's a cinch in PhotoShop. The only thing you rely on now to tell who's talking is colored text, which is alright, but not enough by itself, especially when the text colors don't contrast much.
-Be a bit more dynamic with your scenes. The first six panels are all the same. I liked the effect in the seventh panel a lot, but you should have done some effects like close-ups or movement in the other panels to keep it from getting boring.
-Work on the humor a bit. I know that's something that's relative and hard to criticize, but c'mon. Surely you can come up with better ideas that "Your Mom..." jokes.

As far as the SemiJ Link sprites go, they aren't HORRIBLE, like everyone in this thread is saying, but they're not great, either, and they're terribly overused. If they conform best to your style, then use them, but there's a lot better sprites out there that you should look at before making a decision.

That all being said, I really am looking forward to your next comic.

Originally Posted by Mr. Fish

Here's some pointers for you. They may not cover every critisicm I have with your comic, but it's a good start giving you something to consider for your next comic:

-Make tails on the speech bubbles. It's not hard to do even in Paint, and it's a cinch in PhotoShop. The only thing you rely on now to tell who's talking is colored text, which is alright, but not enough by itself, especially when the text colors don't contrast much.
-Be a bit more dynamic with your scenes. The first six panels are all the same. I liked the effect in the seventh panel a lot, but you should have done some effects like close-ups or movement in the other panels to keep it from getting boring.
-Work on the humor a bit. I know that's something that's relative and hard to criticize, but c'mon. Surely you can come up with better ideas that "Your Mom..." jokes.

As far as the SemiJ Link sprites go, they aren't HORRIBLE, like everyone in this thread is saying, but they're not great, either, and they're terribly overused. If they conform best to your style, then use them, but there's a lot better sprites out there that you should look at before making a decision.

That all being said, I really am looking forward to your next comic.

Yes, the Mom jokes were gonna be a running gag thing from Tenshi, but they ARE lame, so screw it.

I'll take all of that into consideration and improve my next episode. The only problem is the SemiJ Link sprites, they are simply a common and easy style to work with, and all the other sprites I have are MMZ and SemiJ. Especially Tenshi, having to sprite him all over again in a different style would be hell, and I'm only an intermediate spriter, so that would be too difficult.

not true how ever!
Tenshi is an edit of semi so the pooses are already there just like goldstuds link sprites there all there, and editing isn't to difficulte I know customs are hell but fun edits are well an edits not as grand as the original!

but what ever your comic dude , just make speech bubble tails and the transparincy thing isn't the best, I did it but it wasn't as good as a fat marshmallow cloud!

agreed on all fronts. :3

Ok, transperancy also scratched, this is my first sprite comic, so I appreciate all the help and advice I can get. I've also decided to use a more comic-like font:

"ACME Secret Agent"

Originally Posted by Dr. Fish

As far as the SemiJ Link sprites go, they aren't HORRIBLE, like everyone in this thread is saying, but they're not great, either, and they're terribly overused.

That's one of the key reasons why they are HORRIBLE.

That, and they're ugly as sin.

At least their posture is good! [/sarcasm]

Yeah. That's where I love them the most. [/alsosarcasm]

Hey that's cool i got a sprite comic named after me. ^_^ but anyway good work!

If you're looking for a replacement Link that looks good, try this. Ultimately, it's your decision what style of Link you'd like to use, but these offer more customization options and good poses. Just a thought.