A Brave New World

[Klaz]

My attempt at a serious, adventure sprite comic...
Warning: From now on, this comic has a PG-13 worthy content.
This is the link to the past comics...

[Knightmare_63]

1st one to post!!!!!!



This sounds like an old anime showe I saw....the king dies.
But he was crazed.^_^

[Lurrrre!]

I like it goump 7.8 and your speech bubbles are nice!

[Genshai_GFX]

hmm, Its good, but could be a LOT better.

It has pottential, beleive me that, but pottential isnt everything. Some tips to improve:

1. Dont mix bittages. This means keep all sprites styled by the same game sorta thing. So if its in the style of sonic the hedgey, keep everyone looking in that style. Doesnt mean everyone has to be hedgeys, just means it has to be same style of shading and stuff.

2. Make sure you always resize panels correctly. If you dont, it just looks messy and horrible, like in 3-5 of the third comic.

3. Try not to call characters like Birdie their actual names, and try to at least recolor them. The only time ya can do this is when you are making a comic about Games.

4. Simple Logical things. Like dorms. You dont normaly get men and women sharing one dorm.

5. Too much black space. at least two panels were wasted in the third comic.

6. Dont use REAL backgrounds in a SPRITE comic, unless you know what you are doing, like 'Goldstud' or 'Lurrre!'

[Klaz]

Here's another one... thanks for the comments.
I'd appreciate writing tips a lot, actually, since the writing hasn't convinced me much.

[William]

teehee "irrelevant" :3

[Klaz]

Ok, 5th page.

[William]

only thing i can complain about is that the main character should say "a lot" not "lots." that way it makes it more serious, little things like that make all the difference.

[Klaz]

Originally Posted by icehockeygoalie

only thing i can complain about is that the main character should say "a lot" not "lots." that way it makes it more serious, little things like that make all the difference.

You know, reading that line I've noticed that he says lots people instead of lots of people, a typo. I'll put a fixed version later.

[Klaz]

7th comic is up.

[Lurrrre!]

I liked it
for a serouse comic it has potental and crono is cool along with his head being smashed in. 7.9

[Klaz]

Here's the 8th page. Politics!

[Klaz]

...and there's the 9th page.
The old comics have been taken out of my first post to not overload this thread, but you can read, comment, and rate them in the link I provided.

EDIT: The 10th page.
Warning: From now on, this comic has a PG-13 worthy content.