Bizzare Converse Pokémon Comic (For all, Whee!)

Umm... it was unnamed until... thirty seconds ago! It's my first (hopefully) sorta' good comic. ^^' I just finished the first part.



I hope you liked it... and I will be adding more. Please post helpful things... I'm not good with spriting on Photoshop (Photoshop Elements 2.0, to be precise)!

Oh, and if there's speech but no bubble, it's a thought.

Ahh, okay,this is pretty good, I can't see flaws at the moment but I can see no plot yet. I hope this comic wil get a great plot!

Wow, nice BG. And your B-saur and Squirt Gun sprites are cool, although I hate Pokemon. The speech bubbles were good. The running frame was very cool also, I really liked that. However there were a few unneccessary frames that sorta made it drawn out in a bad way, like butter scraped over too much bread. Frames 2 + 3 could have been combined, and 5 was not needed at all. Not like its a big deal, but I'm here to make your comic better. Another thing is that swirly vortex frame. You really could have done something cooler than that. But it's all good w/me. Oh and the *insert swirly vortex sound here* was almost not quite funny. Maybe just put swirly vortex noise. Go to blambot.com for some better fonts too.

But its really not that bad! I'm just the overly critical dude tryin' to be critical n' stuff.

A Pocket Monster comic with actual Pocket Monsters! This would probably be a first for me!

Originally Posted by GoldStud

However there were a few unneccessary frames that sorta made it drawn out in a bad way, like butter scraped over too much bread. Frames 2 + 3 could have been combined...

I heavily disagree. I can tell that thought and creativity were put into this sprite comic. For instance, the second panel sets the mood of the scene (old, abandoned, and you could easily imagine birds chirping and/or the breeze blowing). It is also a fade-in from the first panel, which shows technique; moreover, it shows the author's creativity. If you combined the second and third panel, the transition betwen the first and now fused panel would be too sudden, dull, and lazy. As a student of videography, I have learned that transitions are very important and can be used in other works of art besides movies. Also, comics are related to movies with the fact that they are basically storyboards with word balloons. The reference to Bilbo Baggins with the butter over too much bread is not the case here.

Originally Posted by GoldStud

...and 5 was not needed at all

I highly disagree yet again. Panel five is important for two (if not more) reasons:

One: It suggests motion between itself and panel six. A definate plus.
Two: Panel five is suspensful in an exciting way. Is Bulbasaur going to touch the shiny? Shoud he run away? Will he fall into a pit or trigger a giant boulder to chase him Indiana Jones style? Though you could probably guess what's going to happen, the excitement of suspense is still there. You never know when the author will trick the reader.

As you can see, keeping these two panels apart makes things more interesting. To combine them would be dull and lazy. Also, the comic wouldn't be as smooth of a read as it is now. I'm for smooth reading instead of wondering what the heck happened to trigger an action between panels.

Overall, I really liked your comic. I don't think I've ever seen a sprite comic that mixed Zelda with Pokémon. As a fan of both, I find it an interesting mix. To me, the eighth panel was rather humorous. My only real complaint is that the action in panels three and four. I think it would have been awesome to show a close-up view of the shiny between those two panels. Though such a technique is not needed, it would definately add spice while removing doubts about what the heck Bulbasaur is running to. I also felt that the "when it goes away" was uneccessary because panel nine reinforces and is reinforced by the second panel it terms of the place being quiet and deserted once more. That could also have been helped by having panel nine just like panel two (without anything) and have Squirtel show up the very next panel. But since you reached the end of the comic and probably don't want an uneven amount of panels, I completely understand.

Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to seeing how this comic goes. Also, if you have any questions and/or need any help with Photoshop, don't hesitate to send me a PM! I have Elements 3.0, so you should be right up my alley. I'd be glad to be of service.

Thats pretty good. I agree with Blizzaga's points on what GoldStud said. I read the comic first and it was really good. Not many people do that. I don't really know what I could add.

I hope Vaati appears from the shiny.

Originally Posted by Blizzaga

Overall, I really liked your comic. I don't think I've ever seen a sprite comic that mixed Zelda with Pokémon. As a fan of both, I find it an interesting mix.

I liked the background... and I was feeling to lazy to keep searching. Oh, and the 'shiny' was also a Zelda sprite -- one of Ganon's... blasty-things from OoT.

Originally Posted by Vaati

I hope Vaati appears from the shiny.

Who knows...? I'm not really thinking of really combining Zelda and Pokémon, but that could change.

Well, the choice is yours of course. It would be interesting to see how the pocket monsters would fare in the Zelda universe. A good source of humor would be them in the background doing all the hard work and Link getting all the credit. What if Link caught them with a Hylian Ball or something like unto it? That could be funny as well.

Whatever you choose to do with your comic, I'll be sure to keep an eye on it and see how it.

Sorry it took so long, but it's done. Stupid Photobucket resized it, so the sprites don't look so good. >.> Anyways, I noticed I like trying to show motion a little lot... X3



In case you can't read Bulbasaur's final quote due to the resize: 'We're both far from home... And it's gonna be a long trop back!'

*Laughs*

I truly enjoyed reading these. ^-^ They were funny and very well done.

The second comic wins, especially Panel 4.

Bulbasur's expression is priceless, keep it up! ^^

Originally Posted by Kalimar

One: It suggests motion between itself and panel six. A definate plus.
Two: Panel five is suspensful in an exciting way. Is Bulbasaur going to touch the shiny? Shoud he run away? Will he fall into a pit or trigger a giant boulder to chase him Indiana Jones style? Though you could probably guess what's going to happen, the excitement of suspense is still there. You never know when the author will trick the reader.

As you can see, keeping these two panels apart makes things more interesting. To combine them would be dull and lazy. Also, the comic wouldn't be as smooth of a read as it is now. I'm for smooth reading instead of wondering what the heck happened to trigger an action between panels.

That's well written and all, but all I'm saying is that something else could happen, to make it more interesting, or suspenseful. As much suspense as there is in two identical panels, since there's nothing to catch your eye in either panel you breeze over both of them at once and you can see the second panel while you read the first. Its not like pages in a book, or TV, where you're forced to wait. Its just a waste of space. No big deal, but unecessary.

Originally Posted by Kalimar

I think it would have been awesome to show a close-up view of the shiny between those two panels. Though such a technique is not needed, it would definately add spice while removing doubts about what the heck Bulbasaur is running to.

Why? That would be dull and lazy. Having no close up of the shiny suggests that there is no movement and it is exciting in a suspenseful way. What is the shiny? Is it a trigger to open a pit? Will it release a boulder to chase him Indiana Jones style? Besides, the comic wouldn't be smooth anymore. I'm for smooth reading instead of wondering what the heck that shiny thing is for two panels and a close-up. It would be so confusing. Jeez, don't you people realize that some of us can't read very fast? Everything should be easy, simple, and done for us so that we can be entertained with absolutely no effort. [/KalimarImitation]

Just kidding. I think that you have... a point.

I liked the cookies in the background of Squirtle's (dang I can't believe I actually remember their names!) little emotional deal. Oh! And your effect of turning the background upside down to make it look like an aerial view as Squirtle fell was funny, too. I know I couldn't have come up with that.

Don't use Photobucket. Use maj instead.

What's Moj? Oh! XD Never mind. I'll check it out. Does it not resize? =O Photobucket didn't resize the first comic.

*is still thinking about how to explain reply to GoldStud* I'll post it once I can explain it better... >.>

Or just use the popular www.imageshack.us You just go there, upload your picture and it spits out a URL for it. Its that simple. It has a lenient 1.5MB limit with no resizes. Try it.

I meant to upload the third comic to a site other than photobucket yesterday, but I don't remember my hotmail address, it won't send to my AOL address or site address, and... *continues looking for a few min*



I changed the way I did text, but took away speech bubbles -- I got lazy. Don't worry, they'll be back next comic.