my new comic:pointless!

Finally, i have made my sprite comic!
here's the first issue!

Issue1: the start!


And now if you don't wanna scroll down and look, here're the links to other comics:

Issue 2
Issue 3
Issue 4
Issue 5
Issue 6
Issue 7
Issue 8
Issue 9
Issue 10
Issue 11
Issue 12
Issue 13
Issue 14
Issue 15
Issue 16
Issue 17
Issue 18
Issue 19
Issue 20
Issue 21

Spare time stuff:
Apology
Special Pointless sig!

and if you want: paste this into your sig and URL it:

It's really not bad. It could use some work, and get a background please! Oh, and try to put tails on your speech bubbles. I liked the blast and the way they talked back and forth. Oh, and you can give a character your name, but don't refer to him as the author until later on. Then it'll be better.

1. JPEG=bad. Save as PNG.
2. Backgrounds are nice.
3. Link's text color was too bright. make it darker.
4. Resize by percentages (highlight sprite>right click>Sketch/Skew)
5. The script was clichè and bad. Seriously, it was just put together in 5-10 minutes, wasn't it?
6. Randomness in NOT FUNNY. It can be, but you didn't do it right.
7. Make sure you put the text bubbles in the right order. starting from top left and going to bottom right.

I'm glad you decided to make a comic, Carge; however, I think you should have put some more time into it.

Sprites: 5/10

I like the idea of having your custom wizard sprite in there, but you did a poor job on resizing. I advise that you resize in percentages like 100%, 200%, and so on. It looks much better that way. Trust me. I learned this the hard way a long time ago. Also, the energy beam thing was poorly done. You can easily tell a piece was added at the end of it. Resize your energy sprites the same equal percentage, and you shouldn't have trouble with this in the future. Also, link doesn't have an arrow. You should make him one if you can't find any arrow sprites.

Background: 2/10

I feel bad for giving such a low grade, but this was by far the laziest part of the comic. I literally have a headache now from the brightness of that lime-green color. At least you have some background, so I didn't give you a zero here. I heavily advise you check out The Master Sword's link to Background HQ. Also try The Spriter's Resource. Backgrounds are very important in a comic. It's the first thing a reader notices while waiting for the comic to load up and before even reading it. It even has an impression while you're reading it, so a plain background (in this case, bright, headache-giving lime green background) could turn a reader off from enjoying the comic. Please go to these sites and check out the different backgrounds. It's fun to do and will make your comic look a whole bunch better.

Special Effects: 4/10

The special effects intertwine with sprites this time around, and that's because the only type of special effects were the energy blast and Link floating upside down. Both could have used more effort. You already know what I said about the kamehameha thing, but with Link floating upside town, the least you could have done was have two more panels of animation that show him turning upside down: One with him standing like normal, the second with him halfway, then the final with Link actually upside down. There are other ways, like transition panels, but I don't think that technique would have suited this comic as well as the former idea.

Text: 4/10

Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! I rarely approve of text coloring inside speech bubbles, and your choice of color for Link's dialogue doesn't help any when it's surrounded by the lime-green background. You can seriously give people headaches doing that by making their eyes strain so. It was very inappropriate in this case. Link would've been just fine with black-colored text (well...almost [see down below where I discuss word balloons]). Also, you had serious issues with the wizard's text on panels ten and eleven. It's a really good habit to go over and edit your comic before uploading. It will save you a lot of grief! Remember, there's no rush, so if you need more time, take more time.

Grammar/Spelling: 8/10

You almost scored a ten, but a minor error in the eighth and ninth panels kept you from a perfect score. Saying "ya" instead of "you" is the culprit. "You" only has one more letter than "ya," so why not go that extra mile? Link said "all mighty" instead of "almighty," which is the correct way to say that. Perfect spelling, though! You did a really great job in this area! The writing part is one of the things I look out for most in sprite comics.

Capitalization/Punctuation: 9/10

"Carge" and "Pointless" need to be capitalized with the first letters. I believe the colons in the named panels are used incorrectly. I'll have to get to you on that. Everything else was great! Oh, I won't mark you on this, but when Link is calling the wizard an almighty author, I believe the whole title should be capitalized like so:

"Almighty Author!"

It's nothing to argue about, because I think that it can go both ways. Just something to think about the next time you come across a similar situation.

Story: 5/10

I'm being very generous with this grade. There are two real big no-nos that you did here.

1: Don't introduce your comic that way. It is very lazy and shows a huge lack in creativity when the very first thing said "Hi! I'm Bob and this is my new sprite comic! Over to the left is George! He'll try to kill me in scene 24, but I already know about it so I can easily stop him!" Find more creative ways to introduce comics and characters instead of just introducing them and breaking the fourth wall like that.

2: I discourage the ideas of having the author being in his/her own comic. It's been done way too many times. You want to be in your own comic? Find something more creative. In my Zeldish comic, the heroes are based off me in some ways. You might try something like that.

Other than that, I kind of liked the going on a journey with the wizard idea. But don't you think it's a bit overused to start a comic that way? There are more creative ways for a team to form.

Balloons: 7/10

There were only two problems I found with your word balloons:

1: Why no tails? It would have looked so much better with tails that lead to the character that's speaking. And for a plus, you wouldn't have to worry about different colors with text.

2: What happened in panel ten? That box was a little messy. You can easily edit those you know. -1 point for laziness.


Panels: 4/10

You did a real poor job on the panels. A word of advice: trying making out your panels first. Make them even, proportional, and neat. If you feel compelled to make the panel large to fit in more dialogue, don't be afraid to make another panel with speech in there. It's a simple technique I use all the time in my comics.

Other: 6/10

Such randomness doesn't really get you anywhere, my friend. Unless you put more time and thought into it, you shouldn't really bother with it. If you wish to get better with random-funniness, I suggest ask GoldStud. His new comic "Arf!" is a good testament to his skills in random humor. Heck, he has whole plot (falling furniture) revolving around randomness!

Overall Score: 54/100

Comic Grade: F

Ouch! That's gotta hurt! I feel very bad for giving out such a low grade, but this comic needs much improvement. The biggest part you need to work on are backgrounds. Everyone starts out somewhere, so don't feel bad. Since you are a beginner, there is nothing to be ashamed of. Think of this as a great learning experience. Just do a better job next time. Fellow spriters will be more than happy to help you out! You need only to ask. I have faith that you can really learn from this and make a much better comic. I'm here for support if you need any! ^_^

Blizzaga, it still hurts me to see you make capitilization/punctuation separate from grammar/spelling. Capitilization, punctuation and spelling are all parts of grammar, so the other categories are really redundant. If grammar is so important, maybe you should understand it a little better.

Carge get a background! Your comic will be MUCH much better with a background. And don't save as JPG!!!

... I'm sorry, but i didn't get it at all... One minute their doing this, and then the next their talking about something else completly different... but it is your first comic, so i'll give you some slack. 6/10

Originally Posted by GoldStud

Blizzaga, it still hurts me to see you make capitilization/punctuation separate from grammar/spelling. Capitilization, punctuation and spelling are all parts of grammar, so the other categories are really redundant. If grammar is so important, maybe you should understand it a little better.

The reason I split them this time was so that he would get a better grade.

I forgot to mention the JPG deal! >.<

Oh well, I guess you can't cover everything.

Add blue to WHAT background?

I don't know if you did all this stuff on purpose just to make it funny or what? I going to have to agree with Blizzaga on this one. But don't judge a sprite comic by the first panel. So I can't wait to see the next issue.

Originally Posted by GoldStud

Blizzaga, it still hurts me to see you make capitilization/punctuation separate from grammar/spelling. Capitilization, punctuation and spelling are all parts of grammar, so the other categories are really redundant. If grammar is so important, maybe you should understand it a little better.

No it's not.

It seems that you still like to attack me so immaturely. Maybe you should understand a little better. Ka-chow!

Originally Posted by Blizzaga

Also, link doesn't have an arrow. You should make him one if you can't find any arrow sprites.

Link wasn't supposed to have an arrow in that scene, as is implied by the Author saying "Link, you don't have any arrows!"

Originally Posted by Blizzaga

Saying "ya" instead of "you" is the culprit. "You" only has one more letter than "ya," so why not go that extra mile?

I sort of disagree with this one. Some people actually say "ya" in real life. If his character is supposed to pronounce "you" as "ya" then he should spell it that way.

My my. There was tons I forgot to mention! A lot were on my mind, but I forgot them nonetheless.

Originally Posted by ShadowVaati

Link wasn't supposed to have an arrow in that scene, as is implied by the Author saying "Link, you don't have any arrows!"

That's right! I forgot to mention that. Don't worry though. I didn't dock points for it.

Originally Posted by ShadowVaati

I sort of disagree with this one. Some people actually say "ya" in real life. If his character is supposed to pronounce "you" as "ya" then he should spell it that way.

True. But I have a hunch that it was more out of habit then the actual reason of dialect.

Blizzaga, you are too easy on him. Far too easy. The story should get a 2, tops. It's the almighty author and the destroyer of all ZU comics - Link. And the comic even says 'pointless'.

Background should get a zero because there is no background.

The textboxes should've gotten a five. No tails is always bad.

In fact, if this is not a joke comic, I would question the author's intelligence.

I think it's more of a question of skill and experience, rather then intelligence.

Dude, this is not good. Random comics are only good if they're done well (and they should be about six panels).

The arrows joke was pretty solid, but it got lost in the jumble of this comic. It even inspired me to make an example of how that joke could have been done better.



This is just a suggestion on how to improve. And here's the secret to making a funny comic: A COMIC SHOULD ONLY HAVE ONE JOKE! Don't try to cram a joke into every panel, or it comes out horrible.

AM~