[Zorolo] Julia's Training

OoC: For the record, Julia's arms are immobilized. She can't use them, for she is wearing a straight jacket, and therefore lacks the ability to move her arms. People think she's crazy, cause of the straight jacket - but deep down, Julia isn't that crazy; and actually, she doesn't really have a good cause to be wearing a straight jacket. Read more on the profile for more informationzzz.

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The Beginning
Julia's Training

"Will she be okay, Doctor?" the bantered breath of Julia's mother escaped her lips as the question came out, "Will she get better?"

Julia felt the stinging sensation of tears rising to the lids of her eyes, and she blinked hard trying to fight them back. She felt so broken when she over heard the comments exchanged between her mother and the doctor she was assigned to see regularly since she was seven; and he always said the same thing, as if Julia had mental disabilities woven through her entire being - which she knew, was not true.

"Her mind is wrapping around things that even I cannot comprehend." the low voice of the doctor floated through the closed door, as him and her mother stood out in the hallway, "I'm afraid at this rate, she's only going to get worse."

Julia gripped the seat she was sitting on, her fingers damaging the cheap red leather of the examination table, squeaking as it crumpled. You're just jealous because I'm smarter than you. Julia's hard face melted and the tears came, slowly though, she calmed her heart and just stared at the door, the tears slipping down her cheeks, leaving salty trails. I hate you.

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The familiar stinging of tears barely reached Julia's eyes before she batted them back with her dark eyelashes. She's much older now than she was back in the days of her physiological analysis that landed her in the straight jacket she wears, and the reputation that serves under her name. However, she couldn't stop her brain from indulging into the past and bringing up the memories of her many doctor visits. That idiotic doctor caused her mother so much stress.

Julia shook her head, and decided to focus her attention to other things of greater cause - although that was borderline impossible. She did admire the weather. It was sunny, not a cloud in the sky but enough breeze to prevent any perspiration on her part. It went beautifully well with the sounds of her duck singing a deep vibration of Oprah music.

"I love how you choose the right moments to sing." Julia commented, smiling.

"Well, miss, we do share the same mind, so I know when you need it." Duck spoke, coolly.

"Mmm." the sound vibrated Julia's lip, as her tender reply. Her and her duck continued strolling, reaching past a community forest of small wild life, and sprawling gravel paths, and unto a vast field of green grass, with riddled rocks, and thick trees.

"Absolutely charming." Duck stated, walking under the shade of a nearby tree.

"Couldn't agree more."

"Oh."

"What?" Julia looked down at the exasperated reply of her duck and noticed that he was running full throttle ahead of her. His short stumby legs gaining an impressive amount of speed, considering how fat he was, "Follow me, miss."

Julia hated running, only for the simple fact that she looked like a total bamboo while she ran, her arms tied to her, unable to move. If she fell, it would hurt; she was used to running like this, so I guess you could say that she mastered it, "Where to?"

"Just keep up."

The two of them ran down grassy hills, and up grassy slopes, finally coming to an abrupt stop. Julia barely able to steady her breath, "What's going on?"

"I think I found something you might like."

Julia maneuvered through a small obstacle of bush and branch, blew her blond strains from her face and sighed as Duck came up behind her. "You see?"

She did see, and what she saw made her breath stop in her throat. A school? In the middle of nowhere? Hmm? Interesting. Julia looked down at Duck and shrugged, both of them eventually making their way to the entrance, not a clue of what was to come.

Cara-Mel :3 Hallo~ I’m the teacher’s assistant’s assistant. The post was already great, so I'll just be nitpickins x3

Julia felt the stinging sensation of tears rising to the lids of her eyes, and she blinked hard trying to fight them back. She felt so broken when she over heard the comments exchanged between her mother and the doctor she was assigned to see regularly since she was seven; and he always said the same thing, as if Julia had mental disabilities woven through her entire being - which she knew, was not true.

No comma need after ‘eyes’.

And ‘overheard’ is one word. x3

The familiar stinging of tears barely reached Julia's eyes before she batted them back with her dark eyelashes. She's much older now than she was back in the days of her physiological analysis that landed her in the straight jacket she wears, and the reputation that serves under her name. However, she couldn't stop her brain from indulging into the past and bringing up the memories of her many doctor visits. That idiotic doctor caused her mother so much stress.

Should be ‘straitjacket’ instead.

Julia shook her head, and decided to focus her attention to other things of greater cause - although that was borderline impossible. She did admire the weather. It was sunny, not a cloud in the sky but enough breeze to prevent any perspiration on her part. It went beautifully well with the sounds of her duck singing a deep vibration of Oprah music.

Comma not needed after ‘head’. And you meant ‘opera’, right? x33

"Well, miss, we do share the same mind, so I know when you need it." Duck spoke, coolly.

"Mmm." the sound vibrated Julia's lip, as her tender reply. Her and her duck continued strolling, reaching past a community forest of small wild life, and sprawling gravel paths, and unto a vast field of green grass, with riddled rocks, and thick trees.

No comma after ‘spoke’.

As for that statement, there’s something wrong with it—you could remove the comma or rewrite it entirely.

Something like:

‘“Mmm.” Julia replied tenderly, the sound vibrating her lip’

"What?" Julia looked down at the exasperated reply of her duck and noticed that he was running full throttle ahead of her. His short stumby legs gaining an impressive amount of speed, considering how fat he was, "Follow me, miss."

First of all, I think you meant ‘stumpy’ x3

And the sentence would sound better if you put a ‘were’ between ‘legs’ and ‘gaining’.


I think that’s it for now :3 Great job, Mel-Mel~ I’m sorry, I’ll be coming up with all sorts of names, now x3 You write really well :O When I’m ready (ie. not lazy), I’ll give you your first assignment.

Okie, assignment time!

Describe the exterior of the school. Julia sees something (you choose, it could be anyone/anything) in a window that motivates the two to enter. When they enter, have the door behind them disappear, and the interior is not what they saw through the window--this will be Julia and Duck's room in the dome from now on: describe it how you'd like--but you'd better make Julia and her Duck like it XD They'll be staying there from now on. It can be as insane as you want it, but I'd like you to do your best to describe it, I want to see it.

300 word minimum :3 MelMel, I know you'll make me prouuuud.