[Power Shot] Dybia's training

Dybia was walking along a lonely road on the forest's edge, going to a town in the west for a good fight in a tournament he had heard of, when a man with a sword, wearing a mask and robe, walked into the middle of the road and said "hand over everything you have, or die." Dybia began to chuckle slowly building to a loud laugh, "well aren't we cliché, so you want this to be violent? Let’s hope you can keep up with your words." Dybia said before charging at the man. One hand coming at the man, he swung his sword at Dybia's hand, and inevitably Dybia grabbed the sword and sent a charge to the man's hand. "AH!! What the hell?" he screamed with a look of pain. Stumbling backwards Dybia threw another punch at the man hitting his forearm, breaking it, the man fell to the ground.

"Die!" Dybia yelled as he held the man's head with both hands sending a large charge to his brain killing him almost instantly, "A worthless challenge." Still bored Dybia kept walking, knowing his destination was still a long ways away. Mistakenly he took a wrong turn and continued for twenty more miles. Mile after mile he kept wondering how much longer it would be, until he would finally arrive to the tournament for a real challenge. All he saw though was tree after tree all looking the same. "Pine, Pine, Pine." Dybia said in his head watching the trees go by, "god this is boring, I'm almost missing that pathetic thief." He said to himself. He had just noticed something strange, the road he was on began to look more aged but still well kept, and finally He saw a large building that seemed to be greatly inhabited. "I think I'm just lost now." Dybia said.



OoC: what can I say I'm not the greatest writer but that's about it.

Put this through a spelling a grammar check. I refuse to look at it as it is.

Put all assignments through a spelling and grammar check.

well the stupidest mistake I made grammar wise was misspelling tournament.

walked into the middle of the road and said "hand over everything you have, or die".

Should have a comma after "said," and your period should be inside the quotation marks.

what the hell?" he screamed with a look of pain.

"What" should be capitalized.

Fix those problems, and go through it to find the other errors. Most of it is grammar-related, and it's little stuff that'll kill you in the way you've added it up.

Ok, I fixed that and a few other things.

Assignment Time!

Approach the building on the horizon, which is known as the Dome. But, before you can reach it, the road caves in underneath your feet! Dybia will find himself in a dark hallway, the only source of light a strange red orb of light with a woman's voice. She doesn't know her name, but she is looking for her body. Walk down the hallway with the orb to guide you, until you find yourself in a giant library. Don't name the orb.

End your post in the library! 700 word minimum.

I'll get right on that tomorow when I can get to my computer instead of my Wii.

Dybia blinked staring at the building and by the time he opened his eyes he saw blackness and the sunlight faded above him as he fell.

“What the helllllll !!!” Dybia screamed as he fell downwards into the darkness below. He was flailing around looking for a wall or anything to grab with his hands. He found something and grabbed on, it felt like a pole going sideways, and Dybia felt like his arm was being jerked off and quickly slung his other arm up to it and let go with his other.

“Damn!! That hurt!!” He shouted in pain. He hung for a few seconds letting the pain subside in his right arm. He grabbed the bar with his other hand and started scooting to the right and found a wall about 20 feet over. “Finally!” He said pulling himself up on top of the bar and balancing himself with the help of the wall, and the static attraction of his boot’s steel soles. He was facing the wall catching his breath, and he turned around and saw a red orb.

“Hello” the voice said to Dybia quickly.

“What the!” Dybia said, Shocked, and lost his balance and fell off the bar. He was still close to the wall, so he kicked off it not knowing how far it would be till he hit the floor, so he could at least land in a roll. He hit ground at about 20 feet down. He was able to make it through the fall without breaking anything because of the roll, but he did feel the fall totally. The stone floor hurt his back and head from the impact.

The orb seemed to descend from where it had surprised Dybia, and finally stopped in front of him. “Terribly sorry sir, I didn’t mean to scare you.” The orb said.

“Scared? You didn’t scare me! The near fall to my death a couple minutes ago!! That put me on edge! Nearly breaking my arm, that pissed me off! You just popping up behind me, all that amounted together, that scared me!!!” Dybia said in an angry rant.

“Well I may have scared you, but you don’t have to be rude about it!!” She said angrily.

“Well there’s no reason I have to be nice to strange orbs of light after they nearly get me killed after I barely avoided getting killed!!” Dybia shouted. “Who are you anyways!?”

“Hm, I really don’t know.” She said, “All I remember is this building, and the vague outline of a body in my mind.”

“Well, since you only remember this place let’s put that lone memory to use,” Dybia said “Mind helping me find my way out of this place?”

“Would you mind helping me find the body I can vaguely remember?” she responded.

“If I see any bodies lying around on the way out, I’ll be sure to alert you.” He said as a smart ass response.

“Hmph, now why should I help you, when you’re being so rude?” She said quickly.

“Fine, since I can not seem to see anything beyond you, I guess I’ll help you but can this wait until after you help me out? One person alone doesn’t have a very good chance of finding something like that in a place like this.” Dybia said trying to weasel through this.

“Ok but I’ll make sure you do not abandon me as soon as we are out.” She said, “Follow me.” She said floating off past and away from Dybia.

“Please.” Dybia said watching her float off past him, “I am glad to be polite to those who actually help me.” He said walking away hearing the clinking of his steel soled boots on the stone floor. They walked for about 10 minutes, with the clinking continuing.

“That is sort of annoying, why do you wear such things?” she asked him as they both moved forward.

“Because I tend to fight a lot and whether you knew it or not, steel hurts when it hits you in the face in a kick. Which lacking a face I guess you wouldn’t know now would you?” Dybia said giving another smart remark.

“I’d appreciate you not saying such thing, as I do have a body, I just can not recall where it is.” She said. “And check the wall in front of you.” She said stopping at a wall.

“Thank you,” He said reaching forward and feeling a knob, “ah, a door.” He said opening it and blinking for a minute from the light coming back. He walked forward seeing a set of book shelves around him he walked forward. “What in the world?” Dybia said continuing forward and felt like someone was here, hearing steps from behind a nearby bookshelf……………………………………

OoC: there you go. sorry I took so long.

Run this through a grammar check. I notice several errors such as misplaced capitalization, improper use of commas, exclamation marks, and periods. Run every assignment through a grammar check in the future, such as Microsoft Word.

it found three mistakes besides thinking my guy's name was a misspelling

Assignment Time!

Ninjas made of book pages emerge from the corridors, aiming to impede your travels through the Dome. And, for some reason, they want your glowing, floating companion. Defend her, and defeat the ninjas! After defeating them, they will transform into a note from a person calling himself the Dark Eye.

End your post finding the note. 1,300 word minimum.

Dybia quickly pulled his sword off of his belt and jumped, to look down the aisle where he heard the noise. There was nothing there but some papers spread across the floor. Dybia took a closer look at the papers, but the words were completely illegible. “What’s this chicken scratch?” he said to himself. He decided not to pursue it, and just put the paper back. He kept walking don the main aisle to a desk that was at the end. “Hey, you know anything about this place?” Dybia asked his floating companion, “cuz, there’s someone here but apparently they don’t want to be seen. I‘m sure of that.”

“I’m pretty sure I have told you, I don’t remember anything outside the room you found me in. And are you not the one trespassing?” She said annoyingly, “I mean this is someone’s library obviously. How would you react to some random intruder clanking trough your place?”

“Well if they don’t like it it’s their own damn fault. I mean, a cavern beneath a collapsing pathway out front, that has a doorway leading here? That‘s a quirky bit of design.” Dybia said a little annoyed with how he got here. “but we’re here, so nothing to do about it but figure out exactly what this place is.” He continued.

“Why exactly did you come here again?” She said floating over to a window, “From the look of this, this place is a little out of the way. Maybe they were expecting you?”

“Nope, I just got lost going to a town in the north for a fighting tourney, and I guess I took a wrong turn.” Dybia said.

An eye was watching the two as they talked, remaining unseen. In more than one place it watched, from at least 4 perspectives. It or they were waiting for the opportune moment.

Dybia felt he was being watched, but he decided to wait. He wouldn’t find out why unless they showed themselves on their own, so he continued talking to his floating companion. He was reading a book he picked up off the desk, but could barely get what it was about. “You understand any of this stuff?” He asked.

“Hm, looks like an advanced science book to me.” She said.

“I wouldn’t really know about that kind of stuff. The only complicated science I know is biology and a bit of physics.” Said Dybia, “and that’s just so I can understand body composition to channel electricity through my body the right way.”

“Electricity? What are you talking about?” She asked not knowing about Dybia’s gauntlets,

“Eh, I’d rather not take the time to explain. It’s a little complicated.” Dybia said, “Well, let’s get to looking for something else here. Maybe whoever was there earlier will show them selves.” He started looking at some of the books on the shelves near the desk, and many were written in a language he didn’t understand. Most were smaller leather bound ones that appeared very old.

“Fine, but let’s hurry.” She said flying past Dybia.

Dybia followed her but as soon as she turned a cornr past a bookcase he heard something at the end a bookcase down the aisle. He walked over to check it out, and it was just a book that fell off the bookcase. There was something strange about it though. The cover was one unlike a lot of the others he had seen. This one was written in plain English “History of the Arcane“, and something else.

“Very strange,” Dybia said, “This book has no pages.”

He was bent over looking at the empty book cover when he heard something

“What the-!” Said the floating orb behind Dybia as she was yanked through to the other side of the bookcase .
“Huh?!” Dybia said jumping around in time to barely see it. He quickly pulled his sword out, and he ran to the end of the bookcase and looked at the aisle she was pulled into and saw a vague looking beige figure with a red glow coming from in front of him. He thought quickly and grabbed the end of the bookcase and pushed it over to fall on top of this person. As it fell he ran around the side to catch up with the thief, but he noticed when he got to the middle there was nothing under it at any length of the bookcase.

“What the?” He said, “But I just saw it fall on him.”

He was caught off guard the next second by the crash of all the other bookcases that had been in the long row.

“Up here you idiot!” Said the orb.

Dybia looked up at the top of the bookcase behind him to see “A paper ninja?”. It was holding the orb, but hat Dybia wasn’t looking at was the two other paper ninjas at the ends of that bookcase pushing it. Just as it was falling he dove through, fists first, going in between two shelves. He stood watching them run all run down the long aisle of bookcases, and said, “Oh no you don’t!”

Dybia picked a book up off the floor and threw it as hard as he could at the one holding the orb, with the spine going against the air. A whole tore straight through him and the orb squeezed through and flew towards Dybia as fast as she could.

Before she could make it, a fourth ninja came out from one of the untouched aisles of bookcases and snatched her back.

“Oh no you don’t!” Dybia said taking off to the aisle he ran down, but he was gone. He thought for a second and jumped up to the top of one of the bookcases. He saw the latest paper ninja joining up with the other two at the end of the bookshelf rows. “Wait?! Two?” Suddenly Dybia was jumped from behind by the Ninja he had thrown the book through. Dybia grabbed the ninja with both hands and arched electricity through it causing it to catch fire. It began trying to beat it’s own flames out, but it only caught fire to he rest of it’s body quicker. When it finally went down to smoldering folds of ashes, and Dybia took a couple of quick stomps to ensure the library did not burn down.

Dybia went back to the top of the bookcase to look where the other ninjas went with the orb. Looking for them he realized how large this library was. He saw that the entire library seemed to encircle the building, but the building didn’t look that large from the outside. “What the hell?” Dybia had to shake himself out of it and get back to what he was doing. He finally spotted them running along the wall about two hundred yards away. He began jumping and running across bookcase tops at top speed.

He was about one hundred feet behind them when he could make out “Hurry up you idiot!! Or you’ll lose them!” He kept running, and he was twenty feet behind them now. “You’re not getting away now!” Dybia yelled charging his sword pointing it towards the three paper ninjas. He was not planning to shoot the bolt at them and end it like that. He fired two shots at the ground at the ones on the right and left to make them look, and to his surprise they looked behind them jumping towards each other to avoid the shots. “Aha!” He yelled as all three were lined up not paying attention to the wall behind them. He charged his sword one more time and threw it straight through all three pinning them to the wall and arching the electric charge into them, ending them the same way as the previous one.

“Ah! Hot! Hot!” Yelled the orb flying away from the burning ninjas.

“Oh, shut up, could have turned out worse.” Said Dybia walking over to the wall and pulling his sword out and watching the ninjas burn to a pile of cinder on the ground. The cinders strangely turned to smoke and where the pile had been, there was an envelope, addressed to Dybia.

OoC: Damn, sorry bout that. Hope to keep it regular from now on.

Let's see what we can do...

Assignment Time!

This letter, addressed to Dybia himself, must be opened. It contains a message from the mysterious Dark Eye you have been hearing about. The note contains instructions inviting Dybia down into the dungeons of the Dome to learn from the Dark Eye. Walk down there and discuss it with the orb. Look around your new surroundings, it's perfectly safe...for now. Come to a stop right in front of two doors made of wrought-iron with intricate symbols, the most noticeable of which being a giant green Eye in the middle.

The object of this lesson is sentence structure and the ability of your character to have a conversation. I want to see his social skills with the little orb. Finally, research the Dark Eye a little bit for the note. A little personality goes a long way. 1,500 word minimum.

Dybia was hunched over squatting down holding the envelope he’d just found. ”What is it Dybia?” The orb said hovering in closer to get a look at the envelope.

“It’s…a letter, addressed to me.” Dybia said a little puzzled, “Ok, I wasn’t expecting this day to be quite so...interesting. Huge building that doesn‘t fit the outside dimensions, strange glowing female orbs, paper ninjas and random letters addressed to me, the best question I can come up with is ‘What next?‘ ” He took a finger at one end of he sealed envelope and slit it open. He shook it towards his hand and two pieces of parchment fell into his hand. He unfolded one of the pieces and it was a letter.

“Dybia,

You’ve been recognized by the dome. If you wish to grow stronger and train, come to the dungeons. I’ve give you a map to follow. Do not Dawdle.

The Dark Eye” And that was all the letter said.

“Hm, not a very chatty guy. Well,” Dybia said getting up with a sigh, “I guess me and you are going to the dungeon, wherever that is.” He unfolded the second piece of paper, and it was a small map. It looked hand-drawn but it was very neatly done. It wasn’t a full map of the building though.

“What? you’re just going to accept a random offer of training from some stranger who apparently sent some weird ass paper ninjas after you?” Said the floating orb with a bit of apprehension to what was going to happen.

“Looks that way, unless you have some other suggestion? Because according to this we don’t really have options on exits. Dybia held up the small map showing there was no way out marked on the map besides the huge pit he fell down to get this far. “Besides, this guy seems to have a lock on everything going on here, so he’ll probably be able to remedy your little problem.”

“Little pro-? Oh yeah.” She said almost forgetting about her body with the more recent problems distracting her. “With those weird paper guys, I had actually almost forgotten about that.”

“Wow, you’re pretty short sighted about things, huh?” Dybia said trying to sound funny.

“Well, while we’re going who knows where to meet with who knows who, care to tell me a little about yourself?” The orb said flying beside Dybia as he eyed the map and walked along according to it.

“No, I’d rather not.” Dybia said trying not to sound interested in the subject.

“Come on don’t want to share a bit about your self? Where you’re from? What you did before coming here? Got any family?” The orb asked obviously bored of just floating silently.

“I’d really appreciate you dropping the subject of all of that.” He said without even looking at her.

”Well……” ,She started sounding like a kid that just got scolded, “What do you do now? You know, what‘s your work?”

“Fine I suppose I can at least talk about that.” Dybia said rounding a corner to start down a long flight of stairs that seemed to go down forever, “I fight, I get things people need, or I do things people need done.”

”Kind of general, don’t you think?” She said back to him.

“What do you want? I don’t do anything specific.” Dybia snapped.

”So, what? You’re basically a bum? Nowhere to go? Do anything for money?” She said seeming a little more annoyed with his lack of interesting topics to share.

“No, a bum has nowhere to go and does anything for money, I do it for something to occupy my time. Can’t make serving a god a full time job.” Dybia felt a twinge of pain from something unseen reminding him not to slip about that. What? You think she’s gonna do something? Who’s gonna listen to her? He was echoing back in his head.

”A god? What’s that about? You a priest or something?” She asked as the two of them took a turn down the stairs.

“More like a zealot” Dybia said to her, “I actually go out and do something in the world for this god instead of telling others to do it.” The pain came to him again

”And what exactly is it he asks you do?” She asked now getting curious about this so called god.

“Now that, even I’m not stupid enough to talk about.” Dybia said still staring straight down the stairs he was descending, “Let’s talk about something else.”

”Well, what do you call this god?” She asked, still curious.

“Well….a name spoken to someone in your condition won’t hurt anything. Who would listen to you anyway?” Dybia said to her jokingly, “To any mortal that knows of him he is called Zaros, Don’t spread it around.” The pain came again, stronger than before. Will you shut up?! Dybia shouted in his head.

Dybia looked around the ever still descending stairs. He noticed the style seemed to change as he descended. Every now and then symbols would show up on the walls. He didn’t recognize any of them.

“Zaros, weird name,” She said, now playfully flying above Dybia’s head.

“Well it’s the only name he has. You’re lucky I’m feeling chatty too because I usually have to be pretty tight lipped about him.” Dybia said still staring down the stairs watching the walls slowly changing.

“So why believe in this god? And do anything for him? What makes his existence more credible than any other to you?” She asked still curious.

“Because unlike people with blind faith in most other gods, I’ve talked to Zaros, and he’s done me a favor, and continues to,” Dybia said finally looking up at her while he was walking, wondering if she was looking at him or if she was noticing the décor change as well. He couldn’t tell because of her lack of eyes, or a face.

“So, what did he do for you?” She asked.

“Ah, well, as I said I don’t like to talk about my past in detail. Maybe another time.” Dybia said returning his gaze to the stairs in front of him.

The two finally reached the last o the stairs to find a new setting. It was a long hallway, walls covered with doors. Dybia walked over to the closest one and tried turning the knob, but found that it and all of the others were locked. Each one seemed strange and different from every other.

“Hm, guess it’s not one of these. Why invite me then lock me out?” He said as he began to walk past them all deeper through the hallway.

”Who? That Dark Eye guy? You sure you’ve never heard of him?” She said flying to each of the doors looking at the uniqueness of each, “To have such a place and not be well known.”

“Gotta admit, the size of this place is pretty impressive.” Dybia said thinking how long he’d been going down the stairs, and how deep underground he must have come. He couldn’t think of why this ‘Dark Eye’ would need a complex this large. Why were there so many rooms for a place that seemed to have no people in it. As far as he could tell the only trace of a person here was this Dark Eye. Who couldn’t come straight to Dybia, but ask him to come down to this deep dark dungeon. ‘Not like I have anything better to do’ Dybia thought to himself.

He still wondered where all the people were. He looked up to see he hanging torches that lit the hallway ever twenty five feet or so. Someone had to keep them ablaze. He kept asking him self if there would be someone waiting to jump him around the corner or something.

Dybia soon found himself in front of a gate of anything but modest size compared to the other doors. It seemed to be made of wrought iron and covered in a slew of intricate symbols. The biggest of which was a large green eye at the center of it.

“Damn.” said the orb floating around the door looking at each of the symbols.

“Well, think this is him?” ,Dybia said jokingly, recognizing the symbol from the stamp on the letter. He walked over to it and began checking for locks by sending a bit of electricity through it. He couldn’t find anything holding it shut, but there was no visible way to open it.

“No locks, no handles, no switches,” Dybia said before he knocked his gauntleted fist into the gate. It had to be more than a foot thick. No way to lift it or pull it open.

“How does this thing open? Does it go up or open up?” Dybia asked aloud.

”How should I know?” the orb said still checking out the symbols on the door.

Dybia let out a sigh and said, “Guess we have to be let in. Damn it.”

OoC: You know what? I can't promise any kind of schedule on this.