A short, descriptive paragraph.

[Dolphin]

I tested my general writing skills, as I plan to write a book one day. Here's what I managed to do:

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Through the thick, dramatic clouds I swooped down gracefully into an intensely beautiful landscape. Sunlight splashed over the intricate vegetation that blossomed all over the mountain. Steam rose up from a bubbling cauldron of water that flickered about in numerous bubbles that glinted briefly in the sunlight. Thick, moss-covered branches curled around into the grand tree trunks that stretched far into the high azure sky. Every detail of the jaw-dropping scene seemed to be in collusion for beauty. As I stood in this place, a place where pure joy and peace could be guzzled in every blissful living second, I knew I must be in heaven. At this realization I felt my body electrify into some sort of frolicsome spasm. I ran the full length of the mountain ledge embraced with beaming ecstasy - feeling light, as if running under soft liquid, and dancing in a world of love and pleasure and utter, eternal delicacy of life.

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I'd love for some feedback on my writing style, and where I could improve etc. I'm quite pleased with it pesonally, but naturally I need some constructive criticism

[Lly]

It was generally good- your vocabulary is good, and your word choice was pretty creative, but in some places it was awkward or too flowery.

The first sentence, for instance:

Through the thick, dramatic clouds I swooped down gracefully into an intensely beautiful landscape.

"Dramatic" is kind of camp and "intensely beautiful" sounds a little awkward. Not to mention: the entire point of the paragraph you wrote was to explain to us the fantastic, profound beauty of your scene- yet by using the word "dramatic," you told us what the feeling and emotion of the scene would be, and set the tone by clearly stating it; and by calling it all "intensely beautiful," you let us know exactly what you thought it looked like. Right there, with the first sentence, you told me what the scene was like and what feeling the view instilled. It made the entire paragraph redundant, and gave me, as the reader, no incentive to pay attention- because why would I, the reader, want to read about something I already knew?

Which is really a shame, because the rest of it was very well written and easy to follow. As I said, your word choice was great. You really gave my a clear image of what you were describing. There was really only one point that confused me:

Steam rose up from a bubbling cauldron of water that flickered about in numerous bubbles that glinted briefly in the sunlight

I had no idea what you were talking about. A lake? A hot spring? A literal cauldron? Because the entire scene seems to be taking on an arial view, so wouldn't it be a little small to see? Honestly, I wasn't sure if you were using literal or figurative language here.

Other than that, though- great! Hope to see more of your works aroun the site, these forums seem to be in desparate need of good, active writers lately.