Vanished Moon, Shattered Sun

[Rufus Shinra]

[center]Yare', yare'. Some poems and very short stories for you. More later.
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I apologize for the delay. I'm backed up at the moment. My poetry will be up as soon as possible.
Also, Convict has been lost or deleted. I will attempt to replicate it at a later date.

[Mr Spork]

I was really impressed with Starfire. I speaks so vividly of human amibition and desire. I'm quite intrigued by the layout of the poem too, not the usual line by line fare I'm more accustomed to. It works tremendously though. The imagery of celestial bodies is well realised and a joy to take in.

Last is also well written though I felt it to be a tad melodramatic, but I guess that's exactly what feelings like those are, aren't they?

What I could perhaps just nitpick on is a few parts are awkwardly phrased and don't flow as well as they could. The line 'It hurts, but you do not know (etc)' seems to pack a bit too much in compared to the general flow of the rest of the piece.

I very much look forward to more from you!

[Rufus Shinra]

I've added "Recognize". I can see it is not as good as Starfire easily. One Wing, on the other hand...
"Thoughts of the Fallen" was an Older poem I wrote for S.S about the World wars on Rememberance Day..
"Convict" is loosely based on a movie I watched in class about the Halifax explosion and the trial of Francis Mackay.
Thank you for the comments.