A song's Lyrics I Composed

[GarmGarf]

I am a poet. I am a lyricist.

It takes but one death to create a murderer.

- GarmGarf, just now.

Anyways, here is the lyrics of an untitled song (which doesn't exist (yet?)) that I composed around last month:

What is the difference between day and night?
On other planets we'll grow.
Well now it's dark, and later bright.
Aye, we woe.

What is the difference between sound and sight?
In the future we'll know.
And by then what will have might?
Solider, lo!

Where can I find what is mine?
What have I been assigned?
It shall come soon or not at all
As I won't be alive.

What is the difference between death and life?
Who has come to and fro?
And what else be when all has blight?
Time to go.

Where can I find what is mine?
What have I been assigned?
It shall come soon or not at all
As I won't be alive.
It shall come soon or not at all
As I won't be alive.
I won't be alive.

I hope anyone interested found that interesting. After all, that is what existence is all about.

[Szerenade]

I found your song very intriguing. Especially the first two verses. They invoke a certain grandness beyond our own limited existence in space and time. Overall, the message is quite thought-provoking.

[GarmGarf]

Originally Posted by Szerenade

I found your song very intriguing. Especially the first two verses. They invoke a certain grandness beyond our own limited existence in space and time. Overall, the message is quite thought-provoking.

Ah thanks, I really appreciate the response.

Edit:

Hmm, I have another piece, but it doesn't seem complete yet. You may care to have a read:

What ever happened to the fields
Which soaked the raindrops?
What has been done to desert
That caused water scarce?
And to that lighting,
Does it come from earth or air?

I've got a feeling I know
But I will not show
For fear of defect.
One day the sky might fall,
And it will be wise to...
I don't know.
Do you?

Let's take a history book,
Remember World War four?
And look at that picture, see,
Is that the moon still gray?
And to those people,
Were the prophets wrong or right?

I've got a feeling I know
But I will not show
For fear of defect.
One day the sky might fall,
And it will be wise to...
I don't know.
Do you?

[Lord Westcott]

I really like the first one, although the second isn't as much to my taste. you should continue writing though.

[GarmGarf]

Originally Posted by Guy Westcott

I really like the first one, although the second isn't as much to my taste. you should continue writing though.

Yeah, the second one is a flop compared to the first. Thank you for the criticizms though, I need to make more of the style people like.

[Kouten]

I don't really know what kind of criticism I can offer here. I enjoyed both of those pieces. You should write more.

P.s. Is the second one a song too?
P.s.s. Now you just need to find the musicians to make that/those song(s) come to life.

[GarmGarf]

Originally Posted by Kouten

I don't really know what kind of criticism I can offer here. I enjoyed both of those pieces. You should write more.

Thanks for the response!

Originally Posted by Kouten

P.s. Is the second one a song too?
P.s.s. Now you just need to find the musicians to make that/those song(s) come to life.

Yeah, the second one is a song as well.

Hmm, hopefully they will come to life one day...