A poem of mine

My soul dances with the desire of my heart
Each heartbeat the tempo of my song
An intricate dance of friendship and love
Where shall the next foot fall
Forever alone or together with you
Is this the last step or shall the dance never end


This is my latest poem right now let me hear what you think of it.

I like it a lot. Give it a title. The dancing theme gives it a happy upbeat feel to it, which I'm not used to when reading poems.

It's good. You should add more verses and end rhyme to it. With these, it could make it a bit more interesting and informative.

thanks for the imput I have been thinking of a title for it

I like this poem. Good imagry but I feel you should add more of a "background" to it.

Well the "background" was a little hard for me to explain in words I mean there was so much more that I wanted to include but I didn't know how to say it