Another Song

Okay, my band and I have all decided to go back to our routes and take out one of our old songs and revise it a little, and rewrite the music. It's simple. Anyway, while I was digging around my hardrive today I found a song I wrote when I was thirteen, of course I'm gonna do that song. And I started thinking of this forum, about how I was going to post a lot of songs but forgot, so here's another song. It's called Dishonest Nightmare, and it's probably one of my more metal songs, since now I usually write meaningful stuff.

[Dishonest Nightmare]

1
Can't you see,
I'd like you to leave me be.
Your all the same,
Threatened by my flame!
Why do you hate us,
are you being raped by the incubus!
I hate you,
with a feeling so true!

*Chorus*
Make me bleed,
so I may leave my seed!
YOU! Open your mouth but cannot speak,
THIS! Isn't the wisdom you seek,
I! Am your honest nightmare,
YOU! Don't really think this is fair.
Why must we suffer,
do you think it is fun, well I think not.
Shall we dissolve,
this event will then resolve.

2
The gun comes to your head,
saying we aren't very well bred.
Daggers piercing my skin,
while we continue our sin!
WHILE WE CONTINUE!
I! Don't believe this is you.
I! Don't believe in myself.
I! Am no longer willing to sell.
Why must you love your face,
while we're being killed with such grace.

3
SO! We'll continue to put on our show.
YOU! Will continue your bleeding,
THEY! Will see you for who you are!
I! Will remember my scar.
WE! Have exposed the imposter.
NOW! We shall continue being outsiders!

*Chorus*
Make me bleed,
so I may leave my seed!
YOU! Open your mouth but cannot speak,
THIS! Isn't the wisdom you seek,
I! Am your honest nightmare,
YOU! Don't really think this is fair.
Why must we suffer,
do you think it is fun, well I think funner.
Shall we dissolve,
this event will then resolve.

4
This is my subliminal message,
to you imposters pretending to be who you aren't.
Tainting all that is right,
we have no sight of you.
Yet we believe if you look around you will see your mistake.

Oh, to the people who were wondering about my last song (Untold Tragedy), we have wrote it and are saving to buy recording gear so we can record and post it. Okay, tell me what you think.