Dumb winter poem I was forced to write

I had to write something to submit to a random contest for English class, and so I wrote this retarded poem about winter. Please comment. If it's as terrible as I think it is, give me some help. I hate writing this kind of stuff, so it's not going to be pretty. If you have a weak stomach, I advise turning back now, before your keyboard has digestive juices all over it.

Quiet
All is silent
Muffled by layers of half-frozen water
The sky is gray
As if made of concrete
Threatening to fall if anyone but whispers
The ground is white
Soft, glistening snow
So comforting, yet so cruel
My face stings and tingles
My gloved fingers feel nothing
My nose a bright red like Rudolph's
My cheeks a light pink as if I'm blushing
Thump, thump
Boots trudge along the street
Leaving their unique marks
To prove I was there
The smell of a fireplace
So oddly delicious
My nostrils welcome it
Like the smell of peach cobbler
Hot chocolate
I can feel the burning sensation
As the imaginary chocolate liquid
Swirls in my mouth
Is it winter already?
If you listen hard enough
You can hear the snowflakes answer

thats really nice you should write more, and dont be forced to, just do it ^_^

I thought that was a good poem Hylian Lemon! I enjoyed the description of winter, the concrete sky that is going to fall at a whisper. The 'half frozen water' all made reading it very enjoyable! I also enjoyed the last three lines:

Is it winter already?
If you listen hard enough
You can hear the snowflakes answer