Dark's poems

These are a few of my works.

Out of Sorrow
To me theres no tomarrow,
because of my sorrow.
I died long ago,
but who will ever know?


Pain
I used to be a little boy,
one that always expienced joy.
That boy is gone,
he no longer sings that song.

In his place a man,
who knows the worlds cruel plan.
To him its very plain,
The true emotion is only pain.

I'd enjoy it if you'd give you thoughts on my poems. Tell me how I could improve if anything comes to mind. Thanks .

Very cool.

You gotta stop changing your name bud. It confuses me greatly.

They're awesome poems, DD. ^^

Your rhyming is also pretty good also, so keep on writing poems! ^^

Thanks. there may be more on the way later.

Those are pretty good. Keep writing: practice makes perfect. You could improve by....... spelling correctly. It was probably an accident though. I don't like correcting people. It makes me feel bad. Sorry.

I've always had a trouble with spelling correctly :embrsd: .


EDIT: me have new poem to share.

Love
Is love something in fairy tales?
or does it knock you out with many gales?
Is it something in the heart?
or can it even make you smart?

I tell you this my words you must heed,
love is true, true indeed.
I know it is for a fact,
when I found it it gave me a smack

I've found one who does care for me,
we'll be in love for eternity.
She is true, pure and smart
She has the key to my heart


~to my girlfriend.

So touching... So deep...

Very good. (And no spelling errors.)

Keep up the good work.

Keep it up! These are really good!

Are they good? I think they stick.