My first real poem

This was inspired by My Chemical Romance


I love you,But you dont know
Only my passion will show
how much i desire you
its like a fire deep inside
And even if you were to
slit my throat,i'd apologize
for bleeding on your shirt
But when asked it is if you were in a mask,
perfection in giving rejection you are...

Love is the red of the rose on your coffin door
What's life like, bleeding on the floor,

So give me all your poison
And give me all your pills
And give me all your hopeless hearts
And make me ill
You're running after something
That you'll never kill
If this is what you want
Then fire at will

Preach all you want but who's gonna save me?
I keep a gun on the book you gave me, hallelujah, lock and load
Black is the kiss, the touch of the serpent son
It ain't the mark or the scar that makes you one,

hats really good dorfganon i enjoyed it..so much emotion!

Originally Posted by Dorfganon

You're running after something
That you'll never kill
If this is what you want
Then fire at will

I loved this poem! I loved the flow of it. This part, the one up there, makes me think that you are declaring yourwself invincible to a certain someone, that you're telling them that they can't hurt you anymore. Or at least, that's how it appears to me.

Originally Posted by Sugaroxxx

I loved this poem! I loved the flow of it. This part, the one up there, makes me think that you are declaring yourwself invincible to a certain someone, that you're telling them that they can't hurt you anymore. Or at least, that's how it appears to me.

yep thats what i was trying to get into the poem thanks no1 really seens to reply in this section of the forums..

wow, that poem is greater than most of Shakespear!

Ok, not really, but it is A+ quality work. Kudos dorfganon on one of my new favorite poems ever.

Nice. The rhymes and the flow, and the big words used in it..like passion..and....touch.......

Woo hoo! Great. And hey, you described my life too... Anyways... *Stamps A+ on Dorfganon's forehead*