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Old 07-19-2005, 04:25 PM
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Jammin sammins poems^_^
I thought and i thought on making a thread poem so here you go people i did it. Here is one i made up a few days ago enjoy
My love
Oh my love i have to tell you
How i really feel inside me
I've kept it so long but now i'll say
That i think i love you
Please don't reject me
I know you'll hate me
But i have kept it so long
And now it's time to tell
Please live close to me
In my heart

It's my first poem so please comment me on it i'll have more soon
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Old 07-19-2005, 04:33 PM
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What a sweet poem Jammin Sammin! It's lovely: short, simple, to the point, and I liked the gently imploring and uncertain quality of the narrator. I look forward to reading more poetry by you soon!

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Old 07-21-2005, 10:17 AM
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Thanks for the comment selah heres one from my heart.
My loss
Oh my love i think were unbreakable
i think you and me are great
I finally tell you my ture felling
And the rooms quiet for a minute
then you say 'i want to be friends'
My heart suddenly shatter's
I leave the room and walk away
Wepping in to the darkness alone.
I wrote that when something happened to me today please comment
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Old 07-21-2005, 11:22 AM
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That's a really sad poem, so pure and true. The mood changes from promising to devastating so sharply , and it ends on a very sombre note. It's so full of your soul.
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Old 07-21-2005, 11:28 AM
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Re: Jammin sammins poems^_^
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Thanks for the comment selah heres one from my heart.
My loss
Oh my love i think were unbreakable
i think you and me are great
I finally tell you my ture felling
And the rooms quiet for a minute
then you say 'i want to be friends'
My heart suddenly shatter's
I leave the room and walk away
Wepping in to the darkness alone.
I wrote that when something happened to me today please comment
*pukes up* disgusting! Can't really take that seriousely Jammin sammin!
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Old 07-21-2005, 02:45 PM
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Thanks for the comments everyone i'm feeling ok now SO heres a happy poem ^_^

My life
My life is happy and sweet
The flowers bloom around me
My friends say they love me
My life is so great
All the teachers love me
Everyone thinks i'm sweet
Noone has ever hurt me
My life is so great
And then a see a cute girl walk by
I slowly look at her face
She look's at me with her glitering eyes
My life is perfect

They you go people i fell so happy now that i wrote that. I'll be happier if you commented on this
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Old 07-21-2005, 05:03 PM
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Awww, that's so sweet. Great rhythm and rhyme. Pure and simple. Nice to be keeping the positive attitude.
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Old 07-21-2005, 05:59 PM
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Re: Jammin sammins poems^_^
Yay! He writes poetry! *sniffle* I'm so proud...

Well then! I really like that! ^_^ I'm sorry you were sad...but...IT IS GONE! ^_^

That last poem is so sweet. I love it! Life is perfect! ^_^

(One note- "No one" is really two words...but that's OK! ^_^)

Great job! ^_^
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Old 07-21-2005, 06:09 PM
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Re: Jammin sammins poems^_^
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Thanks for the comment selah heres one from my heart.
My loss
Oh my love i think were unbreakable
i think you and me are great
I finally tell you my ture felling
And the rooms quiet for a minute
then you say 'i want to be friends'
My heart suddenly shatter's
I leave the room and walk away
Wepping in to the darkness alone.
I wrote that when something happened to me today please comment
Okay, who was that about?
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Old 07-22-2005, 04:10 AM
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Hey cool poem but i think this is based on a true story? well after what you told me then it must be! but cool poem anyway!

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Old 07-22-2005, 05:05 AM
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Thanks for the comments everyone i'm feeling ok now SO heres a happy poem ^_^

My life
My life is happy and sweet
The flowers bloom around me
My friends say they love me
My life is so great
All the teachers love me- ewwww
Everyone thinks i'm sweet - I don't!
Noone has ever hurt me-awww
My life is so great
And then a see a cute girl walk by
I slowly look at her face
She look's at me with her glitering eyes
My life is perfect

They you go people i fell so happy now that i wrote that. I'll be happier if you commented on this
Ok, thats a bit exaggarated, I doubt your friends love you. Anyway, great poem - quite imaginative and I hope you liked my comment!
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Old 07-22-2005, 10:23 AM
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Re: Jammin sammins poems^_^
Unknown:Hey some friends love you for being VERY good mates but i understand you ^_^
Mikestroe:Thank you for saying they cool even my best friend thinks my poetry is cool.
Nayru_angel42:A close girl i really liked and thought she was the 'one' but i guess not.
I love link:Great that you love my poems i will spell no one like this now lol.^_^
Szerenade:Thanks once again for the comment szerenade you seem to be my best poetry fan^_^.

Well for the 600th post how about one i made up on the last day of school Enjoy.

It dosen't matter
It doesn't matter if you win or lose
And the odds are againest you
It doesn't matter if keep failing
You will always get another chance
It doesn't matter if you are beat
never give in to it
It doesn't matter if you lose EVERYTHING
Theys always a way through
It matters when you give up things
Because you just lose EVERYTHING

I know it is not my best work but i hope you enjoyed it.
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Old 07-22-2005, 10:47 AM
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Re: Jammin sammins poems^_^
i really like your poems there good in a sence that they are like part of you. i have n oclue what that means.
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Old 07-22-2005, 11:24 AM
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Unknown:Hey some friends love you for being VERY good mates but i understand you ^_^
Mikestroe:Thank you for saying they cool even my best friend thinks my poetry is cool.
Nayru_angel42:A close girl i really liked and thought she was the 'one' but i guess not.
I love link:Great that you love my poems i will spell no one like this now lol.^_^
Szerenade:Thanks once again for the comment szerenade you seem to be my best poetry fan^_^.

Well for the 600th post how about one i made up on the last day of school Enjoy.

It dosen't matter
It doesn't matter if you win or lose
And the odds are againest you
It doesn't matter if keep failing
You will always get another chance
It doesn't matter if you are beat
never give in to it
It doesn't matter if you lose EVERYTHING
Theys always a way through
It matters when you give up things
Because you just lose EVERYTHING

I know it is not my best work but i hope you enjoyed it.
Not as much in it as the others - but great all the while! I like how you put 'everything' in big capital letters. I do understand it, I think it means that if you give up on something, you will lose everything - because then your giving up on getting everything back. Am I right?
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Old 07-26-2005, 07:22 PM
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Oh...I missed this poem! Still B_E_A_U_T_I_F_U_L ^_^

Wow. More please! Me so proud...*Sniffle*
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Old 07-26-2005, 07:31 PM
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It dosen't matter
It doesn't matter if you win or lose
And the odds are againest you
It doesn't matter if keep failing
You will always get another chance
It doesn't matter if you are beat
never give in to it
It doesn't matter if you lose EVERYTHING
Theys always a way through
It matters when you give up things
Because you just lose EVERYTHING

I know it is not my best work but i hope you enjoyed it.
I thought it was your best! I loved it - the melonchaoly essence of your souls - it's so pure, yet lamently sorrowfull! I love it! Keep the great work up!
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Old 07-30-2005, 02:26 PM
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I thought it was your best! I loved it - the melonchaoly essence of your souls - it's so pure, yet lamently sorrowfull! I love it! Keep the great work up!
Yep, definately his best so far.
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