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Old 08-30-2009, 08:52 PM
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The Sillhouette

As I walk through this house
I feel as I'm in a daze.
As I walk, I see a sillouhette.
somehow, it seems familiar.
It's calling to me as if it knows me.
I know I died once.
But, I came back, as someone different.
As I walk toward the figure, its face becomes clear.
I've seen it somehwere before, it makes my stomach turn.
As I get within arm's length, I realize.
The sillouhette is a shell of the man I used to be.
He seems to have everything I lost when I died.
But how can I be dead, if I can see myself in front of me?
Have I truly lost my true purpose?
Should I become the sillouhette---the man I once was?
I am not sure as of yet.
I hope I find out in time.
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Old 08-31-2009, 09:10 PM
Ameera Mae Laramie Ameera Mae Laramie is a female United_States Ameera Mae Laramie is offline
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Re: The Sillhouette

Nicely done, although "somewhere" is spelled wrong. The last two lines should be taken out as they seemed to have been added as an afterthought and don't really go along with the flow.
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