A short little tension scene.

This is the second massacre of this month. The carnage, the smell, the way its looks, its disgusting. I have a sense the killer is no human. A human has no capabilities of this. We counted 21 people in the massacre and all of them have only one thing in common; after they were dead their jaws were ripped off and taken away. It's Rich and my job to pick up the bodies after everyone has abandoned the scene. The job, at times, can get very creepy.
That night I was loading some of the bodies and I felt as if something was watching me. When I turned around I saw a dark figure that looked like a human in the short distance. I said loudly but softly "Hello?" As soon as I said this it dropped on all fours and sprinted away and was gone in a flash. I looked away rubbing my eyes thinking the dark is messing with my vision.
About 10 or so minutes go by I see it again but this time its pointing at me, I rub my eyes once again and when I open them its gone. I look around to find Rich but I cant find him anywhere. I start yelling his name getting worried. I see his watch on the ground and pick it up, I stand up straight and turn around. I turn around and Rich is right behind me I jump a little and let out a little bit of a scream.
I tell him "Sorry, you kinda startled me."
"Its fine the jobs a bit creepy I understand." he replies
I space out and peer off over his shoulder and I see the figure once again. I asked him "Look behind you do you see that?" As I say it it dashes away. He looks, then at me as if I'm crazy
"See what?"
"Never mind, I've seen a dark figure 3 or 4 times tonight"
He raises an eyebrow "Hm?"
There was an awkward pause that felt like it lasted for hours. I break the silence with " So, lets, uh, get back to work?"
"Okay, good plan." He laughs
He goes on his way and I go mine. I pick the rest of the stuff up within an hour or so. I yell to Rich and tell him I'm ready to leave. No reply. I yell again but still nothing. I hear a deep voiced shriek and I instantly break into a cold sweat. Sweat drips down my face but as I hear the shrieks I stand there frozen possibly from the chill up my spine or maybe I was in a state of shock. I instantly break out of what seemed like 10 minutes of standing there and I begin to run towards the shrieking yelling his name. The shrieks stop I come around the corner and Rich is sitting there with only one side of his jaw attached I look as its dangling there in the breeze. I must have interrupted from my screaming it must have scared it away I thought. I knew he was already dead from a loss of blood. I look at his now bared chest and engraved in it is "YOU'RE NEXT!" I turn and look and the figure is only a hundred or so feet and all you can see is its yellow eyes glow in the dark and I notice it standing there moving its arm as if to wave to me almost as if to say I'm gone for now but I will be back eventually.

oh thats really good, he should have left with Rich when they had the chance lol. so are you going to add more to the story? you really should, you have a really good start.

Originally Posted by candc32

oh thats really good, he should have left with Rich when they had the chance lol. so are you going to add more to the story? you really should, you have a really good start.

Thanks, I don't know where I'm going to go from there. I may write some more tomorrow during class.