Awesome Rap (May contain cussing)

Your raps are awsesome (again) I think I know exactly how you feel when your write this, they've really got something to them.

Have you considered retail?

You should. You are pretty good.

I can relate to that one. If I knew I had only 24 hours to live, I'd hunt certain people down and take them with me.

GOD DAMN THAT IS F***ING AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE A FIRST CLASS RAPPER! DAMN! I rapped the words to my beats and it sounded real gangsta dude. Be careful about nigga though, because we white people aren't supposed to say it! PLEASE DEAR GOD MAKE MORE! I'M LOSING MY MIND WITH NOTHING TO RAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ARGH! I RELATE TO SOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Especially the one with the chick. Of course mine doesn't hate me. She just has a boyfriend. But I'm friends with him because we talked and he said we should be friends. Hope you get the biznitch!

Okay heres my newest one, but only because you asked! I think Im gonna do this one after.... me, yeah, how I am hated by most! Okay eminem, if I sound to much like you, come kick my ass!

Outcast

It seems damn near everywhere
Im not wanted here or there
I cant even walk down my school hall
Without someone tryin make me trip and fall
Hell even in class
I have people threatening to kick my ass
Im not even wanted at my house
I feel like a flame thats gettin doused
But the flame never dies
It opens its mouth and it crys

*scream* I AM AN OUTCAST!!!

Yeah sure people walk by and whisper
"What the hell is his problem"
"Yeah why doesnt he go cry to his mom"
I turn to kick his ass
But grit my teeth and just pass on by
tryin to lie
to myself and say
sooner or later this pain will go away
but that hope dont last it dies
and I fall back on my back and sigh
and ask why
it has to be me
now you all see
why I rap about this
This is how I always get pissed
I wasnt gifted with muscle or hots
I was only given the looks of snots
but this is not how I plan to end
I will not give up and send
myself to hell, instead
I will lie awake in bed
and hope for somethin good to happen
maybe someday I will be rappin
with one of the great celebritys
till then I will rap about my past
Because I am nothin but an outcast!

Originally Posted by Neo

GOD DAMN THAT IS F***ING AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE A FIRST CLASS RAPPER! DAMN! I rapped the words to my beats and it sounded real gangsta dude. Be careful about nigga though, because we white people aren't supposed to say it! PLEASE DEAR GOD MAKE MORE! I'M LOSING MY MIND WITH NOTHING TO RAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Calm down. He's not the next emenim. Will the real Clark Kent please stand up?

Hey Daph for all you know I could be! Hey Neo thanks for the compliment,Id also like to introduce everyone to my next song....

The Window

Whenever I sit here singing this song
I think back to everything that went wrong
Back before I even liked rap or hip hop
at this point I would like to stop
and say what things were like back in da day
All I do is start to sing slow
then I turn left and look out my window
Everything was cool
Back in elementary school
But in middle school things started to suck
I felt as if I was all outta luck
I was a pussy and a whiner
Dreamin of a finer
day in which I could stay
Oh man I dont wanna rap about it
it makes me feel like s'hit
Instead I'll just turn away from my window
and look at the show
and rap about the current exeperiances in my life
Hell even now Iwanna pull out a knife
and go to school and put em all out
but in the end I just shout
to the heavens beggin for a change
everyone walks by and looks at me like Im strange
I fall back down and frown
and try not to cry as the girl I love just walks on by
doesnt even bother to stop and say hi
No she just goes on thinkin of her boyfriend
Probabaly wants to f'uck him
Oh well what can I do
Cj all this s'hit is cause of you
and you you say is hey
Ryan you shouldnt a been cryin about it
Your not like eminem and no one gives a s'hit
now shut it or I'll tell her more
I'll even tell her that you wanna f'uck her like a whore!
At this point Im fuming mad
I just go home and lie on my bed sad
I sit up from my pillow
and look out the window
and think back to a time
back when someone actually gave a dime
about what happens to me
now you all see
why I get sick and tired of this
All I wanted was just a kiss
from her, but no
she just glares at me like a ho!
So I look out my window
and think back hell even a few weeks ago
was good and great
now its too late
to talk to her
Thats it, now Im for sure!
Im gonna get my payback
lets see whos on my list to attack
Oh goody Guess who's first!
I aint gonna say it
Time to go end this s'hit...

*Gun cocks*

*door busts open*

*running steps*

*Gun shot*

*loud scream*

*Gun shot*

*body drops*

Keep up the good work. Maybe I'm wrong, and you'll go high. I just hope to be there to see you fly.

I don't like any of them. To put it simply, I don't think you need to cuss in every song. Also, I don't like rap for that reason. The only different thing in rap songs that make them different from each other are those little parts where people are talking. Other than that its all the same.
I can write poems too, and then edit them so that they have cuss words, and then get someone to say them in a very square manner, and wahlah, a rap. I think people will like your work though. I just don't think you would be happy with it as a lifelong job or anything.

Example: your kids sign you up to come to parent's day at school where you talk about your work, so you get a few of your songs and bring them to the school.

"Hey kids!"

"Hi Mr. Clark!"

"Look what I got to show you guys!"

*gets paper out of bag*

"Uuuuhh"

*you mumble something and start tossing papers back into the bag while saying "Nope, can't do this one... can't do this one..."

Your kids are left speechless after you do nothing for the class LOL.

I found it funny anyway.



Just my opinion. Peace.

Listen, I dont cuss in every song I write, and if I do I dont mean for it to sound like poetry edited! Okay for one thing I dont know too many rappers who would perform at a school! Not to flame or nothing but you really picked the wrong day to say some **** like this!

If I get famous there is no way I am going to perform at a school, and if you think your so good, hit me with a tune! PM me with a good one!

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Rather good. It's not the best, but it's not the worst either. Trust me, as a judge of the current rap competition thingie a little lower down the page, I've seen worse.

I'm not trying to rain on my earlier compliment. You've got some talent there. Just need to work a little more before you can reach the whole self financed album stuff.

*psst: If you ever make a self financed album, thank me in the list of people you'd like to thank! I'm just kidding. You've got no reason to thank me anyways. *

Clark, the point was simply made that I didn't like your music, and I don't think you will relish performing it. I believe that your life may be empty if you follow this path. =O You can read the PM I sent you back "Re:Okay Wise Guy" if you want. Peace.

Clark ma main man join the ZU rap battle. showcase your rhymes against the best and amateurs alike.

http://www.zeldauniverse.net/forums/...ad.php?t=41884

Uh dude, Im the one hostin it! Anyway here is my newest song:

"Revenge"

Okay all you people just take a seat,
While I sit here and rap to this beat,
I gonna tell yall a little tale
About me gettin revenge oh so swell
It started off as a normal day,
I walked down the hall when she looked my way
Sure she had a boyfriend and was lookin so good
When I looked at her I suddenly understood,
Why I love her more then anything in the whole world
But guess what happened, the whole situation went into a swirl
You see Im not the only one after dat girl
Turns out theres other dudes as well,
Who want to f*uck her tail
I may be guilty of this every now and then
But I love her because she is happenin!
She's nice, innocent and so sweet
She's hot all the way down from her head to her feet!
But guess what hapened at that moment
Someone had a note that they sent,
in it it said, that her wanted her to give me head
Oh **** I thought, someones gonna be dead!
So I ran over to my homey and said to him,
The trouble that had happened to me, then he told me it was him,
Who sent that note, it was hime who wrote every part of it
I got pissed and screamed "DAMNIT!"

(This song is still underway)

DAmn... Thats all I have to say is damn... If you can spit this back out in a good voice flowing, youd could go main. Either that or at least go underground. Damn good lyrics.

in it it said, that her wanted her to give me head

Not sure what that means, but I'm hooked!

D-d-d-d-DAMN u hot son! is a good thing your a judge and and not a contestant!

Originally Posted by Shimsil

D-d-d-d-DAMN u hot son! is a good thing your a judge and and not a contestant!

He is competing, not judging.

Originally Posted by Clark Kent

I will be Hostin this, and competin as well

Thats great!

Spam much^? Anyways, go to a real Rap/Spit/Freestyle forum.

Hey, I'm a big hater of Rap, but there's some pretty good beats in here.

I honestly used to be a rapper, but that was back in the 3rd grade.

Anyway, keep it up, homie G in da skillet fry skillet foshizzle! Or something like that.