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Originally Posted by Lady Knives

NOT FOR YEWWW. :3

Its for my one and only. :33

My wewfa oofa. :33

Originally Posted by Nata'kar

she means me.

cool poetry, two thumbs up izzle

i only read plague and hospitol evol. but yeah. 1337

X3

Many wish they were the Woofa Oofa. :3

All have failed to fufill that role. Until nowwww. :3

*Nuzzles* Thank yew for the dedication to me, honey. I love yew. <3

As always, sinersterly dark.

I was just in here.... ;__;

I don't know why I didn't comment, but I will now:

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G-!
B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L-!
C-A-P-T-I-V-A-T-I-N-G-!
O-T-H-E-R- -B-I-G- -W-O-R-D-S-!

^^ My favorite has to be HospitalevoL. It's dark and serious, yet sweet and yearning as well. Ingredients to make a sure-fire awesome poem.

I luff your poetry almost half as much as I luff yew. :3 (And that's a lot) <3

Twist

The sickness inside,
my guts are twisting
my eyes are wide--
open, but I'm still blind.

The bottom is falling out
the foundation is cracking,
and I'm watching the valley wither with drought.

I hear the voices,
they're screaming my name.
I see the hundreds of faces,
these faces have no names.

Sweet Suffering

Lust is a creature from deep within
Going unscathed
Slithering beneath the surface

My animalistic urges
Are winding their way out again
I’m raking my nails across your skin

I’m a chemical addict
I’m breathing deeply—
your pheromones
I’m writhing in ecstasy
I want you all, muscle, skin, and bones

You’re my carnal obsession
My delicious relapse—
And I’m fully conscious

I love the way you make me—

Suffer sweetly now

I like it, but it seems.... shallow. It doesn't really speak to me--it seems like either a message or a jumble.

Looking at it lesss analytically, it flows nicely and is easy to read.

The Sickening Rhythm

Its a sickening rhythm
Beating, beating, beating
in my head

And I've got this feeling
Aching, aching, aching
It wants to be fed

That beast inside
Its here--waiting
in the back of my mind.

I'm waiting and
Dying, Dying, Dying
I can feel my breathing slow

I'm screaming and
Crying, Crying, Crying
I refuse to let you go

I'm sitting at the sidelines
And I'm holding my breath

Sugar, won't you, watch me die?
as I fade, I digress

GFAOTJ

I watched you time and time again
Hearing you plead "God, please give me strength"
I could hear your
Thoughts so faint
I heard them fall astray

Who knew this would be the day
That I would have to watch you wither away
You fell silent in my arms as you
Failed to seize the day

Who knew this would be the day
That the pain would become more than you could take
When you collapsed I could taste the heartbreak
You said "God never gives us more than we can handle"

Who knew this would be the day
When god fell asleep on the job

LISTEN. TO. ME.

So I'm telling you to listen
and you're telling me to stop
Look at me in the eyes, baby

Tell me when its safe to come out
Tell me when to feel again
Baby, won't you please?

I'll tell you when I'm okay, baby
but right now i'm not
I'm not o-f***ing-kay, baby
I'm really f***ing not.

So I'll tell you when to stop
and you tell me when to start

'Cause I feel this curtain closing, baby
you've torn my mind apart

Hey you

Hey you
you're someone new
but you don't have the guts
to put me back together

Hey you
you're kinda cute
but shut up
you're not listening

Hey you
you're wrong
when you think you can fix me
You're just another pretty face

Hey you
you see me smiling?
that's not whats really going on inside
i'm ripping myself apart

Hey you
i'm face down in a puddle of my own blood
thanks for calling the ambulance
they're too late

Hey you
thanks for coming 'round
i know I didn't know you for long but
i think i love you


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Note: I don't usually do this. Something new for a change. Whoever bothers to read this, let me know what you think, if you think anything at all.

I think it was wonderful, a simple idea with an obviously personal and deeper meaning. I could put that sentence into a better arrangement but I'm tired and sleep deprived and couldn't be bothered.