Listening to this with headphones while staring at the middle of the screen
Brain: GUYS WHAT THE ♥♥♥♥
Right eye: I DON'T EVEN KNOW
Left eye: Things are looking fine for me I don't what you guys are freaking out about
Right ear: GUYS THIS ISN'T ENGLISH WHAT IS GOING ON
left ear: Jeez righties you guys need to chill out.
Reading someone's fiction, and right off the bat they try and sell you all sorts of new terms for things in their world. For example, if anyone has read Orson Scott Card's The Lost Gate (don't get me wrong, great book) right from the get-go we have things so as Gatemages, clants, Outselves, lockfriends, beastmages, what have you. His excellent writing was able to keep me hooked, but when I think of how easilly I am turned off by this form of exposition, keeping me hooked seems like an incredible feat. While it's something of a pet-peeve, and I might tend to do that myself in my writing, (I can't be sure) I can't help but feel that all these different terms in the first chapter is just to tell the reader "Look! I came up with this awesome, original world! Look how creative it is! 'Sword'? Pfft, this is now going to be called a Sting Stick."
Or else, it tells us that the writer has the world and terms well-planned out, but he doesn't have the conveying of this world well-planned at all. If I find myself struggling to remember anything, to the point where I might need note cards, an introduction could very well be improved upon.