The Legend of Zelda: Tales of the Shadow

We all know the story of the hero, how long ago he used the Blade of Evil's Bane and vanquished evil from the world. Although after he did so, he was thrown back in time to regain the childhood he lost saving the land of Hyrule... But, that action had thrown Hyrule back into despair, since the hero was back to a child, he had never saved Hyrule, so the events happened all over again, but this time he could not do anything to help, for he had lost all elements of the hero...
By the time the former hero had grown to an adult, Hyrule was nothing but desert, and his own people had thrown him out since he was not one of them, he was not a child... The former hero, Link, went out in search of the blade he used to vanquish the evil, but what he would find would be something quite different...
Now we shall move the story onto the former hero, and how he resumed his title as the hero... An unarmed hero in a land controled by evil...
Link went through the ruins of Hyrule's formerly great fields, having to avoid every enemy he came across, he was unarmed, helpless, and there was no way to reason with these beasts. As he came across what used to be Castle Town, he realised there was no way he could go in... The town had been taken over by monsters and he was still unarmed, but the moat outside the castle was dried and gone, the gates that had blocked anyone from using the moats to sneak in, in pieces. So Link came up with a simple plan, run into the tunnel and see if he could find himself near the Temple of Time. And so he did, he came across the temple, no monsters at all.
He ran into the temple, or, what was left of it... And went for the master sword... The blade was old, but it had not aged... As Link's hand went for the blade, a magical power thrown him back... He was but a normal man, and as such had evil in his heart... So he dropped... He prayed, he prayed to the great godesses of Hyrule, to allow him to be cleared of all his evil; and so he was... All his sin was washed away... Into an orb of shadow, but this orb started to change into a man... It took a shape Link was all to familiar with, it turned into a dark version of Link himself...
"Who are you?" Was all Link could manage to say...
"Who else, I'm you," the figure said... And with that the shadow had turned his back on Link and he drew the sacred blade... The Master Sword now belonged to the shadow.
"Evil shouldn't be able to touch that blade!" Link shouted with anger...
And the shadow then explained, "But, Link, as evil as I am, the blade reconises me, as you! Since I am your evil, and not evil of my own, it reconised me as its master, I own the blade, but of course I need to do something about how it looks, it just isn't right!"
As he said that, an aura of shadow had grown around the blade, and, the blade had tranformed from one that could slice evil apart, that no evil could touch; into one that nobody without a heart of darkness could touch, it gained the ability to cut through the brightest light and change it to darkness.

And thus concludes part one of the story....

Part Two

Link was thinking about what the shadow said... And then he realised...
"So your me," Link asked, thinking he knew a way out of this.
"Yes," the shadow said... "Why?"
"This is why!" Link shouted, and with that, the Master Sword had been cloned, Link owning the light side and the shadow having the dark.
"Heh, clever, I didn't expect you to think of that. But we are the same person so it doesn't surprise me in the least... And I should tell you that the Master Sword will have no more effect on me then a normal blade, so you'll have to find another sacred blade... If there even is one!" And with that the shadow vanished, since he knew he was on the same level as Link, and neither one of them would win.
"I suppose everything turned out OK, I have the sword and didn't have to fight him..." Link thought aloud.
And so he left, slaying every monster that was in his way... Link worked his way back to Kokiri Forest, perhaps the Deku Tree would know what to do?
Now the Deku Tree was barely living, since most of the water in the world had left and the minerals in the ground has left as well, he had only a short time before he would pass once and for all.
"Son, what do you need?" The Deku Tree asked... And then Link explained what happened and what he needed.
"Well... T..There is a blade, the strongest one to ever exist, made of an unknown crystal it never shatters and kills most in one hit..." The Deku Tree was having troubles talking, today was his last day, perhaps his last hour.
"And where can I find this blade?" Link asked.
"It is a blade forged by the godesses themselves, not by their magic, but by their hands... It supasses your blade in every way, and although its location is unknown that is probably because it isn't in this world, it lies within the Sacred Realm, where you drew your blade..." And as he said that allowed his last moments to just be forgotten, he passed on and left Link with a burning desire to take down his shadow and save the land.
So we went back to the temple, and the shadow was back.
"Need something here?" The shadow asked. "I know of that blade your looking for, so I decided I should stop you."
Link knew what was next, the destruction of the Temple of Time, so he lunged for the shadow! But the shadow vanished and appeared floating above the temple, focusing dark energy to do the job.
Link forgot all fear and ran into the temple and shoved the blade back in its pedastal, he traveled off into the Sacred Realm in the nick of time, but now he is trapped there, perhaps forever?

PART TWO ~ End

First - there's no need to put the entire fic in bold. Save that for author's notes or something. It's distracting!

Second - I like the backstory you've given us here, but it's too short. The idea that Zelda made a dreadful mistake sending Link back at the end of OoT is a good one, but I think what you've done here is explained all of that as quickly as possible so you could get on with writing your story. That's all well and good, we need to be pulled into the action quickly, but there's something to be said for setting the stage, too. Add in a little more thought to your narrative and tell us how Link feels about all this. You could be painting a very bleak picture indeed.

Third - I spotted a few grammar issues. "Your" and "you're" are two different words and they are not interchangeable. "You are me" = "You're me"; "Your me" = "This me is yours." Makes no sense, does it?

Overall, not a bad concept, but the execution needs work. Keep trying! You have interesting ideas.

Originally Posted by TheGeminiSage

First - there's no need to put the entire fic in bold. Save that for author's notes or something. It's distracting!

Second - I like the backstory you've given us here, but it's too short. The idea that Zelda made a dreadful mistake sending Link back at the end of OoT is a good one, but I think what you've done here is explained all of that as quickly as possible so you could get on with writing your story. That's all well and good, we need to be pulled into the action quickly, but there's something to be said for setting the stage, too. Add in a little more thought to your narrative and tell us how Link feels about all this. You could be painting a very bleak picture indeed.

Third - I spotted a few grammar issues. "Your" and "you're" are two different words and they are not interchangeable. "You are me" = "You're me"; "Your me" = "This me is yours." Makes no sense, does it?

Overall, not a bad concept, but the execution needs work. Keep trying! You have interesting ideas.

Heh, thanks I guess. I consider this a rough draft, I'm making it up as I go along, no thought was put into, I just jumped on here and started typing...
I'm actually working on the side with more detail and such, but none of that will show up until it's done... Well, I will be working on the side starting tomorrow. I'll consider your advice and more than likely use it!
It's hard to get spelling and grammar perfect when your just making it up as you go along.
But anyways, this is just supposed to be a basic story, I do plan on correcting it later on...
I'm repeating myself now, guess I should stop... Thanks for the advice.

Yeah, spelling and grammar are hard. You might want to try outlining your fic before you keep going. If you make a clear start, middle, and end before you get to writing, you have a better sense of direction.