Excirpt: "Weakest Link" Story:

"What do you mean, she's taken?!" gasped Link, running over to Impa with a shocked look on his pale face. "Apparently, a person that looked exactly like you, except with black clothes, took Princess Zelda and ran away. Prince Mykel is furious. So my advice to you is: do not go near the Prince for a few thousand years." sighed Impa. "I must! He needs me if he hopes to find Zelda! Who knows what the kidnapper will do to her?" Link left the room.

"My Zelda is taken! Who could I send to rescue her?" When Link discovered Mykel, he was sitting on his throne, head buried in his hands. "I'll go, Your Frumpyness." Link bowed low. Out of nowhere, Mykel's iron-clad fist came and punched Link in the jaw, sending him reeling to the floor. "Might I be so bold as to inquire what that whole business was about, Your Highness?" Linki got to his feet, rubbing his cheek, where a lump the size of a tennis ball had risen. "Never call me that again. ESPECIALLY when I'm mad! Now, you said you wanted to help me find Zelda?" Mykel straightened his jet-black leotard. "Yes. Plus, I think I know where to look first." said Link in a muffled voice.

Please comment and let me know how I did!

This is work based on an existing franchise, not an original story. Next time, keep that in mind before posting, thank you.

First off, everytime someone new speaks, it's a paragraph. Secondly, it's spelled excerpt, and third, from this excerpt, it is impossible to discern what in the HECK this story is about. So other than it being blindly hard to read and comprehend... oh wait. Reading and comprehension are important, especially when writing a story.

I'm sorry if anything came out as mean or offesive as it is not supposed to. Just some friendly advice, writer to writer.