Through the Forever Twilight

The plot of this story lacks any depth whatsoever. I can't tell you how many, "Girl gets sucked into Hyrule and falls in love with Link" stories I have seen. I suppose this story isn't worthless. But it really needs cleaned up.

Ok, not to be mean or anything.. but
THAT IS ONE HELL OF A GOOD STORY!
ahem, sorry for useing h-e- double hokey sticks, but that was the only good word that could fit in the sentance. XD So, I spotted some wrong-doing grammer... (im kinda bad at it too.. so i kinda know how you feel...) but the plot and the story is AWSOMESAUCE! MORE MORE!!!!!
(XD im new here, so.. i spent about two days reading the whole thing.^^ ima FAST reader. I will repeat what i said... GOOD STORY!

Originally Posted by BeingofShadows

Ok, not to be mean or anything.. but
THAT IS ONE HELL OF A GOOD STORY!
ahem, sorry for useing h-e- double hokey sticks, but that was the only good word that could fit in the sentance. XD So, I spotted some wrong-doing grammer... (im kinda bad at it too.. so i kinda know how you feel...) but the plot and the story is AWSOMESAUCE! MORE MORE!!!!!
(XD im new here, so.. i spent about two days reading the whole thing.^^ ima FAST reader. I will repeat what i said... GOOD STORY!

Man, you don't know how happy that makes me! Seriously, you just brought me outta my funk! I'm currently working on the second one, and I know it's lacking a little bit because I wrote this a summer or two ago. But DAMN thank you so much! I'll try to get more for you soon!

Originally Posted by MaidenOfLight

Man, you don't know how happy that makes me! Seriously, you just brought me outta my funk! I'm currently working on the second one, and I know it's lacking a little bit because I wrote this a summer or two ago. But DAMN thank you so much! I'll try to get more for you soon!

If you post anything additiononal, I hope you take everything I told you into consideration. Just because someone criticizes your work, doesn't mean they are bashing you or your fic. The hallmark of a good author is how they respond to criticism. A lot of the time when someone mentions something wrong with your story, it's because they see an area that needs inprovement.

I am not impressed with what I've seen out of you so far. You have not only ignored Mandi's criticisms, but Eternal Legend's as well. I hate to say this, but you are displaying the typical traits of a Suethor, i.e. will only listen to praise, as well as becoming hurt at criticism. If praise is all you are looking for, then you will not find it here. Unless you listen to all forms of criticism, you will never get better as a writer.

If you need additional help, feel free to come to the Writing School. I and several other members would be more than happy to help you. I wish you luck in your future writing endeavors.

I will be taking everyone's criticism into check. I'm sorry if it seemed I was taking that badly, which I was. I have been reading over it, and making changes accordingly and have begun to re write it. Thanks everyone for your help and let's hope take 2 is better...