(com) Wind Waker based on my Comic [E]

[72hours192]

I know I need much more work on my other parody, but it's been a while since I've played SMS and I'm WAY past the beginning in gameplay. My school had this thing called Market Night and the whole fifth grade sold stuff. I sold out all of my Wind Waker comics, but I got to keep the original. So let's do this!!!

Long ago, there existed a kingdom where a golden power apparently called the Triforce lay hidden. It was a prosperous land blessed with green forests, tall mountains, and peace.

But one day, an evil pig-man-thing called Ganon appeared and took the Triforce for himself. With its strength at his command, he spread darkness across the kingdom. But when all hope had died, and the hour of doom seemed at hand...

A young boy clothed in green appeared as if from nowhere. Wielding the Blade of Evil's Bane, he sealed Ganon away and gave the land light. This boy, who traveled through time to save the land, was known as Link, the Hero of Time. His tale was passed down for centuries until it became legend. But then a day came when a fell wind began to blow across the kingdom. Ganon...umm, how did that thing go? Something something something eager to resume his dark designs, something something something but Link did not appear. Something something something.

What became of that kingdom...? None except me remain who know.

The memory of the kingdom vanished, but its legend survived on the wind's breath. On a certain island called Outset, it became customary to garb boys in green when they became 12. The elders wished only for the youths to know courage like the hero of legend...

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Chapter one is a bit later today. But, how did I do on the Legend of Hyrule?

[72hours192]

EDIT: Sorry, for some reason I was in the middle of Chapter One and I hit the wrong key. Then it warped me to a different forum, and I could never recover the chapter. So here's the chapter again!

NOTE: There are three acts, since my comic's Chapter One was a bit long...

Chapter 1-1 - A Hero Awakens

Aryll: OOOYYYYYY! BIG BROTHER!!!

Link: *mumbling to himself* nnn...

Aryll: *climbs lookout* Aha! *hides behind pole*

Link: Who? *looks around* Meh, I'd better get back to Granny's house...

Aryll: Maybe you should, since it's...

Link: Saturday?

Aryll: Yes, and it's your 12th birthday!

Link: Whoa! Already? I'd better hurry!
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Granny: Hello, Link. This is part of a gift that I'm going to give you... come here, try these on for size!

Duhduhduh-DUUUUUHHHHH!!! You got the Hero's Clothes! Wear them and you'll look like the Hero of Time! Sorta... they look a bit out of season, don't they?

Link: Yeah, how's about WAAY out of season?! *puts them on and starts sweating*

Granny: You only have to wear them for today!

Link: Um, okay?

Granny: Now, go play with Aryll.
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Link: Aryll... knock knock.

Aryll: Who's there?

Link: Your big brother.

Aryll: My big brother who?

Link: Your big brother wants to see your smiling face!

Aryll: *turns around* Hi, brother! Those clothes look a bit out of season... but they ARE heroic! So anyway, I have a present for you!

Link: Whatisit whatisit whatisit?!

Aryll: THIS!

Duhduhduh-DUUUUHHHH!!! You got Aryll's telescope! There's a tiny thumbstick on it! Push it to zoom in, and pull to zoom out!

Link: Hey, look! It's Quill, that birdman who delivers our mail! Maybe he's here with some birthday cards... *zooms in*
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Okay, so that was Act One. I'll save the Helmaroc King event for the second act. But overall, do you like it?

[Adam_148]

don't double post, either edit your first post or wait for someone to post first

[72hours192]

Actually, I heard from a mod that it's okay to double post in a fanfic.

[Tazryl]

Originally Posted by Adam_148

don't double post, either edit your first post or wait for someone to post first

As far as I know its fine to doublepost in your own story/art threads.

As fot the story itself, its kinda... boring. The whole Knock Knock joke was sorta lame. Might want to try and find a better way to convey the idea that the Heroes Cloths are uncomfortablly hot for the time of year.

Just a thought. I think it has potential but still needs some work.

[72hours192]

I don't have very much time left, but Act Two is coming soon!

[72hours192]

Alright here we go!

Chapter 1-2 - The Helmaroc King

Link: He is very strange-looking... I wonder how he got those wings. And the beak.

Aryll: Yeah. What the--LOOK! UP IN THE SKY! It's a...a... GIANT SEAGULL!!!

Link: That's no seagull... it's an EAGLE!!! *rocks flying* What?

Aryll: LOOK! PIRATES!!!

Helmaroc King: AWKK!

Link: Any idea what it just sa--holy freakshow, it dropped a pirate girl into the forest!

Aryll: I'm not going.

Link: Ugh. Fine...
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Link: I know I dropped that thing in the shrub...hmm...*falls into bush* OUCH! Stupid thorns! Wait...that was no thorn, that was my sword! *picks up sword and wiggles out of bush* That is the LAST time I stay up late cutting Mesa's grass. Now it's off to the forest!
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I know that was short, but I want to save the Tetra event for the final act!

[72hours192]

Let's go!
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Chapter 1-3 - Tetra

Link: HELLOOO? Pirate-woman? Are you here? *spots Tetra* Whoa! I hope that branch holds out long enough! *goes around the forest*

(surprise guest is in this part!)

???: HEY!

Link: W-w-w-w-w-w-who's th-th-th-there?! *draws sword*

???: I'm a fairy!

Link: What?! I don't even believe in you guys. Go bug my sister.

???: But I once helped out the Hero of Time!

Link: ................Keep talking.

(guess who it is! It's......)

Link: WHAAAAAAAT?! You're supposed to be in Ocarina of Time!!!

Navi: Nope! Great Fairy's orders! Gotta stay here!

Link: Fine. Then could you help me out here?

Kargorok: *cawcawcaw* *drops two Bokoblins into battle*

[Insert a boring battle]

Tetra: AHHH!!! Someone get me OFF of this thing!!!

Link: Hold on! I'll save you!

*Tetra squirms so much that the branch breaks and Tetra falls down*

Tetra: WHOAWHOAWHOA! *THUD* ow...

Link: *helps Tetra up* You okay?

Tetra: Yeah... the name's Tetra.

Link: I'm Link. This is--wait! Why are you still here?!?

Navi: I'm supposed to come with you! Great Fairy's orders! *flies over to Tetra* Hi, I'm Navi! I live in this forest!

Link: Let's go outside...
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Aryll: OYYY! BIG BROTHER! You saved her!

Link: Yeah I did it!

Helmaroc King: CACAW CACAW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Link: ARYLL LOOK OUT!!!!!!!!!!

Aryll: ONOZ!

*Aryll gets snatched up*

Link: GAAAHH!!!! GIVE HER BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *falls over cliff* WHOA! *gets grabbed by Tetra*

Tetra: Gotcha! Now have I payed what I owed?

Link: Yes. Now I owe you BIG TIME.
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Quill: Hey, Link! I saw everything! That bird is the Helmaroc King, and it lives in the Forsaken Fortress.

Link: WHAAAA*camera on Outset*AAAAAAAAA*camera on Great Sea*AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA*camera on Earth*AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAT?!*camera on the universe then back to Outset* I WILL NOT LET THIS HAPPEN TO HER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tetra: Now THOSE are some pipes...but back up there! Don't you need a shield or something?

Link: Right. I remember Grandma chatting about a shield while I was changing clothes...*runs to Grandma's house*
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Link: Grandma, I need a shield, Aryll got snatched up by a giant eagle.

Granny: Do you mean...*turns around* this shield? Your other gift?

Link: What? And now you're okay with me having all this gear?!

Granny: Yes, because I knew, Link...that you would set sail today. Please be careful, and return safely with Aryll...

Link: Okay! I'll do my best!
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Tetra: Ready?

Link: When you are!

*ship sails away as Link waves goodbye*

Link: *turns around and shouts out to the horizon* HANG IN THERE, ARYLL! BIG BROTHER'S COMING!!!
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Was THAT awesome or what?!

[William]

this is so lame...

[72hours192]

It's E-rated, so do you think maybe it should be lame?