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(ZGen)The personal recollections of Ganondorf(T)
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As you may know, I am sealed in the Sacred Realm by the Six Sages, Princess Zelda and Link. As you may not take interest in my stories of my childhood, teenage and adulthood, I will likely still appreciate that you take interest in how a noble and royal king of Gerudos got lonely and sealed in the Sacred Realm. This is only my intro, so no care of this, ok? Chapter One: My Days as a child: My Family As I can remember, my mother was named Nafura. Me and my mother were the family. My father, that I never got to meet him, was a man that fell in-love with my mother Nafura. I slowly was treated like a royal prince of the sands. My mother, since I was the king of the Gerudos, she could have access to any part of the Gerudian Fortress and use some of the Gerudian Rubies. I was rather bored since I could only see my mother when she had a request sented by the chancellor. Malafan, the chancellor, was a noble women that was like my mother only that she attended me like I was royal. One day, as I walked through the corridors of the fortress, I noticed that the Gerudian Empire's witches, Rubyna, Saphira and Emeralsa, were creating a drink that could easily kill a victim with a simple drink from it. These witches, because of their names, their elemental powers came from fire, water and wind. Their hair, accesories and clothes were maded from rubies, emeralds and sapphires. As I saw their shadows approaching the corridors, I rapidly runned from the place and hide inside a barrel. I saw them giving the potion to a familiar voice to me. When they finished laughing, I heard a scream. When I got out of the barrel, I saw my mother lying in the floor with no breathing motion! I rapidly took all actions to try to make her live again, but, I couldn't. As the sunset, slowly a tear began to drop from my eye. I summoned the chancellor and explained her about the situation. Malafan took action of the crime. As the sun began rising, the Gerudian people were awoken to assist to the judgement. I accused Rubyna, Saphira and Emeralsa for killing a member of the Gerudian Royal Family. The witches had only one answer: "Its not our fault! Nafura told us to create a potion that could give the drinkers life into the hands of dead! She wanted to die!" The witches exclaimed. "Its all lies! I was hiding in a barrel at that moment! I saw how you laughed at her agony!" I exclaimed. The witches stood quiet and the judge took actions. "I find that the witches are guilty! I sentence the three into an eternal suffering of being sealed in the Dessert Temple!" Exclaimed the judge. The day of the "Gate's Opening" arrived. Its a day were a person is sealed for the "monster that lurks inside the temple. The three witches were slowly being dragged by the "force" the temple had. Their screams maked me smile, their plead maked my stomach full and their crying maked my heart and soul happier. I even forgot of my mother's dead. That was when I had began to slowly being corrupted. I hoped you liked the first chapter of my childhood, there are more to come...
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This is pretty good and well written, maybe just some minor grammar errors but not too noticeable. I really love how this is told from a first person point of view; from none other than Ganon himself.
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02-05-2008, 03:48 PM
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02-05-2008, 03:58 PM
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02-05-2008, 04:33 PM
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(OoT) The Legend of Zelda: Sheikah Hystory (*LoZ*) Plot: It tells why and hopw the Sheikahs arrived to Hyrule and how they lived and passed their lives in it...
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02-05-2008, 04:34 PM
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For your other fan fic.
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02-05-2008, 04:35 PM
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EDIT: Its a LOT better and more facinating than this one. It holds many details and battle scene descriptions...
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02-05-2008, 04:35 PM
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Heh, that was weird- we posted at the same time lol
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02-05-2008, 04:37 PM
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02-05-2008, 08:45 PM
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Is it a coincidence that this hasalmost the same name as my fanfic? The Personal Recollections of Princess Zelda.
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I just don't know who posted first.
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02-06-2008, 03:05 PM
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02-06-2008, 03:18 PM
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Even Ganondorf loves cookies, eh humulos?
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02-06-2008, 05:13 PM
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EDIT: I have edited the fan fic! Read that it has more descriptions... (adjetives)
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02-06-2008, 05:42 PM
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Not alot wrong with it as far as I can see.
Some grammar errors, and spelling mistakes. Maked should be made. Also something that should be revised. Original: Quote:
The bold part basicly repeats what you are saying. It sounds confusing. Mostly it reminds me of my habbit of getting distracted and straying off course. It should read something like, Quote:
You can alter the actual sentence anyway you want. I just wrote an example. Other then a few spelling errors and grammar it sounds great and should be interesting. So keep up the work
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02-06-2008, 06:55 PM
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NOW PEOPLE! Read my other ff! Its about the Sheikahs!
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Chapter 2:
My Days as a child: My royalty unfolds As I return to my throne, I see a teenage kid with an adult man whom looked like he was hes father. As I approached to them they said... "Ah! Lord Ganondorf, I am a representative from Hyrule!" "What do you desire Hylian?" "Please your highness, you may call me Frienco," "Ok, Frienco, what business you have in my valley?" "My son Francisk has something to say," "May I have a word with hes majesty Ganondorf?" "You may Francisk," As we left to the corridors of the fortress, we began speaking... "What is it that it has to be talked in private?" "You see your highness I have witnessed Gerudos in my town," "And?" "Well, they have been stealing," "WHAT?!" "Yes your highness, I have witnessed them crushing into houses and grabbing things that aren't their!" "Hmm, there have been reports of Gerudos leaving at night, but what proof you have?" "Well as you see your highness I caught one in action," "WHAT?!" "She is in the dungeon of our castle," "Can you arrange a meeting with you in the morning?" "I can," "Thank you, I'll have a word with you at morning," As we left back to the throne room, Frienco and Francisk left. I then retreated to my room and changed into my sleeping clothes. I then sat in the bed and began sleeping... At morning... I changed into my royal clothes, a black armor with yellow ornaments and left in direction to Hyrule Castle... As I got out of my dried valley, I noticed the beauty of the fresh temperature, the fertile soil and the peaceful animals running by. I then saw a big ranch of the Hylians known as Lon Lon Ranch, where they get a milk very tasty and famous called Lon Lon Milk. As I got closer to the Castle borders, I was afraid that the people stare at me like I was different, I was very nervous but I managed to overcome this. I entered the place and saw many people. As I walked through the town, I saw many dogs running around, many shops and people staring at the items. They were so distracted, they didn't even noticed me! I then reached the path to the castle. I got to a guard that was in charge of the gate that leads to the castle... "Thouht be Lord Ganondorf?" "Um... yes?" "Thouht is being expected by thy king and prince," "Um... ok?" The guard opened the gate and I entered the castle. It was a majestic place filled of fancy equipment, many paintings of the Royal Hylian Family and statues of the past kings. As I walked through the place, I saw more and more guards by now and then. I then managed to reach a door filled with gold and rubies. The door opened and I saw the throne room. It was more majestic than the halls and corridors of the castle! I then meet ed with king Frienco and prince Francisk... "I am here Francisk," "Yes, very well," "Where is she?" "Guards! Bring her in!" As they opened the door, I saw a young women with orange hair, black toned skin and white clothes, but wait, shes... NABOORU! PLZ comment on the new chapter of hes childhood!
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02-10-2008, 07:52 PM
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Pretty good chapter.
One thing I question though: Ganondorf doesn't know he's the King of a tribe of thieves? Or are you writing this story so that they weren't thieves until after Ganondorf took power and started becoming corrupt? One other thing: At the end of the chapter, he seems surprised about it being Nabooru...but she was never mentioned in chapter 1. Are you gonna explain how Ganondorf and Nabooru knew each other in the next one? Keep up the good work!
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02-10-2008, 08:02 PM
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Nabooru was a babyhood friend of hes. Since im not posting about hes babyhood, I will make a small flashback about him playing with Nabooru. Its like video games, you see someone and then he acts like he has meeted him but the game doesn't focus on how he meets that person...
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02-17-2008, 01:18 PM
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Chapter 3:
My Ending Days of a Child: Nabooru's reason and my actions: As she approached more and more to the throne and me, she kept hidding her face from me. The king and prince began talking... "Here she is," "Do yu know her?" As I thinked and thinked on what to do, my heart feeled tha she needed to payand my soul told me to evade her... "Umm...hmm..." "Do you know her, yes or no?!" "No!" When Nabooru heard my replied, she dropped a tear and she bitted her lips. She then broke the chains she had when the guards weren't looking and she ranned to me with her knives... "You don't know me, eh?" "Um... no I don't!" "Then you shall pay for leaving your own friend!" She raised her knike and suddenly... SCIING! She didn't even scratched me! She was crying in the ground without mercy. The king andPrince talked to me... "Ganondorf, you can leave with her..." "I shall your highness..." "But, with one condition..." "What shall it be?" The king standed up from thethrone and grabbed hes scepeter. He then openedthe orb and grabbed a paper... "Read this, Ganondorf..." I began to read it and it said... "To he who receives this, thouht shall not again walk throught the territories of the Hylians once more for royal and peril reasons. If thouht dissobey, thee shall befall to the most fersome weapon to all..." I opened my eys and dropped a tear before he paper. I wrecked the paper and grabbed Nabooru by her hand very hard... "WHY DID YOU HAD TO DO THIS?!" "Im sorry!" "TELL ME! WHY?!" "Please! Unhand me!" I grabbed her so hard that I almost broke her arm. I saw her crying in the ground andit maked me feel... feel... so happy! I kicked her and it maked me more and more happier! But, my emotions felt terrible and my head began to hurt... "Arg! Grgh! Ergh!" "Whats happening to him?" My eyes were filled with fire, my nails growed like knifes, my atitude changed to a rageful one and I suddenly... ARGH! When I opened my eyes, I had my nails stucked in the king's face with him death... The princes bowed to the ground and began crying... "Fa-fa-father!" "Um... im sorry your highness!" "GUARDS!" "Yes sir?!" "GET THEM OUT OF HERE!!!" "Sir?" "DIDN'T YOU HEARD ME?!?!" "Aah! Yes sir!" They grabbed me and Nabooru and kicked us out of the castle and the town. Me and Nabooru walked our way throught the fields... "Nabooru..." "Yes?" "Why is my heart filled with happines?" "Its because your a noble one!" "No!" "Why not?" "Each time I see someone in agony, I feel happiness..." "..." "Nabooru?" "Ganondorf..." "Yes?" "Don't ever touch me!" "Is there anything I can do?" "Theres is but one thing..." As the sunsets, she grabbed my hands and approached to me and said... "You must search for... "it"..." I opened my eyes as that "it" was never to be touched nor seen by any force... We returned to the valley and decided to look at the starts. We fell asleep and I quietly walked away in the valley's mystery... END of chapter! PLZ COMMENT!
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