WW parody: FS links!

Hi this is my first parody on this site so i hope its good,its for windwaker.
Also My grammar might not be that good...

PROLOGUE:One day in hyrule a powerful man tried to take conttrol of hyrule but after being defeated by a hero with weird clothes,Ganondorf said the legendary words of time "All I wanted was the triforce and I ended up with this pickle sandwich!" but he did'nt know the pickle sandwich's true power it was so powerful that it has the symbol of the triforce on it. he took a bite and he was revived! The people were happy but that was all lost when the boy left because a giant pickle tried to destroy hyrule,so the gods washed away hyrule with bottled water. what happened to the hero? Nobody knows...

CHAPTER 1:The nutcase's!

Aryl: OY!!!

Red link: Everbody pretend your asleep!

Blue link: I like fried mustard!

Green link: We are all going to die!

Purple link: WAH!

Aryl: Brother's! Your alive! now I must kill- I mean tell you that grandma wants you.

Green link: Ok! Lets go guy's!

Blue link: Hehehehheheheheheh!

Red link: Your nuts!

Purple link: OMG I am going to die!

*they get down off the watch tower*

Snot nose kid: Har har!

RL: Go away idiot!

SNK: WAAAAH YOUR MEAN!!!

*they go to SK mom*

SNK mom: Hey you want some fried pig?

GL: Yeah!

RL: Ok.

BL: I want mine with mustard!

PL: Sniff ok...

*They sit down and eat it*

RL Bleah!

GL: I know this stuff came out of the oven but it taste like it came out of the sofa cushion!

RL: There's a word for this stuff and it aint food.

BL: I like it!

PL: I hate cooked animals! WAAH!

*they go to Grandmas house*

PL: I hope she dosent get mad ae us!

GL: It will be okay brother.

CHAPTER 1 ENDS.

So what do you think?

EDIT: Please sombody post some coments tell me if its bad or not as I am ready to post the next chapter. Also I changed a few things....

Here I am going to make the next chapter!

CHAPTER 2:The beginning of it all!

*They go in grandmas house*

Grandma: here are your tunics-Oh wait you already put em on this morning!

GL: So you wanted us here for nothing!

Grandma: Uh it appears so hehe...

RL: Crap this is what I get for looking at our moms boobs!

GL: WHAT?!?!

RL: Oh nothing hehe....

PL: So thats why mom sent us to grandma!

GL: She said she sent us here because she was in love!

RL: Uh...er. Oh look aryl wants us!


Aryl: I got a present for you!

GL: Is it a science kit?

RL: Is it a xbox360?

PL: Is it a vegetarian guide?

BL: Is it ketchup?

Aryl: No,nope,no,and no way! Its a telescope!

RL:Aww man!

GL: Let me look through it!

Aryl: Ok here *Hands telescope to GL*

GL: Oh look I see a ugly postman and Oh my!

BL: WHAT?! WHAT IS IT!?

GL: A giant flying pickle and it has a girl in its claws and oh no it droped her in the forest!

Aryl: You got save her!

RL: I hate to say it but we got to go to orca.

PL: NOOOOOOOOOO!!! I DONT WANT TO GO TO %$$&ING ORCA!!!

END CHAPTER

Sorry it was short but my computer is messed up......

No offense or anything, but its sorta Grass's OoT parody for Wind Waker. And it's good jokes but not in the right spot. Good job!

I just decided to quickly make a rating thing for this:

Originalness: 4/10
It's Grass's OoT parody for WW.

Humor: 6/10
Great jokes, but not always where it should be. Also its not a joke if its copying Grass.

Overall: 5/10
It seems you dont completely know what your doing. Although this is great work. I would give you more overall score, but I like making the overall the average of the other scores. It would be 7/10 otherwise.


5/10 OVERALL

Good
Medium
Bad

Edit: Also, for actions, you should make it like:

Green Link: *Burns Purple Link alive* The flames!!!!!!!

instead of

Green Link: Burns purple link alive the flames!!!!!!!!!!111

ummm.....2.l33tness!!!!
("two point leetness" is my phrase)

Sorry it just my computer and I have to think it up fast because my computer wont keep me loged in! It keeps loging me out and it says your not registered and crap like that because it logs me out while I post the message!

Oh. Well, remember. It's still a very good job. You should try checking the "Remember me" box when you log in.

Thats what I do, and I stay on all day, all night, all the next day, all the way until I log off or run CCleaner.

Good luck with future chapters!

Chapter 3:The adventure the thrills the bananas?

*They go to orcas house*

Orca: I AM ORCA THE KING OF MONKEY'S! *Monkey's appear out of nowhere*

RL: OH. MY. GOD.

BL: *Eats banana* uh....errr..EEH EEH OOH OOH AAH AAH!

Orca: YOU!

BL: Me?

Orca: YA YOU WITH THE BANANA!

BL: What banana? I don't see no banana.

GL: For crying out loud! Orca we need swords!

Orca: You need swords eh. Ok only if you pass my test!

RL: So whats the test?

Orca: Are you ready! OK you must defeat my flying monkeys without weapons!

RL: This is gonna be bad!

Orca: COME OUT MY FLYING MONKEYS!

PL: Uh oh.

*Flying monkeys come out of the bathroom*

FM1: You must die for we are banana powered!

FM2: But FM1 I thought we are britney powered?

FM1: For the last time,we do not worship britney spears!

FM2: But I love her songs! *Farts* Oops I did it again!

FM1: UGH! That smell is terrible must...live..err......*Dies*

FM2: Oh well I guess I must. *Dies*

PL: That was easy.

BL: That was peasy!

RL: Why do I live with such morons!

GL: Ok orca the monkeys are dead now can we have our swords?

Orca: Here ya go! *Gives them swords*

Text bubble: Tadadadadada! You got the swords! Though they have been used by the monkeys in the bathroom!

RL: And yet I am still holding it....

GL: Ok now we must go to the forest!

*They climb up the hill to find a guy with a telascope*

GL: Who are you?

Mario: I am mario! The corny plumber! Check out my telescope with stars on it!

RL: Uh ok.... I think we should be going now.

GL: Yeah me too.

Mario: See ya!

*They cross the bridge and into the forest*

PL: Hey look there is a pond I love fish because I am vegetarian! I can't beleive people would eat them!

BL: Uh isnt fish heart food?

RL: No you moron its brain food!

PL: *Jumps in the pond*

RL: Isnt that pond leach infested?

PL: *Comes out of the pond* Woah I feel a little woozy...

Leach: SLURP SLURP SLURP SLURP!

PL: Oh hey little guy your so cute!

Leach: YOU GONNA DIE!

PL: Oh he thinks he gonna kill me on my arm! He so cute!

RL: This is why you should eat fish.

GL: Cuz it brainfood?

RL: Of course!

*They go further in the forest*

Bokoblin: HEY! YOU!

PL: Huh?

Bokoblin: YOU SHALL DIE!

BL: Errr..butthead!

Bokoblin: How dare you call me a butthead! Now face my wrath of my boulder attack!

*Boulder falls from the sky and lands on the fairy fountain*

Great fairy: Why you little!

RL: That was a little inaccurate...

Bokoblin: DAMN IT!

GL: *Stabs the bokoblin*

Bokoblin:.....momy! *Dies*

Tetra: *Falls from the tree* Ow that totally hurt!

Pirate: OY!

Tetra: Where have you totaly been?

Pirate: *Picks up tetra and goes out the woods*

BL: Lets fly after her!

RL:We cant fly you moron!

GL: Come on guys!

*They follow tetra outside*

Aryl:*Is in the claws of the helmaroc king* Hey guys!

GL: Hey why are you in the claws of a giant bird!?

Aryl: Because I'm pregnent with Red links baby!

GL: WHAT?!?!

Aryl: uh nothing hehe...

GL: That bird took her! We must save her!

RL: Aw crap this is getting cliched!

*They go to tetra*

Tetra: Hey what do you want with my damn ****ing good ship?

GL: We need a to save our sister!

*Rito comes*

Quill: Hey tetra its your fault there sister got kidnapped because when you dropped in the forest,monkeys start worshiping britney spears and mario kissed michael jackson!
Also that bird only kidnaps people who arent virgins!

RL: The hell?!

GL: This game should be rated M!

BL: We should be rated pie!

*Everybody stares at blue link*

BL:........BANANAS!

What will happen next!
END CHAPTER

Did you like it? I hope so. I added some stuff though.

Originally Posted by trogdorhump

No offense or anything, but its sorta Grass's OoT parody for Wind Waker.

i have to disagree with that. this doesnt feel like 3x link at all. And now for this parody... uhm... i would recomend you to take your time. some of the parts are actually funny (some) but i feel like the whole thing is too rushed up.

Great jokes, but not always where it should be.

now i do have to agree with that. not all are great jokes, but when they are, they're just not on the right spot.

Quill: Hey tetra its your fault there sister got kidnapped because when you dropped in the forest,monkeys start worshiping britney spears and mario kissed michael jackson!
Also that bird only kidnaps people who arent virgins!

that ALMOST felt like a joke. it went too fast to tell if it was a joke or not, and it's not funny. Also, look for the difference between "there" and "their"

this really needs improvement, but it's alright for a first parody here i guess. overall: 12/20= -D (60%)

Yeah to tell you the truth it was'nt that great of a chapter. Also I beleive it will get better in later chapters.

CHAPTER 4: Dead link tells no tales.

Tetra: You need to have a sheild to come with us or you will pummeled by the *&%$ing %&*$ers!

RL: Swearing is bad for your health!

Tetra: I dont *&%^ing care!

GL: Well lets go get the sheild from grandma!

*They go to grandmas house but find her with a machine gun*

RL: What the hell!?!?

Grandma: I WANT MY BABIES!

GL: What the hell is wrong with you!

BL: Uh I am out of here! *leaves*

PL: Me too! *Leaves*

RL: On second thought maybe aryl should get eaton by a giant bird!

Grandma: GYYYAAARRGGHHH!!!

GL: Oh no she aint Red link were going to get that sheild! *Pulls out sword*

*Grandma and green link go in a epic battle until GL stabs her*

Grandma:............why....*Dies*

RL: Holy sh**!!!

GL: I cant beleive it....

RL: This was the day I finally puke on grandma! *Pukes*

GL: *Grabs sheild* Goodbye grandma.....*leaves*

RL: Uh..um..err..I am going to! *Also leaves*

Tetra: Do you got the &&*%ing sheild?

GL: Right here!

PL: Oh I am not sure I want to go on a ship....

BL: E = P + I + 20% = X = PIE!

RL: Uh..ok...

GL: Lets get on the ship!

*They get on the ship*

Tetra: Be careful or you will might get &*#$ing splinters!

RL: I cant stand much of this!

GL: Lets go down the basement!

BL: Lord crump hates pie.

Lord crump: Thats right buh huh huh huh!

PL: 0_0'

*They go down stairs to find mario?*

RL: What the hell!?! Isnt this the place where we find niko!?

MarioSorry but niko is at a wedding so I am taking his place!

GL:Strange...I read on the internet that if we pass the test you will give us a reward.

Mario:The internet wasnt invented yet!

RL: The internet has been around since the begining of time.

Mario: It has? Oh then I'll make the test hard....all have to do is pee in this cup!

RL: Something is fishy about this!

BL: Oh oh I got go to the bathroom! *Pees in cup* Aaaah.....

GL: Ok that was the strangest test I ever seen...Well we passed it!

Mario: Thank you now you can go get whats inside that treasure.

GL: *Goes over and opens the treasure chest*

Text bubble: Tadadadada! You got Red links heart!

RL: My heart! *Faints*

BL: So he's heartless?

GL: Well what are we going do with heart?

RL: Give me that! *Takes the heart and eats it* Aaah...now I got three hearts again!

Tetra: Hey morons were here at forsaken forettress!

GL: Lets go guys!

*They go up and find tetra*

RL: So how are we going to get there? Its heavilly gaurded.

Tetra: We throw you over there by using Zelda universe tech!

GL: Ok...uh...goodbye! *Tries to escape but doesnt*

*They put GL and RL in a barrel with the letters ZU on it*

GL:: This doesnt seem very futur-*Gets launched with RL*

BL: Uh...Hi! *Grows wings and flys to forsaken forrtress*

PL: What he said! *Grows wings and flys to forsaken forrtress*

Tetra: I wonder if they have those on ebay?

Bowser: They might!

*All the pirates stare at bowser*

Bowser: Uh oh...



CHAPTER 100% finished!

Sorry I did'nt finish the chapter because I am not in comediac right now....

EDIT: I finished it!

That last chapter was better than the others. Here's what you should do:

-SLOW DOWN. Like whatsistoes said above, that's your main problem. It's too rushed.

-Bold the names. If you use Word to type it up beforehand, just use Find>Replace and replace GL with [b)GL(/b] only with the right kind of parenthesis. Do that for all of the names.

-Write out the names. You could use Find > Replace to do that too, I suppose.

Other than that, it's pretty good. I think my first crack at writing a parody was a little better, but then I've always had perfect grammar :XD I also bolded my names and stole ideas from everyone, but no one seemes to notice. You have good humor, I liked the pickle thing; you just need to work on presentation.

Like I said before, take your time. This thing is really rushed up. I didnt find this chapter as funny as the one before (and that's bad because the other one wasnt that funny neither) and Tetra swearing everytime she speaks is getting overused. You seriously need to work on this parody.

Ok I am going to update. I hope you like the twist on the forsaken forrtress!

CHAPTER 5: Nightmare's galore!

GL: Hey where's my sword!

RL: I think we lost em when we slamed against the friggin wall!

BL: I hope that mean's happiness!

PL: LOok dahoor's weh should goe threw thhem!

GL: I got one word: Scary...

PL: Sorry I thought this was resident evil.

RL: Riiiight... Ok guy's we go through the left door.

GL: Usaully I say that but let's go.

*They go through the left door*

Barnie: Let's dance! Shake it the left! Shake it to the right!

RL: AAAAHHH! Let's get out of here quick!

*They go back through the door*

GL: You seem so scar-

RL: Shut up!

BL: Let's go north because it smell's nice!

PL: I like rice.

GL: Okay... Let's go north then!

*They go through the north door*

Vatti: Me hate ezlo!

BL: OH NO! Let's get out of here before I melt!

*They go back through the door*

RL: This time we go south!

*They go south through the door*

Feebee: *Singing* Smelly cat. Smelly cat. What are they feeding you!

GL: That's it we're out of here!

*They go back through the door again....*

GL: Okay this place is scary!

Smelly Cat: Meow.

RL: So that's why we should go right.

PL: CORPSE!

*Meanwhile at outset...*

Grandma's corpse: *Crawling across the floor* Must get my babie's.....

*Back at forsaken forrtress*

GL: Okay.... Let's go.

*They go right through the door*

Moblin: Fee fi foe!

Moblin2: I smell blood!

RL: Hiyaa! * Jump's on Moblin's face*

Moblin: Get dis intruder off meh face!

Dethl: I will get him hehehe.

END CHAPTER

Sorry it was a little short my arm's hurt.

That one was a lot better. Still too random and short for my tastes, but it didn't seem as rushed and you bolded the names and asterisk-ed the action lines. Keep it up!

EDIT It would start looking to be ripping off Grass, but how's abouts calling the Links just Green, Red, Blue, and Purple? They aren't that long of words. And like I said, you could just put G R B and P when you were typing and then use Find > Replace tool.

EDIT EDIT

Originally Posted by Shadow_Suicune

Sorry it just my computer and I have to think it up fast because my computer wont keep me loged in! It keeps loging me out and it says your not registered and crap like that because it logs me out while I post the message!

I just found this. Do you have a PC or a Mac? Just use Microsoft Word or its equivalent on Mac to write it, then paste in the thing. That's what I did when I tried parody writing, look at my TP Parody in my siggy please.

Um...okay...

.....It's WAY too random for me...=/ Sorry.

The only funny part was the grandmas corpes.