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Prologue

In all the land, there is one hero who stood high above the rest. With a huge legend behind him, and a great story of his past, he even had traveled through time. His legend began when a fairy aided him on his journey to a castle in a distant land, and met the princess. But soon, he learned of a great evil. He had to get the Blade of Evil’s bane, but in the process, he was sent into the future. He managed to defeat the evil, but the princess sent him back. When he got back, his fairy companion disappeared. So the hero set off to find her. He searched everywhere, until his horse and he entered a very strange wood. A new evil, darker then the other, arisen from the trees. The hero had to travel through a dimension and entered our world. He soon gained a new fairy companion and they learned of a great destruction incoming. They defeated the evil with four legendary masks, but the masks were soon sealed away. The Hero’s legend soon spread, and the Hero lived on in this new world. All though nobody really knew who he was, he is still remembered to this day, as the Hero of Time…

I remember how I always used to ask Grandpa to read me that story, over and over, until I would fall asleep. But that was so many years ago, it’s hard to believe it’s been that long. My grandpa raised me, and taught me so many things. But that legend was the greatest thing that he ever taught me, because it was the reason for so many things in my life. But I guess I should start from the beginning…


Yes, it is first person. SO once again, I got bored, and wrote a chapter.

Chapter 1: Just an average day


It was just an average day. The sun shone brightly through the trees that surrounded our small village of Huron. The birds sang happily, and the smell of pine was in the fresh air. Kids were playing, and all was happy. Grandpa was outside, preparing his old brown and white horse.
“Hey Grandpa! What are you doing?” I asked as I ran towards him.
“Oh, hey kid. I need to make a small delivery to Clock Town. It’s nothing too much. I’ll be gone for a few days, so you’re going to be by yourself for a few days. There are some rupees for food on the counter.” Grandpa replied.
“Why can’t I come, Grandpa?” I wondered out loud.
He placed his old, wrinkly pale hand on my head. He gave me a nice, happy look, and the smile made the folds of his cheeks even wrinklier.
“Listen, I promise I’ll make it up to you. I just want to go alone this time. Okay?” He replied as his smiled. I looked at the ground, and kicked the dirt with my brown shoes.
“Okay… Just remember that you promised.” I said sadly as he started to ride away. You could see his white hair and dark green shirt waving in the wind as he rode off into the trees.




Well, I guess that now is as good of time as other to introduce myself. My name is Link, and I live with my Grandpa. I never did know my parents, but my Grandpa raised me. I live in the small town of Huron, which is in the many forests of Termina. Huron is actually centered around Romani Ranch, but that place is really old now. It’s pretty boring around here, and I really wish that I could go on a huge journey like the Hero of Time did. But I don’t know how I could do that, I mean, I don’t even have a sword! I also don’t have a tunic either, I usually just where a bright orange shirt, and light blue pants. Of course, they don’t really go with my blonde hair, and everyone always comments on that. Well, that’s pretty much all about me right now.

So it was a good ten minutes after my Grandpa left before I started to get cold and went inside. I looked on the wooden counter, and sure enough, the rupees were there. There was a bright red rupee, three shining blue rupees, and five bland green rupees. I felt my stomach growl and realized that I was hungry. So I took the red rupee and started walking down to Romani Ranch to buy some milk and beef. The beef there is actually very good, considering they just started selling it. I feel sorry for the cows that had to die in order to make it though. And I just love the milk there! Even though it’s fresh, it’s always delicious!

So I finally reached Romani Ranch, and old Cremia greeted me over the counter.
“Ah yes, young Link! Nice to see you! I heard your grandpa just left to go to Clock Town.” She exclaimed
“Yep. He left about twenty minutes ago.” I replied as she smiled at me. I thought it would be nice to smile back, so I did. That’s when Remia walked out. She’s about the same age as me, and is the daughter of Cremia. Her long, red hair covered the shoulders of her tan and orange dress, and captured my attention. It was like I could hear the angels singing when I saw her beautiful face.
“Mom! Are you bugging our customers again? Oh, hey Link!” She greeted me with a huge grin.
“Hey Remia. How are you today?” I asked her quietly. I looked down at my feet and thought about how stupid what I just said was, and how I wished I didn’t say it.
“Oh, I’m good. Is there something you wanted Link?” She wondered, as she could see that other people at the store wanted some service.
“Yeah, I, um, just wanted some milk and beef.” I replied slowly as she went around the counters getting the food. She handed the “Already Cooked Beef” and “Romani Milk” over the counter as I handed her the red rupee.
“Hey Link, I get off work in a few minutes, do you want to go eat somewhere with me?” She asked excitedly. I nodded quickly as I hopped off the stool.
“Let’s meet down by the river, and we can go eat at the old bridge!” I yelled as I ran out of the building while people screamed at me to move out of the way. Yes! This was finally going to be my chance to be alone with Remia!
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I see a few spelling errors in the first couple of sentences. You might want to read over your work before posting. And, this is just a suggestion, I find that highlighting your chapter's paragraphs and clicking the indent button makes it easier to read. I can read it right now, it just looks better that way.

for a second I forgot this wasn't in Hyrule. ...I have an idea. Not for your story though. Anywho, Link's got a girlfriend! I wonder when the action will start... in the story, not Link and Remia... you know, when the journey begins... Whatever. I await the next chapter.
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Chapter 2: It begins

So I waited for Remia for about five minutes, and then I could see her rushing towards me. She was grinning from ear to ear, and waving at me. She held a brown bag, with food in it. I waved back, and she soon arrived. We headed off towards the old bridge, which lay out of town.
“So, it’s a nice day, hey Link?” Remia exclaimed happily.
“Yeah, it’s very nice. Too bad that this day will soon be over, and a new day will arise.” I replied, thinking about how corny that was.
“Yeah… You know Link, you’re very smart! And you’re also kind of cute too…” She flirted
“WHAT?! What did you say?!” I yelled excitedly.
“Oh, I, um… Just said that you were smart.” She replied, as I became sad again.
So we made it to the bridge, and sat on the edge, looking down at the river. We talked for about half an hour, and then a man on a grey horse rushed in. He was wearing a brown shirt, and black pants. He had dark brown hair, and he looked as if he was in a hurry.
“What’s that all about?” Remia wondered as she looked at me.
“I’m not sure, but I do know that we’ll be okay.” I replied, even though I was worried.
We headed back into town a few minutes later, and Remia ran home after we said our goodbyes. It was getting late, so I decided to go home too. I entered my bland house, only to see that the door was open a little bit. I stepped into the living room, and I heard a noise from upstairs. I found a knife, and slowly snuck upstairs. I looked in my room, and there was nobody there. I was relieved, so I went and laid on my bed. I shut my eyes, and listened to the sounds of the birds sing outside my window.
“You know, you really should check more rooms.” A voice came from my doorway. I stood up really fast, and my hand had already held up the stick. It was the man that was riding the horse, he was in my house!
“Who are you?!” I yelled as I stepped closer. The man looked at me and laughed.
“Hey kid, who do you think you are? But fine, if you’re going to be tough, then I’ll play along. The name’s Anju.” The man replied
“Why are you in my house?! And what do you want?” I yelled some more.
“Well, I’m in your house to find you. I’m supposed to take you to somebody.” He replied as he laughed even harder.
“What?! What’s going on?” I asked loudly, as my heart started to race.
“Oh, so you don’t know yet. Well, I guess it’s time that I tell you. Your grandpa isn’t the old man that you think he is.” He continued. “He’s a legend. He is a hero. He is the Hero of Time!” I dropped the stick. What? My Grandpa was the Hero of Time? And he never even told me!
“Then, why do you want me?” I asked. He stepped closer to me.
“Your grandpa didn’t go to Clock Town to deliver something. In fact, he didn’t even go to Clock Town. He went off to a meeting, a meeting of a group that is trying to stop the darkness from returning.” He replied slowly and carefully.
“Then why do you need me?” I asked quietly.
“You’re grandpa is going away for a while, a long time. He’s going off to find the four masks again, and he wants you to join our group. He wants you to be a hero, just like him. He wants you to be the new Hero of Time!” Anju yelled.
“But, I don’t want to go. I have a good life, and I have good friends…”
“Yes, well some things are more important. The reason he wants you to be the next hero, is because you inherited his personality, and some of his magic abilities. You have the personality of a hero! You want to defend the weak, and get rid of the evil!”
“Yeah, well… I’m too young… I don’t want to leave…”
“I guess that’s just too bad, because we’re leaving tomorrow morning. I’m just doing what your grandpa wanted.”
“Well, when is Grandpa leaving for his journey? And what is this evil you mentioned?”
“Your grandpa is leaving in three days. And the evil that I mentioned? Well, let’s just call it the Shadow of Time. Now get to bed, we’re getting up early.”
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No, not that. There's a button on ZU. While you're posting something, it's one of the line buttons. Do it to each separate paragraph.

Edit: What do you know, you posted a chapter at the same time of this post. I'll edit after I've read it.

Double edit: Whoa, I wasn't expecting that. Link has the blood of the Hero of Time running through he's veins. I find it strange that the Hero of Time, who was born and raised in Hyrule, to settle down in Termina. Well, the adventure begins. I need to know what happens! *shakes Stoopid* Tell me!! Now! NOOOW! *puts Stoopid down* Yeah, sorry to go Happy Mask Salesman on you. You might've guessed this, but I await the next chapter.
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Well, he rested in Termina because he could never find a way back to Hyrule, because you have to go through tthat long drop to get to Termina from Hyrule. =D
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Well, he rested in Termina because he could never find a way back to Hyrule, because you have to go through tthat long drop to get to Termina from Hyrule. =D
Ok, I guess so. You know what? My fic is sorta like what would've happened if Link (The hero of Time/Legend) made it back to Hyrule, while yours tells what would've happened if he stayed. Strange.
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Lol, that is kinda weird. It's like, alternate timelines... :s Ok, the next chapter may even be out tonight! Depends how lazy I am. I'm writing it now.

Chapter 3: Off to the base
I looked out at Huron Village for my last time. The sky was still pink as the sun rose. I looked over at Anju, and you could see red underneath his brown hair. He was packing stuff on the two horses, one was grey, and one was dark brown. I looked towards my house, and I turned back to my horse.
“You’re leaving, aren’t you Link?” A voice from behind me asked. I turned around to see Remia behind me.
“Yes… I have to, and I really don’t want to.” I replied, as her eyes started to tear up.
“Link, please, just promise me one thing. Just promise me that you’ll come back safe and sound, ok?” She cried as she hugged me. I put my hand on her head.
“I promise that I’ll be back.” She looked up at me “And you can hold me to that promise, Remia!” She started to grin as a tear fell down her cheek. She let go, and backed off.
“Just remember, you promised…” She said as we rode off into the sunrise.
We were on the road for about an hour when we reached Termina field. Anju looked at me, and his facial expression looked nice for a change.
“Hey kid, you hungry?” He asked me kindly. I was shocked! Anju actually was being nice to me?! This was really strange…
“No, not really, why?” I wondered, as his facial expression turned from happy into foul. He pulled out a shining blade from his back, and placed it in front of me. His brown leather glove shoved me and the horse out of the way as he jumped off his horse and slashed an incoming octorok. He made the hand sign for me to get out of there, so I did. My horse ran for a good five minutes before I turned around, and saw Anju rushing towards me. We ran towards the swamp, and I could finally see Clock Town for my first time! It had tall, brown walls, and a huge clock tower in the center. I wanted to go there, but first, I had to complete my mission, and become a hero, no matter how much I didn’t want to.

We arrived at the entrance to the puke green colored swamp. We entered, and we ended up in a mini field full of tall rock-like formations.
“What are those flower things on top of those rocks?” I asked Anju.
“Those are special deku flowers. They let deku scrubs fly when they enter. Your grandpa used one when he put on the deku mask.” Anju replied.
“Whoa, Grandpa never told me about becoming a deku. That’s kind of weird. I wonder what else he never told me.”
“Well, he also became a goron, a zora, and some even say he became a deity.”
“Wow… He really is great! But I still don’t want to be a hero. I still just want to stay at my village…”
“Listen kid, you can’t keep moping around all the time. You’re going to be here for awhile, until you can learn to be a hero. It’s what your Grandpa wants, and it’s what your dad would want too.” I looked up, shocked. Anger filled inside of me, and my rage kept on building.
“WHAT DO YOU KNOW ABOUT MY FATHER?! YOU DON’T KNOW WHAT HE WOULD WANT, BECAUSE HE’S DEAD!” I screamed at the top of my lungs. They started to hurt soon after, as the tears flowed down my cheeks.
“You’re right, I never did know your dad, and I’m sorry, I stepped over the line. But we’re almost at the base.” I wiped off the tears, and we turned around a corner, and headed through some tree. I heard a splashing noise, and looked down, only to see that the horses had started walking through some murkey water. We crossed the swamp, which held a strange rotting building in the center of it, and we went through some more trees. We also passed by an odd looking kingdom, that also seemed abandoned.
“Anju, why does everything around here look abandoned?” I wondered.
“Well, the evil has already made its first move. I don’t know if I can tell you the whole story yet, so I won’t. But the Dekus did manage to escape.” I was satisfied with that answer. Then he reached a big volcano-like structure. Anju turned to me, and hopped of his horse.
“Welcome to Woodfall, kid. This is the hero’s base.”
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Neat. Link gets a cool sword to poke stuff with. I wonder what this evil is, and how old Link is... You can answer the last one, right? And about indenting, that's what I meant, but i think you might've indented the first paragraph twice.
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Chapter 4: Grandpa or the Hero of Time?
We entered a large cavern like room. I looked up at the ceiling, only to see giant spider webs hanging from it. The smell of damp mold filled the air, I guess that’s because the whole place was moldy… and damp… I looked straight ahead, and saw my Grandpa rushing towards me.
“Link! You made it!” He yelled as he hugged me tightly. I pushed him away, and a frown filled my face. I was angry, oh, really angry.
“How come you never told me you were the Hero of Time?! You went on all these really cool adventures, and you never told me! And what is so important that you force me to leave all my friends?! AND WHAT ABOUT MY PARENTS?!” I screamed, as my face turned purple from lack of air. Grandpa closed his eyes, and shook his head.
“Link, I’m sorry I never told you. I just didn’t want you going off and getting hurt, acting like a hero. That’s what happened to your parents…” I looked up, and I felt cold. I started to shake. Grandpa pulled out an Ocarina, a shiny blue Ocarina.
“Link, your mom told me to play this when you learned that I was the Hero of Time. It will show you everything that your parents wanted you to know.” He said as he started to play a soothing melody that filled the room with echoes. Anju left the room, as he could tell we wanted privacy.
As I listened to the melody, I closed my eyes. I felt warm, comforted. I opened my eyes, and I was in my house, with my parents. My mom had long blonde hair, and blue eyes. My dad had brown hair, and green eyes.
“Link, if you are hearing this song, then that means that you are old enough to know the truth. Yes, your Grandpa is the Hero of time.” My mom said softly.
“Now listen Link, these next few pictures, I don’t know what they’re going to be like. I can’t tell my future, but… well… we might not make it, so these may be graphic. The goddesses are allowing us to show you these, so be aware… We are heading out to find a way to Hyrule, a distant land, so we will search.” My dad pronounced. Then the pictures changed into a fiery forest. Everything was burning, and I could two bodies on the ground. They were my parents, burning just like everything else. I screamed, and then I heard a laugh. I looked up, and saw two piercing red eyes. I fainted…
I woke up beside my Grandpa, who had a sad look on his face. I was wondering who that evil that killed my parents was.
“Who was that? The one who murdered my parents?!” I asked quickly. My grandpa put his head in his hands.
“Link, that was… the Shadow of Time… In a way, he is the shadow of me.”
“What are you talking about? Why is the called the Shadow of Time?”
“Well, the whole story goes like this… When I got the three spiritual stones from the princess of Hyrule, I was told to enter the Temple of Time. I was given the Ocarina of Time before the Princess vanished. I entered the Temple, and found a blade in a stand. My fairy companion told me to take the blade, so I did. But when I did, I was into the future seven years. During this time, the great evil was able to go into the sacred realm and retrieve a piece of the legendary triangles. I was able to awaken the seven sages of that world, and defeat the great evil. But the princess wanted me to go back in time, and have my childhood again. She I put back the blade, and was sent back to my own timeline. I searched all over for my fairy, and then came across a new evil. They stole everything from me, even my horse. I ended up in Termina, and found a way to get all my stuff back. Unfortunately, I only had three days to do everything, and defeat the greater evil before the moon would come down and kill everyone. I got my Ocarina of Time back, and played the song of time. This opened up a way back in time three days, and I kept on doing that. So I time traveled a lot, thus I was called the Hero of Time. But there was apparently a side effect to the time traveling. Something was released from the time stream, and is using time to destroy everything. He sent the deku palace into the future thousands of years, so that it was completely destroyed. But he didn’t do it alone. He was using an item called the Shadow’s Hourglass, which has the power to change the time of many things. So I created this great evil, and I must defeat it.” He told this story to me over a long period of time. But now I knew the truth, about the evil.
“But why do you need me to be the new Hero of Time?” I wondered out loud.
“Because if I’m not strong enough to defeat the shadow of time by myself, I’m going to need you to take my place. You inherited some of my traits, and those are the traits of a hero!” I stared at the ground, and kicking my food at the grass. I was thinking, a lot. The world is going to need me, so I have to help it. I will help it, I promise.
“Ok, but how long will this battle be going on for?”
“Maybe over a year. Maybe less.”
“Why will it take so long?”
“Because, I have to chase this demon through time. And that could take a long long time.”
“Ok. I’ll train to be the next hero. I can’t just let some big bad guy come in here and destroy everything I’ve come to love.” A picture of Remia flashed in my mind. “And everyone I’ve come to love.” My Grandpa walked over to me, and he held out a sheathed blade.
“You’re going to need this, Link Jr. It’s a Kokiri blade, and it was my first sword.” He handed me the sword, and I took it out. It had a wooden handle, and a silver metal blade.
“Ok, let’s get training!”
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Pretty good, a few spelling errors here and there, the plot was average as well. I really don't have a good comment, though the name Huron sounds fimiliar...
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Okay, now Link (Jr.) has a sword. The villain is someone controlling the sands of time using something called the Shadow's Hourglass? So it's like a form of Dark Link because:
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“Link, that was… the Shadow of Time… In a way, he is the shadow of me.”
And, yes like Missing said, you have a spelling errors scattered across your writing. Make sure you read over your work before posting, 'kay? *waits*
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Chapter 5: A new friend
So, my grandpa and I trained for a few days, and then he left. I was sad to see him go again, but I knew that he would come back. So I continued training, but now with Anju. He taught me all kinds of cool stuff! He taught me how to do some normal slashes, but he also taught me how do to a spin slash, even though I usually get really dizzy after, it’s still a really good move. Recently, Anju told me that he has a new training partner for me, that’s about my age. He also promised me that he will start teaching me how to use magic soon. I couldn’t wait! Then one day, he brought in a kid with light blue hair, a tan shirt, and grey pants. He looked about my age, and had a blade of his own.
“Link, I’d like you to meet my son, Angea!” Anju exclaimed, as he told us that we will be training with each other from now on.
“Great, now I have to train with this weakling, Father! Why must you torture me so?” Angea angrily exclaimed.
“Hey, I’m not that weak! I know how to do some moves!” I yelled back. We soon started a yelling war, and it lasted for a long time. Somehow, I knew this wouldn’t work out, but the fighting stopped after about an hour.
“So, why do you think I’m so weak?” I wondered as we sat on the ground, staring at each other.
“Sorry, I’m just a little bit on edge lately, since the Shadow of Time destroyed my village.” Angea replied sadly.
“Oh, and now you want to become strong, so you can stop this evil?” I finished his sentence.
“Yes, but I guess you wouldn’t know about being strong, would you? I heard about your life in your village. Peace, happiness, even a pretty girl. You’ve never had a loss, you probably don’t even know what loss is. I’ve lost everything.”
“Oh, trust me, I know about loss.”
“You know nothing of loss, look at your life! You haven’t had all your friends murdered. I need to be strong; I NEED TO BE A HERO!”
“At least your parents are still alive… I need to be a hero as much as you do. He killed my parents, and now I’m going to kill him!” That’s about the time when Anju walked into the room.
“You’re both are wrong. Being a hero isn’t about revenge, it’s about saving the ones you care about. Revenge only leads to becoming as bad as the evil itself. Now it’s getting late, and you two should get to bed.”
I laid in bed for hours on end, thinking about what Anju said. Maybe I did want to be a hero for the wrong reasons. Maybe I shouldn’t want revenge… I could tell that Angea was awake too, in the soft bunk underneath me. I peered over the maple edges of the bunk bead, and saw that his yellow eyes were still wide open.
“What do you want, kid?” He exclaimed. I was kind of shocked at that remark, but I guess I didn’t really care.
“Nothing. I was just seeing if you were still awake.”
“Well, I’m awake, get over it.”
“Ok, Angea, we both have losses, and we both want to be heroes, so why don’t we just get over our grudges and be friends?”
“I’ll think about the offer, but don’t get your hopes up.” I turned over and went back to thinking. I thought about those pictures that Grandpa had shown me, and then I remembered that he had been gone a whole week already. I started to get a little worried, but I fell asleep anyways. I was having a dream about me and Remia back at Huron, walking in the field. Then a dark figure emerged, and he set fire to the whole village. I pulled out my blade, and ran full force at him. Unfortunately, he swung a dark blade at me, and I was sent flying. I saw Remia’s face burn along with all the other objects. Then the dark figure walked over to me, and stepped on my leg. He was heavy, and my leg was getting crushed. I screamed, until he raised his sword above my head, and brought it down.
I woke up screaming, and Anju came into the room wondering what was going on. He brought with him Black haired, green eyed, purple coated, Juan, another hero.
“Sorry, I was just having a really bad dream… Nothing to get too worked up about.” They soon left. And then I heard Angea’s voice.
“So, you were dreaming about your town getting burnt, weren’t you?” He whispered.
“How did you know?!”
“I’m a descendant of a Sheikah, and I have a weird ability to see into people’s dreams. And I’ve considered your offer. I’ll be friends with you, but just so I can get stronger.” There was a five minute pause before I answered.
“Hey Angea, what was it like knowing that everyone you loved had died?”
“It’s a horrible feeling, like you had just lost your legs. And the worst part is that I was there when it happened. I saw everyone die…”
“Oh… I’m sorry… I didn’t mean to bring up bad memories.”
“It doesn’t matter anyway. Now go to bed, because I want to train early in the morning.”
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Old 07-10-2007, 10:22 PM
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So the Shekias are in this, huh? Neat. I wonder if Link has this ability to see into the future. Maybe his mind is brushing against the magical part of him. I didn't see any errors in this one. That's good. Oh, and in the poll, you referred to the story as a 'comic'. *waits*
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Lol, this is rather dead, so I'll update with a short chapter. Also, nice avy Hyrule, its from that fan video.

Chapter 6: A sad day…

So Angea and I had been training together for about two months, and we were really strong now. I was able to use an ability called “Din’s Fire” which made a circle of fire around me. Anju was watching over us, as all the other heroes had gone off to find the Shadow of Time. This was around the time that stuff started happening, big stuff I mean. Like first, there was Clock town that got attacked, and the thing is, it got attacked in the past! Half of the city was destroyed, but the other half managed to rebuild.

It was lunch time, and I was sitting on the roof of Woodfall, so high up, looking down below. I could see Clock town from there, and I could see the destruction. Then I could hear a scream. I looked down, only to see my Grandpa running towards Woodfall! I got down to the main level, and greeted Grandpa at the door.
“Hey Grandpa! What are you doing?” I asked curiously. He only gasped, and looked straight ahead. There was a huge gash on his tunic, and I could see the blood rushing down.
“Listen, Link, I don’t have much time left… there’s some stuff that I need to tell Anju. Where is he?” He yelled. When I heard that he didn’t have much time left, my eyes swelled up. Tears rolled down my face as I slowly pointed to his room. Grandpa soon left, and I was wondering what was going on, so I rushed to his room.
“Link? What’s going on?” I could hear Anju say.
“You need to leave, right now. I just came back from the past, and the Shadow of Time is going to attack! You’ll all be killed!” Grandpa replied.
“Oh no, you’re hurt, badly…”
“Yes, I know… I also know that I don’t have much time left. I need to tell Link everything before I go. But I need you to give him something. I need you to give him my old tunic, from when I was a kid.”
“NO! You’re the hero of time! You can’t die!”
“Goodbye Anju.” My Grandpa said as he walked towards me. He got to me, and stared at me a minute before he fell to the ground, doubled over in pain.
“Link, you need to know everything now… the Shadow of Time is my exact copy, and he is stronger then you could ever imagine… You’re training is now over, and you are strong enough… I need you to go to Hyrule… and in the Kokiri Forest, find a girl named Saria… She will tell you what… to… do…” And those were the last words he ever said. I screamed for him, and my eyes filled with tears, like rain fills lakes with water. Anju appeared from the room with a tunic. He threw it towards me, and I just left it, thinking of the past. Anju whispered a few final words, and finished with a sad sentence. “The Hero of Time… Is dead.”
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How sad, the Hero is dead... wait a second, he asked Link to go to Hyrule, that means there's a way to get there. If that's so, then why did the Hero stay in Termina? to stop the Shadows of Time? did he know they would come?

You know, most posts come after new chapters. Well, since it was short, I give this chapter a 6/10. Mostly the shortness, and that not much happened, but not much has to happen. And I noticed you didn't do the indenting thing, but it's okay, not everybody does.

I await the next chapter, however short it may be.

Off topic: And yes, my avatar is from that Zelda flash toon. I just love that one!
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Yeah, I'm kind of getting back into the fan fic thing, and I was too lazy to write more. Also, I couldn't think of more. Also, this leads to a big part in the story. A hint about the gate to Hyrule: TIME.
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