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(sf/act)Rogue12(T)
Well heres a story I've been planing for awhile
Commets and critisium(sp?)appreciatated Prologue I ran for my life, the guards were chasing me. I held NO-TECHON, a box that had the power to transfom people to super soldiers, I was bringing it to the comon-welth. They fired at me, I ran faster and fired back, it hit a guard in the head, he fell over dead. A gunship flew over me and fired at the guards, they died quickly. I jumped in and we flew to the city. So what do you think, I write the next chapter after a reply Last edited by No12; 01-21-2006 at 05:24 AM. |

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Re: (sf/act)Rogue12(T)
Right I guess I won't get a reply until chapter one, I will wright to night because I got school now.
EDIT:I will post chapter 1 today but just need to finish it. Last edited by No12; 01-24-2006 at 01:43 AM. |

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Re: (sf/act)Rogue12(T)
....Erm. That was quite a bit rushed... I suggest you put a lot more detail into your writing. More detail will increase the suspense.
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