The Bermuda Triangle (horror..a little)

hio! i'm starting a new story called The Bermuda Triangle. Post if you like it. Positive or negative critasisme is welcome.


“Ryan…I don’t think we should go…I heard that people die in there!” Marie said. Her voice was very soft but has a little commanding in it. Marie was a 17 year old girl that loved to stay near her cousin. She was pretty tall, about 5f 5 and skinny, she had long, dirty blond hair that went past her shoulders down to the middle of her back. and crystal blue eyes. Today she wore her usual green army pants and baggy black sweatshirt with a hood on the back. They were at a sign up desk, in a rather small but cozy room, to go on a show that was in the Bermuda triangle. They would be in a old ship which, ironically, is still floating with no motor running at all. They was a sign up sheet with about 4 other people and it was the final day to sign up.

“Oh, Marie, don’t be such a fraidy-cat. No one actually dies in the show, it looks like it but, they really only have them in a another room.” Ryan explained to her. He’s voice was very smooth and very confident. He was a tall boy, 5f 8, and was very muscular. He was the same age as his cousin, Marie, but she was a couple of months older them him, and that bothered him. It was very easy to tell that he worked out in a gym daily. He also had dirty blond hair, that went just bellow his ears, but with midnight blue eyes. He wore black jean pants with a gray baggy T-shirt. He took the blue pen and started to write his and his cousins name.

“But, Ryan…” She sighed “Fine but if one person…..uhh…you know… I’m out of there.”

“Fine suit yourself, heh heh this will be fun. Lets see who else is going on this trip…Brody, Evan, Deborah, Tracy, you, and me.” Ryan was still holding the pen as a man about 5 f tall came out of the “employees only” door. He was a skinny, about 50 year old man with a long gray beard and pitch black beady eyes.

“Hello, my names John. I’ll be taking the sign up sheet away now. Oh, and meet here at exactly 3:00 tomorrow to catch the boat.” Johns voice was very scratchy and fairly annoying. Marie and Ryan left the room and into a smaller room, which looked like it was made for people to wait in. It also appeared as though it hasn’t been used lately. Ryan and Marie just looked at each other and bursted out laughing.

“Ha ha ha…Ryan did you see that guy? Ha ha he was so small and creepy!” She managed to say.

“I know he was so pathetic… ha ha” Ryan said. After their little “laugh” they started home. Marie was going to stay over at Ryan’s apartment considering they were going to the same place the next day. His house was pretty small but Marie was used to it because, she too had a very small apartment. They climbed up a flight of stairs and entered Ryan’s apartment. It was fairly dirty but Marie didn’t care. They stayed up until 3 in the morning and finally went to sleep. Marie’s room was really small but had a bed and that’s all she needed. They packed for the 20 day trip to Bermuda right after they got home so she didn‘t worry. As Marie slept she tossed and stirred…

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…Maria was standing in the middle of a very big dinning room. It looked like it was made for a big ball. It was very worn out. It had no lights, broken glass every where, and chairs in random places. The whole place looked dark, gloomy. The stage had blood red drapes torn in places and singed on the bottom as if, it was burned. There was holes in the platform. She looked over to the right where there was a bar. The bar had a row of round glass lights that no longer worked and some were broken. The bar looked as though it used to have a very large mirror in the back. It was in pieces like triangles pointing in the middle. There was several broken bottles and wine glassed. She gazed at the empty ball room and started to feel a little sick, then realized that she was on a boat. She held back her nausea to find that the room was starting to look brighter and brighter. She heard people, they were laughing, and talking. She continued to gaze until the whole room was filled with people and there were dancing and having fun. To Maria, every thing was going slow. They all had wine glasses and seemed a little drunk, not intoxicated but a little drunk. Then she heard a woman scream…
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Marie woke up, in a cold sweat. “what happened…” She thought to herself. It was light out side. The bright warm sunshine flowed into the room. She looked at her alarm clock and it was 2:30. “Oh my god!” She got up and out of her bed. Got dressed in black army pants with a red sweatshirt, and ran for her cousins room.

Ryan woke up to his cousin shaking him violently

“Hey, hey what are you doing?” he looked at her with sleepy eyes

“Look at your clock and you tell me!” he looked slowly to his alarm clock, it was 2:40. His moonlight blue eyes came out of sleep and widened.

“Oh, no! We got to go, or we will miss the boat!” He shot up out of his bed, wearing his black jeans. He searched his pile of cloths for a shirt. He found a white one this a little stained near the neck.

“Hey don’t worry much! You live next door to the place we got to meet, remember?” She lifted a brow.

“Oh ya…well I’m ready, lets go!” He started toward the door, and Marie followed.

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As they entered the little Waiting room, they saw four people standing there. Marie went to greet the two girls of the bunch. She saw one very interesting girl. She was a little darker then her friend and wore oval glasses. She had jet black hair that went down to her shoulders. She was the same height as Marie and had had dark, creamy brown eyes.

“Hi my name is Marie, what’s yours?” Marie shoke her hand.

“Well hi, my name is Deborah, Debbie for short nice to me-” She was cut off by her friend next her.

“Hi my name is Tracy!” She shoked Marie’s hand violently. She was quite larger then Maria and wore a bright pink tight shirt and matching pants. She had brown hair that went just bellow her ears and light brown eyes. She stood 5f 3 tall and was shaking her hand up and down. This was making Marie nauseous. Ryan went to guys and saw this boy with bleach blond hair very short and on his face was tiny freckles. He was smiling like either being told a joke or hearing one. He was slightly smaller then Ryan and had sapphire eyes.

“Brody, your crazy…” His friend laughed. Ryan guseed that he was Even, because, he called the other Brody. Evan was Also blond but a darker shade and a little longer. He had sea green eyes and was a little taller then Ryan. Before Ryan could say “hi”, John came out.

“Well, lets go…” He said and escorted them onto the boat. They went on it and the boat stated and they headed for their destination, the Bermuda Triangle.
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Well there we go....hope you liked it!

Hm... Intresting. Sounds like a spooky storie shall come out of this! Good work for the begining of the storie !link! ! Er... Well you know...

hio! chapy two!!!

Chapter 2

Marie was talking to Debbie and Tracy as the boat left. She could the nausea building in the pit of her stomach. She held it back as she talked. Ryan walked over to the boys to say hi. He watch them from a far to get a better idea of how they are like.

“So Evan, what do you think about the show? You think there will be ghosts?” Brody made a face.

“I’m not sure, I hope not.” He did a little shiver. Brody’s eyes brightened. He thought “ha ha… he’s afraid of ghosts…”

“So, if there were ghosts…….what would you do” He said with a grin

“uh uh, I don’t know…” He said, trying to look confident. But his fear was easily noticed. Then Ryan took the chance to introduce himself.

“Hey! I’m Ryan.” He put out his hand to shake theirs. Evan looked relieved to get away from the ghost subject.

“Hi I’m Evan, and this is my bro, Brody. He’s a year older then me, and I’m 16. Nice to meet you.” He shook Ryan’s hand warmly. Then Ryan shook Brody’s hand.

“Hey marie! Come over and introduce you and your friends,” he looked at the boys, “that’s my cousin’. don’t worry shes cool.” Marie came over and her friends followed.

“Hi my names Marie, this is Debbie, and this is Tracy.” She shook their hands.

“Well, hi, my name is Even and this is-” Brody cut him off.

“My name is Brody” He pushed Even out of the way “ Hey, Marie, what is your full name?” He snickered.

“Well why do you want to know?” She looked very confused.

“Because I’m a little scared….heh heh.” He started to smile.

“Why” She was sounding annoyed.

“Well, I’ll…heh heh….guess, Bloody marie? Hahaha” He laughed uncontrollably. Marie was outraged, she went to punch him but Ryan held her back, she was known for her out bursts. Brody was still laughing at her will she glared at him. She got free and headed for the frount of the boat/ She looked into the deep sea. It sparkled a bright red. The sun was going down already. It made the sea look red. As she gazed into the sea, Even came behind her and said,

“I’m sorry for my brother, he likes to make jokes and stuff,” She turn around to look at him. She had tear streaked eyes. She wiped them with her red sweatshirt.

“Well it wasn’t nice of him, I really hate bloody Marie, I do believe in the supernatural things like that. I’m nothing like her!” She was still furious. Even looked into her eyes. “wow, I just met her and…sigh”

“I’m sorry,” She calmed down, the sun was almost down all the down. She looked around and almost everone was under the deck. All but them and Ryan. So she decided to go down too. She went down the narow flight of staires and into a rather small area. There was a small table surrounded by chaires and a couch. There was booze and cards on the table. There were also some ashtrays. Tracy and Debbie sat together on the couch. Next to the couch on the right was brody. She tried to avoid him as much as possible. She sat next to Debbie on the left. Ryan sat next to Marie on a chair and next to him was Evan. It was really silent until they could hear footsteps in the mini kitchen. All they could see was a little of the counter because there was a wall in frount of it. Then came out John with two trays of food. Then fear stuck Marie

“Excuse me but, whose driving the boat?” They all stared at John, He felt unconfortable. He grunted.

“My assistant, Josh, is that a problem?” They all shook there head as he droped the food in frount of them, first they stared at it. It really didn’t look like food, more like slop. There were about 3 piles of different colours. One was a baigy colour, most likely potatoes. One was green, probably some kind of vegitable. The other was like a purpaly brownish colour, They didn’t know what it was. John just stared at them. He was getting annoyed. Marie saw this, so avoiding a conflict, she grabed a spon and stuck it in the mushy baige stuff. She plopped it on her plate and got a spoon full of green mush. She started to eat them and gagged on the taste but pretended to like it. The others folowed and John seemed satisfied. After they were done their dinner they went to bed. Brody and Ever shared a room, Debbie and Tracy shared a room, and Ryan a Marie shared a room. The three roomes were cramped. There were two beds and a little space to put a trunk or suitcase. Marie got into bed and looked up into the ceiling.

“Marie? Are you still mad about Brody?” she looked at him.

“It’ll pass, I’m tired, ok? Goodnight Ryan” he turn his back to hers.

“Sweet dreams” She turned a round “I hope, Ryan, I hope.” then she fell into a deep sleep.

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Marie was in the same place as before but the ball room was lit up and it wasn’t going as slow as before. Then she heard the scream again and ran towards it and found a circle around this woman in a bright red dress. Her hair was perfectly done and had a beautiful diamond necklace and matchin earings. Then another scream. She turned around and rather handsome man fell to the ground clutching his wine glass. He was in a tuxido and had a bid diamond ring on his ring fingre. He had black hair and no facial hair. She heard more and more screams and looked around to find douzen and douzins of people falling to the ground. Marie got scared, she was now alone, all except the bar tender who had a grin on his face. He started to walk towards her…

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“Marie! Marie! Wake up!” Ryan stood over her shaking her. She looked at him with sleepy eyes. “john says we are almost there!” Marie stood up, already dressed in her cloths from yesterday. She ran up the narrow passage to the stares. As she got on to the deck she felt a little shiver. It felt colder. The sky was gray and there was fog everywhere.

“Hey!” said the raspy voice. It was obliviously john “we need some muscles here, all of our power is going to off soon.” Then we slowly slowed down. All of the boys went down to help, so did Marie, She loved to do things with the boys. Then they got farther and farther into the unknown…


*pant* well there we go! *pant* hope you like it!