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WARNING: This story is not for those who are deeply attached to any characters in
The Legend of Zelda games


The Legend of Zelda, and the Elemental Order

Chapter One: The End of a Legend


Link continued ambling along the thin path through the flower filled palace gardens toward the center. As he neared the grave he has visited every day since the fire accident that had taken the life of her and many others, he thought to himself the same thought which has weighed down on his conceants since that devastating day, ‘I should have been there.’

The path opened up in to the center courtyard, where in the middle lay a bright and beautiful tomb stone made of a pink tinted crystal, which had 3 shining jewels imbedded in the shape of a triangle, the Kokiri’s Emerald, the Gorons Ruby, and the Zora’s Sapphire. All of them were given to him by the leaders of the tribes at the funeral of his wife, Zelda.

Link sighed to himself as he placed some fresh flowers on the grave. He then kissed his hand and placed it on the tomb. He turned and walked sauntered down the path he had come in through and headed back toward his home which lay in the Kokiri forest.

Link stopped at the door of his simple cottage and removed his muddy worn down boots. He entered and headed straight for his bed, he really wasn’t all that tired but he wanted to sort through his thoughts. As he passed the mirror he glanced at himself. His face was wrinkled and worn by years of adventuring his hair almost completely white. ‘how the years get to you' he thought continuing past the mirror to his bed where he set himself down.

He was about to lay down completely but his acute ears picked up the sound of something being clicked into place, he stood up completely now looking around for the source of the sound. Then another sound reached his ears, sounding like a string being pulled tight. The sound he had heard came from the window to the right of him, he was about to walk over to it but that second his mind registered what the sounds meant. His eyes widened and he tried to drop to the ground but it was to late, there was a whoosh of something slicing through the air and then all went black.

“Dad I’m home!” Blaise said cheerily as he walked the final stretch of the path, the cottage now in site. Blaise was 15 and was quite strong for his age. With sandy blond hair styled the same as his dads was. He was wearing a black tunic with a red undershirt and tights. A sword that his dad had given him, who said that he found it rite here in this kokiri town, was strapped around his back not really out of necessity but just because he liked to practice all the things his dad had taught him. He reached the door and entered the cottage and headed toward Links room.

“I brought the bottles from the market like you….” He stopped in mid-sentence staring at the empty bed, and then his eyes were drawn to the ground. The bottles fell shattering negligently on the ground as Blaise stood shocked and wide eyed at The Hero of Hyrule, The Traveler of Time, The Widower of the Princess Zelda, and his father lying white faced and dead, blood trickling out of his mouth and an arrow protruding from his heart.

To Be Continued...

This story's caught my interest. The sentence structure and spelling are all real good....

‘how the years get to you he thought’

Just letting you know, you put the last ' in the wrong spot. Ment to be after 'you'.

Also, whenever someone speaks, put the quote on a new line:

“Dad I’m home!” Blaise said cheerily as he walked the final stretch of the path, the cottage now in site.

Blaise was 15 and was quite strong for his age. With sandy blond hair styled the same as his dads was.

And so on. And, in a fic such as this, when you mention numbers, put them in words, eg. 15 as fifteen.

^ Sorry about the critism there, but every fic gets critism unless it's entirely perfect(which nothing is...)

~LoH~

thanks for reminding me, i had forgotten about this fan fic.......well i added the edits in thanks, critisism is always welcome i guess i should put the second chapter in... ok then

The Legend of Zelda, and the Elemental Order


Chapter two: The Capture


Blaize rushed over to link and checked for life even though he knew it was too late. A sudden sadness, sadness like Blaize had swept over him. Both of his parents were gone now. He was all alone. But as quickly the sadness had come it was gone and he was instead filled with an overpowering rage.

“Who did this?” he said clutching his fingers into a fist. But the only answer he heard was a tiny click. Blaize stood completely still, he heard a string tighten. Still he stood there in the view of the window. There were a couple seconds of silence which was broken by the rush of something cutting through the air. Blaize had been waiting for this and suddenly launched himself into a sudden Summer Sault dodging the arrow as it imbedded its self into the wall behind Blaize. He landed on his feet and as soon as he touched ground he launched a fire ball through the window at the tree nearest the house that had been the source of the noise. There was a dull thump as his fireball made contact with whoever was in the tree then the sound of something heavy falling out of it. He jumped out of the window and ran to the thing that he had hit. As he rushed forward he thought about the time he learned how to make the fire balls, his dad had just taught him Dins Fire and he was practicing it when he focused harder on the fire and instead of going out like a shield it had shot directly forward as a concentrated fire ball. Link never could do it but Zelda said it was most likely the effects of both her magic genes and Links. It was too painful to think about them so he quickly focused and ran to the trunk of the tree. He found a man built thin like but with power concealed. ‘An assassin’ Blaize thought. He flipped the man over and found that he was still breathing, but very lightly, for he had a great black burn in his chest which had probably penetrated deep.

“Who sent you?!” Blaize yelled at the man. The man opened his eyes witch were cloudy and looked like he was close to death, and he smiled, and croaked out two words,

“They did” Blaize looked around and saw he was surrounded by about fifteen black cloaked men all with the letters E.O. sewn in gold on the right sleeve, they all had arrows in their hands all pointing at the same target, him.

To be continued…



this chaper was goin to be longer but the ending was just perfect...oh well

Well, this one seemed a bit rushed. The first one was better. You missed a question mark in "who did this"..... and remember to make speech on a new line, it's easier for the eye. I like where this is going, so keep writing.

its true, it was kinda rushed. i had chapter 2 written but then decided to rewrite the whole thing because the origional chapter 2 wasnt goin to fit in with the story. I put more effort into this one, check it out.



The Legend of Zelda, and the Elemental Order

Chapter three: The Dark Castle


Blaize trudged on through a wide path worn down by years of use. ‘Where did all the people go, this looks like a main roadway’ Blaize thought to himself. It had been almost 8 days since he was captured and taken away from his home into distant lands that he did not recognize from any map or any of his personal explorations.
Blaize winced as the heavy shackles on his wrists and feet were suddenly yanked harder then necessary cutting them deeper into his wrists.

“Were stopping here for the night” said one five gruff looking guards who had the job of escorting him to where ever they were taking him. The others had gone ahead to the destination on horse back. They pushed Blaize down onto a nearby log and threw two slices of bread and a corked canteen witch contained water, the same meal he’d had since they started the journey. Blaize wolfed down the bread without complaint and chugged down all of the water.

“Time for sleep” said another guard who Blaize had noticed had a very limited vocabulary. They threw down a smelly blanked who Blaize suspected had been a horse blanket in the past, but still he did not complain but simply laid down on it shackles and all. Blaize heard the heavy breathing of the guard less then 5 feet away keeping watch on him. But Blaize didn’t care; he wasn’t going to try to escape. They were obviously taking him to their leader, the one responsible for his father’s death. Where link would make them pay. He continued thinking until sleep finally took him.

“Get up you little bastard” Blaize flipped over and was face to face with one of the unshaven guards.

“It’s about time” the guard dropped the same meal on his chest and walked off. Blaize ate then was pushed to the path again where they continued tramping along. They continued walking until the path widened and the site that struck him made him forget to breathe. The path conitnued until it stopped at a massive city that had giant golden wall around it with buildings that were so large they showed over the already tall wall. But that’s not what shocked him, what did is that beyond the city lay a mountain that had on it the biggest castle that Blaize had ever seen, it was easily 10 times bigger then the one in Hyrule and completely dwarfed the giant city. But the castle had a different feel to it then the one at Hyrule, this one’s stone was completely black and it had dark clouds above it that put the beautiful city into shadow.

They walked through the city’s main road toward the dark castle. But as they were walking Blaize noticed something strange, the city was completely empty. There wasn’t a soul in site. It took almost two hours to get to the other side where in that time they had lunch. When they reached the mountain they went up a long path that took them rite up to the castles main entrance. The guard knocked then stepped back as the door swung open revealing a giant hall that ended in multiple staircases with one big golden one in the center. They walked down the hall to take that one, when the guards weren’t looking Blaize cast Farore’s wind, ‘better have a way out once I’m done here’ he thought

“Hey hurry up you” said the guard. Blaize obliged without a word. They had an exhausting climb up the long stair case witch Blaize suspected went to the top of the whole castle. When it finally came to an end they were at a giant golden door with the letter E.O. engraved into it. ‘Why does everything have to be so big?!’ thought Blaize still winded from the climb. They waited a little bit while everyone caught their breath. Then guards pushed open the doors and directed him inside handing him his sword in the process, but they did not follow him. ‘Why did they give me my sword?’ he thought. Blaize stepped in to find he was in a massive stone room with no obvious markings to it. The door was closed behind him and Blaize walked forward not sure what to do since there was no exit except for the door behind him. But as if to answer his question the far side of the room opened into a door. As did the sides of the room, but these doors weren’t for him to exit out of. Multitudes of creatures of every shape and size entered the room through the different doors. All of them facing him, once all of them were in fire encased the doors making escape impossible. Everything was quiet for a couple seconds as everyone was still. Then they attacked.

To be continued………

i really like it so far. Good writing and idea of it being links son on the adventure is pretty original and i like that. i cant wait for the next one. the last one left me on edge!

well you dont have to wait anymore heres the next instalment.


The Legend of Zelda: The Elemental Order

Chapter 4: The Test


Blaize launched himself into the air and threw down a fire ball, which exploded blasting a hole in the center of them which Blaize landed in. As soon as his feet touched the ground he drew his sword out in a flash ready for battle. 2 wolfols were the first to attak. The first one launched himself at Blaize’s head, claws outstretched; Blaize ducked him then easily cut through the second one. Blaize heard the wolfo coming back for a second attak. Blaize did a back flip stabbing his blade in the wolfo’s neck as it went under him. He hit the ground but had no time to recover as 4 stalfos rushed forward shield and swords in hand. The first one stabbed at Blaize’s stomach which he easily parried sending the skeleton off balance giving him time to slice through its neck. But the others didn’t even hesitate as their comrade fell to the ground as a heap of bone. They all lunged at him but Blaize was quicker, he jumped to the side and jumped at the stalfo that he had already killed picking up his sword and putting it in his left hand. The other stalfos were quick to recover and were already running at him. 2 of them swung at his left side which he blocked and used the other hand to block the thrust that the 3rd one had attempted. Blaize’s swords were flashing about with lightning fast speed as he blocked all 3 stalfos attempts to kill him. One of them made the mistake Blaize was looking for and he cut the unguarded stalfo in half. The other 2 were quickly killed as well. But the battle was far from over.
A tektike jumped forward but Blaize quickly cut the soft-bodied parasite in half. Blaize looked around, he was surrounded with creatures he couldent even name, some that looked like zombies and mummies, lizard like creatures, floating skulls with fire around them, and other creatures that looked to gruesome to be real. But Blaize didn’t make a move. He was not going to cast farore’s wind, he was going to defeat these monstrosities and find the person who ordered his dad to be killed. He charged up his sword and unleashed a spinning attak whitch killed some of the closest ones, but the other just walked over their dead and circled him again. The group surrounding him moved closer. ‘Come on’ he thought, ‘just a little closer’. They took another step toward him then he acted he suddenly slammed his hand on the ground unleashing all of his fury and anger into one Dins Fire. A dome of fire surrounded Blaize for a second then it exploded outward instantly incinerating all of the beasts in the room. For a second Blaize was again alone in the room with just the ash of the once creatures to keep him company, but then the doors on the sides of the room shut and the fire disappeared from the door opposite the one he entered through. ‘What’s going on?’ Blaize asked himself. He walked through the door and took a couple steps forward into a room twice as large as the first. The door slammed shut behind him.

Nothing happened at first but then a scraping sound filled the room. Blaize saw nothing on the walls or the ceiling but when he looked down he realized that there was a hole opening in the floor at the far side of the room. Then the stone stopped opening and it was silent for a moment before a giant, reptilian hand with claws as long as Blaize’s fore-arm reached over the edge to get a grip. Then a second came, then the head came over the edge. It head was like a giant snake’s with huge fangs and shining red eyes. The rest of its body slivered over the edge and Blaize saw it was about 20 feet long; it looked like a dragon with no wings, its body long and slender with shining scales throughout its body. Once it was out the hole in the floor shut and the dragon turned to face him.

It rushed forward at an alarming speed, even with the legs it gave the impression of slithering. Blaize drew his sword and waited. The thing made it to him and instantly struck, Blaize jumped sideways as the beasts face hit into the stone where he was just a second ago. The beast turned and Blaize rolled forward as it struck again. Blaize slashed its left front leg its scales strong but Blaize still cut about a fourth of the way through causing bluish blood to rush down the leg. The monster roared and turned its body to face him. The creature opened its mouth and sprayed out a greenish liquid, witch Blaize jumped left to dodge, but a little got on his arm which immediately started burning. ‘Acid’ Blaize thought. He ran along side the beast and launched a fireball into its side, the scales just absorbed it. The creature turned its head but Blaize was quicker. He jumped up onto its back and repeatedly stabbed it in the back as he ran toward the head. The monster roared with pain turned its head to try to reach him but couldn’t. Blaize stabbed it in the back of its head and it pointed its head straight up and sprayed acid in the air so it would come down rite on Blaize. Blaize launched himself off the beast and rolled out of the line of acid witch fell rite where he was standing a second ago. ‘This guy’s smart’ Blaize thought. Blaize retreated to the corner farthest from the room to try to think of what to do. But he didn’t have much time as the beast ran forward screaming with fury. Blaize just acted out of instinct and hurled his sword charged with fire straight at the beast which went into its head causing the beast’s screams to silence as it came crashing down, bleeding and dead. A new door opened and a golden light filled the room.

To be continued…

Cool. Profanity bad, Story good.