(Sf) My prologue [T]

I already posted this in the actual Art and Writing section but I felt that it would be more at home here in Fiction.
I started writing a book a few days ago and posted below is the prologue to it. I would appreciate it if people would read it and tell me what they think. I'd find your comments and criticisms very helpful. Thanks!

EDIT: Oh yeah, it's a (sf) and it's rated (t) for some mild language and violence. It's nothing too bad, though...

It was really good! It was descriptive, no grammatical errors that I notice nor spelling errors. The suspense was great and I loved the dramma. I would love to see the first chapter posted. It will probably be really great!

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