(Rom/Tra) She Moved Through the Fair [T]

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wow, 2005? O.o

Thank ye all kind faer the comments. <3 the criticisms, Raphael - thank you very much. I'm going to rework the prose at some point, and make an effort to make it more readable. You think it would work as original fic? That's an idea, =D

That was...that was...brilliant. No two ways about it. It's great to see someone doing something different with a Zelda fanfic. The description was always top notch, allowing the imagery to immediately fill my mind with the scenes playing out before my eyes. It was quite sad and touching and romantic. I almost had a tear in my eye. Your writing is some of the most beautiful I have ever read and I'd love to see you do more stories like this. It was really refreshing to get a different story other than the usual Link Vs. Ganondorf. What's your next Zelda fic going to be like if you do another one? Perhaps a tale about the fishing guy and his love of the fishing or something. Or perhaps a Gerudo love story or a tale of a lowly Hylian guard? Whatever you do next, I'm sure it'll be brilliant, just like all of your work.

Oh...wow Selah. That was amazing. My eyes are blurry after reading that. The descriptions were wonderful, and it was interesting and different. It was a nice break from the usual zelda fanfics. Great job! I can't wait to read your next piece of writing.

That was very good. I only had the problem with the speech, because it sounded like Malon was a hillbilly at some parts. Other than that, I have no complaints and urge you to continue writing more original fan-fiction.

Wow. That's really good. I LOVE how you put 'She Moved Throught the Fair' in it!! That's one of my favorite Celtic songs!!!!!

I do not think I really have much to add, and I am late in replying. However it is a beautiful story and I feel I must express my praise of it. That was of a standard far beyond what someone writing fanfiction should be capable of.

The use of 'She Moved Through the Fair' was terrific. I could hear the song as you told the story, and it really did provide detail on a beautiful, albeit tragic, story.
I also loved the celtic tone in the speech, that was a great idea. Reference to the original inspiration at all.

However, as much as I hate to do it, I am duty-bound to criticise. The english used in the narration was very advanced. While this does give it a certain 'old' feel, it also somewhat diminishes the impact of the story when you can't actually understand what it says. Also, I do not think that any real pretence of being connected to Zelda was nessecary: this would have been just as good, if not better, set in the real world.

All in all however, it is of a style and class that I wish I had the skill to imitate. Bravo.