Ocarina of Time Retelling (T)

Originally Posted by BlueStarReturns

I laughed out loud at that part! Thanks for giving me my daily dose of laughter!

Glad to.

I also liked Mido getting what was coming to him, as others have mentioned. I especially like where the whole story is going. Link's character is exactly how people should see him in OoT, in my honest opinion. In a fanfic that I'm working on, Link is nowhere near as well-developed as you have made him (I kind of suck at writing anyway, so that doesn't help me). I say good job on capturing Link very well!

Thanks. Link's character is probably what I focus on the most. It would be very easy to ruin him, which I really don't want to do, so I take special care to craft him well.

Also, I find the humor to be very amusing. I've laughed at all of the humor I found, and that, my friend, is one of the reasons why I will continue to read current and future chapters.

Hehehehe, yeah, I want it to be mostly serious, but I think a joke here and there can really help. After all, I can't write a foul mood all the time, else people would lose interest.

Great work!

Thanks.

Originally Posted by SeedsofLight

Yeah, it was good! A nice little resting pace is not a bad idea for a few chapters. But make sure it is intresting, if nothing's happenning then it isn't a good idea to slow down the pace. Try and put more humour into this section of the story, because it's either action or extreme important story stuff, or something like Lon Lon, which needs a reason to read it. That reason could be humour I suppose but you could have some action in there too. You could have theives attack LonLon, and because Link was doing late night working and is asleep in the field, he's not where the theives go, but everyone else is tied up and stuff and Link has to save all of them!

Hehehehe, well, as you see now, that didn't happen. I purposely did it though. A lot of action had been going on, and I felt that both myself and the audience could really do with a legitimate break from the fast pace I had set up. Don't worry though, it won't stay slow forever. Things will really pick up once Link gets to Hyrule Castle and meets Zelda.

Originally Posted by Exidid

Last chapter was one of my favorites. There doesn't need to be violent action for it to be satisfying!

My thoughts exactly. And thanks.

Originally Posted by Tatsuya-san

I want to say that this story is simply brilliant. You have taken an already beautiful story and are making it into an even greater, in-depth, powerful and dark story. What's more, you are doing it beyond what the definition of 'well' allows.

Wow, thanks, that's quite a compliment.

I must compliment your usage as far as description goes. You paint very vivid pictures in the minds of your readers, almost putting them behind Link's, Navi's, and now Malon's eyes. Also, your ability to write unique and realistic character personalities is phenomenal; they are consistent, yet with a realistic flexibility. Link is an obvious candidate for that last statement, seeing as Ocarina of Time is supposed to be a story of his maturing, which I see foreshadowed in past chapters and look forward to seeing later.

Well, description is one of my best writing qualities I think. And characterization comes second.

And third I must say that your originality is intriguing at the very least.
Being a writer, and a lover of the Zelda series, I must say that you have written, by far, the best fanfic (if you can call it that) I have ever read. To emphasize how much I like this, I shall say that my main ulterior motive for registering with these forums was to subscribe to this story.

Wow, now I'm really flattered.

On a separate note, I shall say that this point was a very good time to have a resting point or 'peaceful' time. A good choice that many authors make the mistake of discarding. The ability to rest the reader's (and writer's) mind whilst still assuring interest is a valuable ability. You have it.

Thank you. I will do my best not to disappoint with later chapters.

Originally Posted by Zeldadudetp

This was a great chapter as well.

I liked how you developed the characters in this one, especially Malon. Maybe she is going to be a major character?

Not telling.

I also liked how it foreshadowed Link's want/love for Epona.

And, for some reason, you make Lon Lon Ranch sound cozy.

Hahahaha. I do what I can.

Well... Keep up the good work!

I certainly hope to.

Originally Posted by Xeves

Once again, a grand chapter to add on to this phenomenal story. The character development is flourishing in this passage, and again the absence of violence does not deter from the excitement. Keep up the good work, as well as the fast pace you are developing these at. I commend thee! =D

Why thankee.

Originally Posted by SeedsofLight

Yeah! Keep going! Hopefully you can finish the whole story of OOT! Do you think it could happen?

I do indeed think it could happen. It's what I fully intend to do. For both my sake, and your guy's sake. Wouldn't want to get you all hooked on this thing and then leave you hanging. That would just be cruel.

Originally Posted by Zeldadudetp

This chapter was better than the previous.

Really? I felt the first one was better, but that's what opinion is all about, I suppose.

I like how you made it that Link didn't know what milk was, because I would have never remembered that if this was my fan-fic.

Hehehehe, I thought it would be a nice little addition, and an introduction/hint at Link's drinking of milk in the game.

Keep up the good work!

I always have nothing but good things to say about your writing.

Well, thanks. I certainly hope to keep things that way.

Originally Posted by candc32

well I read it, I think my brain is fried lol I like all the extra stuff you added like him helping on lon lon with milk crates and crap, I'm sorry but thats only one I can remember right now lol, keep going with this I really enjoyed it!

Thanks. Always nice to hear that someone appreciates my work.

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oh and umm I never got the feeling in the game that link hated the world though I loled when I read that.

Well, I felt that it would be a far more realistic reaction to being shunned by his peers than becoming altruistic would.

Originally Posted by Gold

Wheee, Aralith, another two great chapters! :>

Thank you.

Just one tiny little error I saw:

I think you can see the problem yourself, just a little mixup that Mircosoft Word wouldn't notice.

Ah yes, I'm surprised more weren't in there, to be honest. I don't know why, but I was making that exact same mistake throughout the entire chapter. I caught most of them, but one of them eluded me apparently.

EDIT: For those who haven't noticed, a poll has been added to this story, so make sure to submit your opinion there. Of course, I'd appreciate it if you posted your opinion in the thread as well.

I voted for Absolutely amazing work!. I was the first one to do so!

Well it's impossible not to put "Absolutely amazing work!" so I obviously put that as my answer, as did every single other vote! Keep going! Is there any kind of release date for each chapter, say weekly or every fortnight, or is it just as soon as you finish?

It's pretty much just as soon as I finish them. I'd say to expect one at least once every three weeks. Though this next chapter might prove a little longer to be forthcoming, as I'm having some technical difficulties with both my computer and my internet.

And thanks to all who voted well in the poll.

Ah.

Well good luck and such!

I'm sure everyone here would rather wait for a great chapter than get a rushed chapter, so take your time.

WOW! Shinespark this is incredible! After you're done with this think you'll do anymore retellings?

Jeez. You can't rush quality, but this really takes the biscuit.

To all of my faithful readers, I once again must apologize. I honestly don't know how you all keep putting up with my absences, but I am most grateful that you do. That computer problem turned out to be a bit more serious than I thought. As in, computer-crippling serious. My laptop which served me well (mostly, anyways) for three years is now deceased... but all is not lost. I have recently acquired another computer, and with it, the means to internet and write are once again mine.

Not to say I haven't been writing. In fact, I've gotten most of the next chapter in this story worked out already; it mostly just has to go from paper to word processor. So to those who have waited patiently these last two months, I ask that you wait just a few more days. And again, I wish to express my deepest gratitude for your continued perseverance through the constant delays that have plagued this project.

Yay!new chapter in a couple of days,whoot!
Cant wait! ^_^

Right this really has slowed down to a halt...

I created an account here just to comment on this story. Absolutely breathtaking, I played through OOT just now and came across this fanfic while searching for something online. I can't get enough. Seems like (the poster above me put it perfectly) it is coming along at a crawl now. Don't keep us waiting too long!

10/10

This is totally awesome. Really good. The relationship between malon and link is done incredibly well, keep up the good work. You shoud totally write the whole story of Oot, do you think it is likely you will?