Artemis Luna(n/F)

[Artemis Luna]

Name: Artemis Luna

Age: 17

Race: Homunculi

Sex: Male

Hair: mid length, black

Eyes:Red

Weight: 124lbs

Height: 5'4

Weapon: Shin Ookami (divine wolf)-A katana made out of "Black Steel"(A black steel-like metal of unknown origin, slightly stronger and more flexible than normal steel, never looses it's edge, only reflects red light, and even then only in direct sunlight.) has a wolf embossed into the base of the blade.

Armor: plated greaves and vambraces

Strengths: good at puzzles.

Weakness: Artemis is rather shy

Skills/Magic:
Name: wolf form
Effect:change back and forth between wolf form
Drawback:not every one can become a wolf

Name: explosion
Effect: focuses Magical essence into an object, creating an explosion when that object contacts another.
drawback: object can't be alive. explosion is proportionate to object. Explosion may hurt user

Name: heal
Effect:Using Magical essence, the user heals the wounds in any living thing.
Drawback:User must have knowledge of the anatomy of the target

Appearance:

Artemis wears a black overcoat fastened with black belts built into it. Under that he wears Black jeans, with black combat boots and a Black long sleeved with more belts.

Personality: Artemis is rather headstrong as well as an outgoing albeit somewhat shy person.

Biography: Artemis was created by an alchemist in a far off land as an attempt to create the ultimate weapon for his master. Artemis was raisied as a weapon, training day and night for years to please a creator who thought he might just be another defective product. During this time, he learned how to manipulate his magical essance in order to both heal and hurt. One day, he learnewd that his creator was planning to kill him...

Relizing that, he took the poker from it's place by the fire place, and ran the alchemist through. The deed done, Artemis relized that he would still die if he didn't leave as soon as possable. He quickly grabed his ex-master's cloak form the rack, and ran out into a night-time blizzard. As he ran through the swirling winds, he felt a primal self burning deep within him. As he clung on to this self he found that he could bear the biting winds better, and he decided to see what would happed if he tried to use his Mana to realease this self.

As he released it, his body seemed to be on fire. and when the burning stopped, he was many times faster than before, and when he finally opened his eyes he saw that he was only half his previous size. He barely even felt the winds now, and was rushing through the snow banks like they weren't even there. He finally made it to the forest an hour later, but didn't feel tired at all, so he decided to keep going. After three more hours of running, he finally stopped to get some water, looking down at the calm water, as this was a very thick forest, and the storm didn't reach as deep in as he was, and saw that he wasn't human anymore, instead he saw the face of a wolf staring back at him from the water.

After he calmed down he relized that he could change back and forth, and his clothes reappeared on his body when he returned to his human form. After this, he quickly changed back into a wolf, and ran to a country far to the west, where he has been living for a year and a half.

[Ciroton]

Originally Posted by icybreeze

Nice to meet you^^

FIRST POST

This is the last time I am going to warn you about posting in other people's character threads. The next time, I will contact a moderator and leave the course of action up to them.

*Edit* I'll have a look at your character in a little bit, Artemis. Once you finish filling in the fields, that is.

[Artemis Luna]

moron go poof, ne way, I finished.

[Ciroton]

Alright then, time to get to work.

1) Expand everything from weapons to the biography. Detail is key around here, including the character profiles.

2) Check your spelling ang grammar via a word processing program, or a website.

3) For the biography, please tell the reader more about the initial wolf transformation. Did he not feel himself change? Why did he feel like releasing all his Mana for no apparent reason?

Fix these things, and I will come back for a second look.