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Chomps ( himself only)

name: Chomps

age: currently eight years old, his species grow fast.

race: dinosaur, a species of tyrannosaur called Tyrannosaurus knucklerii, one of the species of present day tyrannosaurs.

gender:male

hair: none. Only his green protofeathers as a pup, used in kaiju classification,
can be counted.

eye color: a light red, round and cat eyed.

weight: typical specimans weigh 5 tons. Chomps is one of the "extreme" specimans (predicted) to reach 6 tons. He is currently 600 pounds.

height: Adults reach up to 55 feet long and 20 feet tall. Chomps, being a juvinile, is currently 15 feet long and 7 feet tall, and counting.

weapons: extremely powerful jaws that has the biggest bite force of all animals, even against the best known placoderm and it's ancestor the Tyrannosaurus rex. bone crushing teath. powerful three fingered arms used to grasp his prey (consisted from as small as mice to as large as the biggest saltasaurid, which has saltasaurus itself, sauropods). A long tapering tail. Eagle clawed feet. strong regenerative power.

strengths: Sharp eyesight, allowing him to see sudden movements out in the open and in dense cover. Being the largest land carnivore, Chomps has the greatest sense of smell of any animal. This allows him to track enemies for miles away. Able to find obey strategies by his master.for his strengths, Chomps has the ability to regenerate at a fast, but not too fast, pace.
The amount of miles chomps can track is near indefinite. His ability to obey his masters commands is similar to that of a dog, which also obeys his/her master. He mostly uses his jaws as a killing weapon. One GREAT chomp can crush a big animal.

weaknesses: Bulls of chomp's species are fearcely protective of their territory and will do whatever it takes to save it, even death can apply. Domesticated animals will react to the masters danger to a halt. Chomps' specie is also able to react to an event to what happened to a person or thing and express it. His chance to visit the battle feild is good as long as his master is not captured or killed.Any time if the scent chomps is tracking is crossed with another scent, he will stop and retract the smell. Although his specie is lighter built than it's ancestor, The species has a wide radius turning, making him tough to catch agile opponents and prey.

skills/magic: Chomps is one of the many specimans who's blood stream can accept kaiju power vaccines. One such vaccine increased the sound of his roar to an extreme, allowing him to kill enemies at a safe range. Another vaccine increased his mobility, which allows him to leap vast distances of 5 to 10 feet.

Here are the vaccines and the effects.

Flexibility (injected in the bones): allows the patient to have incredible flexibiltity. The downfall, to much flexibility vaccines will kill you as your skeleton turns into cartilage.

Sound increasers(injected in the voice box): increases the volume of sound in your voice box. The down fall, a wrong vaccine of volume will either make you mute or highly squeeky.

strength(injected in the muscles): similar to steroids, but has no harm to the internal systems(reproductive, breathing etc.). the only thing harmful is that the vaccine limits the movement of the joint where the muscles are when they are vaccinated.

regenerative: decreases the amount of days of healing. but power hungry people who take too much vaccines will have to be euthanized(killed).

smarts: increases the amount of brain cells by one thousand. Too much will cause you to suffer from head aches. the vaccine for that will be mentioned next.

brain drain: decreases the amount of brain cells by one million. useful for those who are suffering from too much smart vaccines.

apearence: His species, although similar in build to tyrannosaurus rex, is more lightly built. their color is judged by the color of the pup's protofeather color,for example if they are black then their skin is balck as adults. thus chomps' color is light green.His species skull is longer. Chomps specie also has an increase in flexibility, allowing them to do the tripod stance in Charles R. Knights drawings. His species back has small osterderms and small spines lining from back of the neck to the tail tip.

personality: Chomps is honest to his very goodness. His main problem is how will he protect his freinds and defeat baddies. His sense of smell usually leads him to traps. Smoke is chomps major dislike, as he cannot see in the smoke. Chomps usually takes things that are very hurtful to him such as "big head" and "how can you grab with such small, dinky arms?!". But he is very forgiving and will forgive his freinds and forgets the bad things.

Biography: His birth place is in Shark city, Shark island in the game preserve around the time of the ocarina of time events (at least around 2035 HC to 2047 HC).

He has a family yes and he grew up with them for seven years, but they died on the seventh year when ganondorf killed them for protecting their son.

here's a very sad story, chomps was the only one of his egg clutch to survive. He has deciesed brothers and sisters because of the egg theiving dinosaurs of the preserve. He does make up for them with his freinds, one a Therizinosaur called baby, and a genus of Troodon called mary. They still live in the preserve today as honorary animals. Chomps visits them often.

His childhood, although short, was extremely abusive. Chomps was abused by other carnivores and hugely a speciman of an giant, albino pliosaur called Moby. Only by his parents will he be saved.

Chomps is protective of his former master knuckles the echidna.Chomps protectivity of knuckles was his mostly sworn oath when he became seven years old. This was later passed down to his and knuckles' descendants( most importantly knuckles' daughter). Any sign of trouble, chomps will usually come as fast as he can to save him. Thus, while he is compassionate to knuckles, he will attack enemies without mercy and most likely will eat them in the process. His temper is quite long, but it
whittles down at a fast pace because his enemy usually hurt his feeling by racial means.He will also not trust those he does not know. Though shark isle is his current home, he wants to know whats out there in the old world, which he does later in his life. He later explores the apparent New World, which is west of supremia. I have mentioned tthat he will not respect those who disrespect him. The goal in being a worldly dominant predator is moving to a top predators land and killing one in the process. Chomps, being the dominant predator, tests his power over all the other predators in the land.Chomps' species age is opposed to the original age of tyrannosaurs, which lives for 29 years. This is because the amount of food on shark island allows them to live a long time.


During the Ocarina of time timeline, a bridge of rock forms from Hyrule to Shark island, which allows animals to cross the ocean. Chomp's, seeking revenge for what happened to his parents by ganon, crosses the bridge with the others.





His name is Knuckles the Echidna. Chomps and knuckles is really a referance to the comics in which knuckles has a pet dinosaur named chomps, though it is unknown what the comic version of chomps is. The reason I add him to the zelda universe is because in my version of ocarina of time, Knuckles had a vision of an evil man, which apeared to be ganon, taking every single super powerful item in his grasp and conquering the world. Knuckles, thinking the vision is true, moves from Angel Island, which is above the Old World, and settles in death mountain, near dodongo's cavern.

his age is 16 years old, but became 23 years old after link's seven year nap after he drew the master sword.

his apearence is exactly what he is in the sonic universe, Long red dread locks, two spikes on his knuckles, and so fourth.
Here is a picture from wikipedia
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his personality is quite the same as he is in the games except that he is more expecting to do what he can to protect the master emerald. He also has a hatred for people who are carefree, but that changed when he met chomps.



How the duo met is this. During the adventure,knuckles accidently broke the kaiju game preserve wall.He, along with his friends found an egg when the destruction was over and decide to take it to be sacrificed because they have lost the kaiju's most prized possesion, The Holy Grail. They later found out that the grail was returned safely. A little later they have seen the egg hatch and knowing it was a predator, all, except knuckles, have fled. Knuckles, seeing it as a cute harmless pup, accepts it and powerful bond starts. He does everything a parent does, which includes naming him chomps. The only problem is feeding it as he experianced seeing him eat a mouse. He introduces them to the others. They were just close to accepting him when Chomps' predatory instincts caused him to bite one of his friends tail. After that, Chomps was treated horribly by the others and after knuckles told him that predators cannot be accepted to the city, though later they accept predators, Chomps runs away from the foursome heroes. Just as he ran away, His parents, A dark forest green male (which is his dad) and an albino female (his mom) enters the city. They find chomps and return to the game preserve. The inhabitants see that the wall is damaged and that they plan to seal it. Knuckles finds Chomps' family returning to their home. Chomps see's knuckles and tries to join him again. His words are " chomps, you must go to your family! The people are trying to fix the damage done to the wall!" Chomps becomes startled, then knuckles say's " It may be your first time you met me, but I have something important, we'll meet each other again sometime." After Chomps leave's, and the kaiju close the wall, the scientists were still unsure what to call Chomps' specie. Knuckles, being in honor by his new friend for life, calls his specie Tyrannosaurus knucklerii for his honor of experiancing one.

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here is what chomps should look like in the picture above along with the picture shown below

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Uh... before I go into anything major, I would like to say I've never seen anyone submit a dinosaur character before. O-o I applaud your ability to think outside of the box, but I wonder... how will they be able to communicate with the other characers? *All huminoid, or of human intelligance* Not to mention how thay'll be able to defend themselves from all the swordsman, mages, summoners, etc. I think if he got into a fight with a lot of the characters here, he'd either get killed, or the character would hide in some tight space.

So yeah, please answer me those questions. (Again, I commend your ability to think outside the box. ^_^)
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Usually when Chomps' species is domesticated by someone, he/she ussually has a pamphlet that allows them to study the sounds and emotions a tyrannosaurus knucklerii does. Once he/she has studied enough, they usually communicate with what sounds like chirps and clicks that, though not accurate to the sounds the animal makes, is enough to for the animal to understand. Thus it is only domesticated animals of tyrannosaurus knucklerii that are able to communicate with human and humanoids, though kaiju can understand their language better since their reptavians.

If you look at stop motion films with a saurian predator, you'll see that the animal has usually the longest role of other dinosaurs that appeared in that film,usually because the animal has thick skin. Because mainland hylians never seen such a predator, they will mostly cower until the military comes (see jurassic park films for an example).

This specie, along with a giant species of saltasaurid, and a species of denonychosaurid the size of wolves and tigers, are considered part of kaiju millitary as war animals. Usually

the domesticated animals will be involved. Like you said, they can get kill by swords and arrows, but like a war elephant, it takes a lot of blows to take down each animal.

(sorry for the double post, I accidently slipped my finger on the enter button and it sent the first post).

And thank you for checking in with the character, I really aprecciate it.

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Usually when Chomps' species is domesticated by someone, he/she ussually has a pamphlet that allows them to study the sounds and emotions a tyrannosaurus knucklerii does. Once he/she has studied enough, they usually communicate with what sounds like chirps and clicks that, though not accurate to the sounds the animal makes, is enough to for the animal to understand. Thus it is only domesticated animals of tyrannosaurus knucklerii that are able to communicate with human and humanoids, though kaiju can understand their language better since their reptavians.

If you look at stop motion films with a saurian predator, you'll see that the animal has usually the longest role of other dinosaurs that appeared in that film,usually because the animal has thick skin. Because mainland hylians never seen such a predator, they will mostly cower until the military comes (see jurassic park films for an example).

This specie, along with a giant species of saltasaurid, and a species of denonychosaurid the size of wolves and tigers, are considered part of kaiju millitary as war animals. Usually
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the domesticated animals will be involved. Like you said, they can get kill by swords and arrows, but like a war elephant, it takes a lot of blows to take down each animal.

(sorry for the double post, I accidently slipped my finger on the enter button and it sent the first post).

And thank you for checking in with the character, I really aprecciate it.
What I gather from these posts is that Chomps is somewhat domesticated and can partially understand human beings, correct? If that is the case, then I suppose that help with the communication part. If not, then please explain in a way someone who isn't exactly dinosour savy can understand.

Moving on to the Profile overall, my first and formost suggestion is to put the latter part of the Biography into proper paragraph form, and expand on those points. Secondly, I wish to see a bit more detail in the strenghts/weaknesses departments, as well as a through description on each vaccine and its effects.

I will take another look when these are done as well as my question answered.
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Chomps protectivity of knuckles was his mostly sworn oath when he became seven years old. This was later passed down to his and knuckles' descendants( most importantly knuckles' daughter). Any sign of trouble, chomps will usually come as fast as he can to save him. Thus, while he is compassionate to knuckles, he will attack enemies without mercy and most likely will eat them in the process. His temper is quite long, but it
whittles down at a fast pace because his enemy usually hurt his feeling by racial means.He will also not trust those he does not know. Though shark isle is his current home, he wants to know whats out there in the old world, which he does later in his life. He later explores the apparent New World, which is west of supremia. I have mentioned tthat he will not respect those who disrespect him. The goal in being a worldly dominant predator is moving to a top predators land and killing one in the process. Chomps, being the dominant predator, tests his power over all the other predators in the land.Chomps' species age is opposed to the original age of tyrannosaurs, which lives for 29 years. This is because the amount of food on shark island allows them to live a long time.

Now onto the expanding of strengths and weaknesses.

for his strengths, Chomps has the ability to regenerate at a fast, but not too fast, pace.
The amount of miles chomps can track is near indefinite. His ability to obey his masters commands is similar to that of a dog, which also obeys his/her master. He mostly uses his jaws as a killing weapon. One GREAT chomp can crush a big animal.

For his weakness expanding is this, Any time if the scent chomps is tracking is crossed with another scent, he will stop and retract the smell.

Here are the vaccines and the effects.

Flexibility (injected in the bones): allows the patient to have incredible flexibiltity. The downfall, to much flexibility vaccines will kill you as your skeleton turns into cartilage.

Sound increasers(injected in the voice box): increases the volume of sound in your voice box. The down fall, a wrong vaccine of volume will either make you mute or highly squeeky.

strength(injected in the muscles): similar to steroids, but has no harm to the internal systems(reproductive, breathing etc.). the only thing harmful is that the vaccine limits the movement of the joint where the muscles are when they are vaccinated.

regenerative: decreases the amount of days of healing. but power hungry people who take too much vaccines will have to be euthanized(killed).

smarts: increases the amount of brain cells by one thousand. Too much will cause you to suffer from head aches. the vaccine for that will be mentioned next.

brain drain: decreases the amount of brain cells by one million. useful for those who are suffering from too much smart vaccines.
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Alrighty then, add that stuff to the main profile. Now then, before we continue, I must ask you to explain more about Chomps' master. So far, you've only mentioned him. Since he appears to be a major influance on Chomps, I would like to see what he is like in terms of presonality, appearence, and their history, all explained in the Biography.
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name: Chomps

age: currently eight years old, his species grow fast.

race: dinosaur, a species of tyrannosaur called Tyrannosaurus knucklerii, one of the species of present day tyrannosaurs.

gender:male

hair: none. Only his green protofeathers as a pup, used in kaiju classification,
can be counted.

eye color: a light red, round and cat eyed.

weight: typical specimans weigh 5 tons. Chomps is one of the "extreme" specimans (predicted) to reach 6 tons. He is currently 600 pounds.

height: Adults reach up to 55 feet long and 20 feet tall. Chomps, being a juvinile, is currently 15 feet long and 7 feet tall, and counting.

weapons: extremely powerful jaws that has the biggest bite force of all animals, even against the best known placoderm and it's ancestor the Tyrannosaurus rex. bone crushing teath. powerful three fingered arms used to grasp his prey (consisted from as small as mice to as large as the biggest saltasaurid, which has saltasaurus itself, sauropods). A long tapering tail. Eagle clawed feet. strong regenerative power.

strengths: Sharp eyesight, allowing him to see sudden movements out in the open and in dense cover. Being the largest land carnivore, Chomps has the greatest sense of smell of any animal. This allows him to track enemies for miles away. Able to find obey strategies by his master.for his strengths, Chomps has the ability to regenerate at a fast, but not too fast, pace.
The amount of miles chomps can track is near indefinite. His ability to obey his masters commands is similar to that of a dog, which also obeys his/her master. He mostly uses his jaws as a killing weapon. One GREAT chomp can crush a big animal.

weaknesses: Bulls of chomp's species are fearcely protective of their territory and will do whatever it takes to save it, even death can apply. Domesticated animals will react to the masters danger to a halt. Chomps' specie is also able to react to an event to what happened to a person or thing and express it. His chance to visit the battle feild is good as long as his master is not captured or killed.For his weakness expanding is this, Any time if the scent chomps is tracking is crossed with another scent, he will stop and retract the smell.

skills/magic: Chomps is one of the many specimans who's blood stream can accept kaiju power vaccines. One such vaccine increased the sound of his roar to an extreme, allowing him to kill enemies at a safe range. Another vaccine increased his mobility, which allows him to leap vast distances of 5 to 10 feet.
Here are the vaccines and the effects.

Flexibility (injected in the bones): allows the patient to have incredible flexibiltity. The downfall, to much flexibility vaccines will kill you as your skeleton turns into cartilage.

Sound increasers(injected in the voice box): increases the volume of sound in your voice box. The down fall, a wrong vaccine of volume will either make you mute or highly squeeky.

strength(injected in the muscles): similar to steroids, but has no harm to the internal systems(reproductive, breathing etc.). the only thing harmful is that the vaccine limits the movement of the joint where the muscles are when they are vaccinated.

regenerative: decreases the amount of days of healing. but power hungry people who take too much vaccines will have to be euthanized(killed).

smarts: increases the amount of brain cells by one thousand. Too much will cause you to suffer from head aches. the vaccine for that will be mentioned next.

brain drain: decreases the amount of brain cells by one million. useful for those who are suffering from too much smart vaccines.

apearence: His species, although similar in build to tyrannosaurus rex, is more lightly built. their color is judged by the color of the pup's protofeather color,for example if they are black then their skin is balck as adults. thus chomps' color is light green.His species skull is longer. Chomps specie also has an increase in flexibility, allowing them to do the tripod stance in Charles R. Knights drawings. His species back has small osterderms and small spines lining from back of the neck to the tail tip.

personality: Chomps is honest to his very goodness. His main problem is how will he protect his freinds and defeat baddies. His sense of smell usually leads him to traps. Smoke is chomps major dislike, as he cannot see in the smoke. Chomps usually takes things that are very hurtful to him such as "big head" and "how can you grab with such small, dinky arms?!". But he is very forgiving and will forgive his freinds and forgets the bad things.

Biography: His birth place is in Shark city, Shark island in the game preserve around the time of the ocarina of time events (at least around 2035 HC to 2047 HC).

He has a family yes and he grew up with them for seven years, but they died on the seventh year when ganondorf killed them for protecting their son.

here's a very sad story, chomps was the only one of his egg clutch to survive. He has deciesed brothers and sisters because of the egg theiving dinosaurs of the preserve. He does make up for them with his freinds, one a Therizinosaur called baby, and a genus of Troodon called mary. They still live in the preserve today as honorary animals. Chomps visits them often.

His childhood, although short, was extremely abusive. Chomps was abused by other carnivores and hugely a speciman of an giant, albino pliosaur called Moby. Only by his parents will he be saved.

Chomps is protective of his former master knuckles the echidna.Chomps protectivity of knuckles was his mostly sworn oath when he became seven years old. This was later passed down to his and knuckles' descendants( most importantly knuckles' daughter). Any sign of trouble, chomps will usually come as fast as he can to save him. Thus, while he is compassionate to knuckles.At his or knuckles' command, he will kill others.

During the Ocarina of time timeline, a bridge of rock forms from Hyrule to Shark island, which allows animals to cross the ocean. Chomp's, seeking revenge for what happened to his parents by ganon, crosses the bridge with the others.

Chomps, in result, is easygoing. But will attack bad guys with no mercy.His temper is quite long, but it
whittles down at a fast pace because his enemy usually hurt his feeling by racial means.He will also not trust those he does not know.
His dislikes are majorly bad people who never forgive him and hurt his feelings constantly.To his freinds, he is respectful. To villains, he will never respect.


His current fond is exploring the world of Supremia with his freinds.Though shark isle is his current home, he wants to know whats out there in the old world, which he does later in his life. He later explores the apparent New World, which is west of supremia.

His goals is currently to be king of all animals in supremia by conquering every lands top predator.The goal in being a worldly dominant predator is moving to a top predators land and killing one in the process. Chomps, being the dominant predator, tests his power over all the other predators in the land.

Chomps' specie has a lifespan of one hundred years if all goes well. He is currently doing fine.Chomps' species age is opposed to the original age of tyrannosaurs, which lives for 29 years. This is because the amount of food on shark island allows them to live a long time.

For explaining of his master, do you want me to do another thread of his biography or do the biography with chomp's biography.

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You do know you can edit your own posts, correct? You'll find it on the bottom righ-hand corner of your post beside the "Quote" button. It is not nessisary to repost the entire profile, just eidt the first post, savvy? As for his master, a full Profile is not nessisary. Write his envolvement as you would a story, within Chomps' biography, to show how the two interacted. Furthermore, he only needs a breif over view of both personality and appearence since he is no longer around. Example: "Chomps' master, a benevolant yet imposing man..." Except, of course do it the way you want his mastere to be, savvy?

I'll look at him again when those changes are complete.
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I'll do my best when doing his story.

His name is Knuckles the Echidna. Chomps and knuckles is really a referance to the comics in which knuckles has a pet dinosaur named chomps, though it is unknown what the comic version of chomps is.

here is his apearence in picture form
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his personality is quite the same as he is in the games except that he is more expecting to do what he can to protect the master emerald. He also has a hatred for people who are carefree, but that changed when he met chomps.

How the duo met is this. During Links adventure, he, along with sonic, tails, and knuckles accidently broke the kaiju game preserve wall. They found an egg when the destruction was over and decide to take it to be sacrificed because they have lost the kaiju's most prized possesion, The Holy Grail. They later found out that the grail was returned safely. A little later they have seen the egg hatch and knowing it was a predator, all, except knuckles, have fled. Knuckles, seeing it as a cute harmless pup, accepts it and powerful bond starts. He does everything a parent does, which includes naming him chomps. The only problem is feeding it as he experianced seeing him eat a mouse. He introduces them to the others. They were just close to accepting him when Chomps' predatory instincts caused him to bite tails' tail. After that, Chomps was treated horribly by tails and after knuckles told him that predators cannot be accepted to the city, though later they accept predators, Chomps runs away from the foursome heroes. Just as he ran away, His parents, A dark forest green male (which is his dad) and an albino female (his mom) enters the city. They find chomps and return to the game preserve. The inhabitants see that the wall is damaged and that they plan to seal it. Knuckles finds Chomps' family returning to their home. Chomps see's knuckles and tries to join him again. His words are " chomps, you must go to your family! The people are trying to fix the damage done to the wall!" Chomps becomes startled, then knuckles say's " It may be your first time you met me, but I have something important, we'll meet each other again sometime." After Chomps leave's, and the kaiju close the wall, the scientists were still unsure what to call Chomps' specie. Knuckles, being in honor by his new friend for life, calls his specie Tyrannosaurus knucklerii for his honor of experiancing one.
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Okay, three important things.

1) If you do not know how to edit your posts, look for the little button on the bottom right hand (This side of the page) side of the posts. Then, click the "Edit" button. It is strongly reccomended you edit the first post instead of reposting the entire profile when changes are made.

2) The image link is outdated. Please, try to find a new image if you can, although it is suggested you at least take one sentence to descrobe his appearence.

3) Drop Link, Sonic, and Tails from the Biography. First and foremost, they have absolutly nothing to do with each other, thus making their placement odd. Not to mention they seem to play no major part in Chomps life. If Knuckles is the same Knuckles from the Sonic universe, then please come up with a reason for why he is in that time and place.
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Old 04-07-2008, 05:40 PM   #13
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I have edited the first post.
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Old 04-07-2008, 06:22 PM   #14
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Alrighty then, now we're getting somewhere. Although he is now... passable... for a beginning character, I need to see one more change in Chomp's profile. In the weaknesses section, I see very few weaknesses an opponent can exploit. Since Chomp's species is derrived from the Tyranasaurus Rex, I'd sueggest weaknesses along the line of short arm, or a wide turning radius, savvy?

Update, then I will have another look.
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Just one more teeny tiny thing, mate...

~*Approved*~

Although, I've noticed numerous spelling, grammar, and sentence structure errors. I suggest running him through a spell check at some point. Furtermore, I highly Reccomend the Battle School (The Forum Above this one) to develop both your character and your abilities as a writer. Heck, I've benifited alot from the Dome and it's teachers. Just make a comparison between my first character (Arin Bryant) and my latest character. (Kristina Ellis) [Links to both can be found in my Signature] The Teachers there are all nice, and approchable, as well as the mods, BAers, and the members of the Council.

With that, I say... Enjoy your stay. ^_^
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Old 04-08-2008, 08:55 AM   #17
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I do not see the spell check button.
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I do not see the spell check button.
Don't worry Ciro-Ciro, I got this one.

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What you should do then is type out your posts on Microsoft word, or Open ofice and use the spellchecker there, then copy and paste it onto the foumrms. Or use a spellchecking website, I suggest This one. I hope that helped. ^_^
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I have spell checked this forum.
Okay, good. Since I approved Chomps, you may copy and past the profile into the Character List.
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