Red

[Storm2754]

Name: Red

Age: 16

Race: Elf

Sex: Male

Hair: Red

Eyes: Red

Weight: 150lbs

Height: 5' 4"

Weapon: Great Sword is an all powerful sword but only in the hands of the right person and Red is not the right person so it is pretty much a large lightweight sword. He wields it with the assistance of the Gauntlets which makes the sword easy to wield single handedly like a small Katana. Shadow Bow generates shadow bolts when the string is pulled back it looks completely black with a couple purple gems around the arrow slot, Gauntlets of Strength increase the strength of the wearer to that of a giant, Staff of Azkar controls the elements of water, fire, earth, and wind and it looks like a normal walking staff with four emblems (red, green, blue, and yellow) which turn brighter when he uses the staff, and a reflective shield that absorbs light and generates a higher powers burst that only affects the undead or pure evil. It is a weapon known as the Shield of Flash.

Strengths: He is good at swordsmanship, and he is very lucky in most cases

Weakness: He is overconfident, headstrong, doesn't want to be a hero, and anti-social, but most of all he is inhabited by the evil spirit of his father which changes him at times from good to pure evil so he kinda has a multiple personality disorder.

Skills/Magic: The staff of Azkar controls the elements but it must be an existing element in the area and he is limited to about 10 cubic feet to control with.

Appearance: Red wears a red leather-type outfit with a tattered tan cloak. He has bright red hair that is combed and tied in back. It comes down to his chin line. He has a 5ft long sword attached to his back that is 1ft wide. He carries a bow around his shoulder with no arrows. He wears silver gauntlets on his hands. And wear black boots.

Personality: Red is quick to take action and stubborn, but he means well in the end. He tries to do what is right though it rarely ends up the way he would like. He loves to practice swordsmanship but finds himself always moving too much to get a decent amount.

Biography: Red was born on the planet of Ardioc in the Ardian forest. His mother was killed in a fire and his father is somewhere but he has yet to find him. He left the safety of the Forest to meet up with the Shinjo brothers one at a time. They trained him in their own fighting arts. Everywhere he went, though, someone seemed to die tragically either protecting him or bad luck. Red himself always seemed to come out just on top of fights against demons and monsters by the skin of his teeth as if the gods wanted him to live for a greater purpose. He was then sent away from Ardioc to a unknown realm to find his father who he was actually told by the head god that he would be there. Now we wanders through unfamiliarity to find an unknown foe. During his journeys he faced the six Saint Beasts of Ardioc which guarded the tools of the god Lang Shin. He narrowly defeats each of them with some help, though his helpers all died in the process.

[Euphoria]

The title of the thread is 'Raxis', and then you go on to say that your character is called Red; which is it? Anyway, now to start into the real evaluation:

- Elaborate on his weapons more. For the sword, how does he use it? What do the other weapons look like? Where/how did he find them?

- His strengths and weaknesses need massive fleshing out. If you need some help, go take a look at my third character, Winona Balthier. He needs some serious weaknesses if I'm going to let him excel in combat and magic. Even then, I might have to forbid the Boots of Shian or something.

- In his 'Skills/Magic' section, tell me how he uses the elements. You're dealing with some of the loosest terms in the BA, and I need you to put a cap on them so we don't end up with an omnipotent beast.

- In his Bio you must explain how he came across so many powerful weapons and tools.

Lastly, 5'4'' seems a tad short for an elf o.O

[Storm2754]

His name is Red, I just switched characters I was making in mid-swing, sorry

Weapon: Great Sword is an all powerful sword but only in the hands of the right person and Red is not the right person so it is pretty much a large lightweight sword. He uses it much like Cloud uses his Buster Sword, though not as well trained. Shadow Bow generates shadow bolts when the string is pulled back it looks completely black with a couple purple gems around the arrow slot, Gauntlets of Strength increase the strength of the wearer to that of a giant, Staff of Azkar controls the elements of water, fire, earth, and wind and it looks like a normal walking staff with four emblems (red, green, blue, and yellow) which turn brighter when he uses the staff, Boots of Shian which make him run 2x as fast they are black leather boots.

Weakness: He is overconfident, headstrong, doesn't want to be a hero, and anti-social, but most of all he is inhabited by the evil spirit of his father which changes him at times from good to pure evil so he kinda has a multiple personality disorder.

Spells: The staff of Azkar controls the elements but it must be an existing element in the area and he is limited to about 10 cubic feet to control with.

Biography: Red was born on the planet of Ardioc in the Ardian forest. His mother was killed in a fire and his father is somewhere but he has yet to find him. He left the safety of the Forest to meet up with the Shinjo brothers one at a time. They trained him in their own fighting arts. Everywhere he went, though, someone seemed to die tragically either protecting him or bad luck. Red himself always seemed to come out just on top of fights against demons and monsters by the skin of his teeth as if the gods wanted him to live for a greater purpose. He was then sent away from Ardioc to a unknown realm to find his father who he was actually told by the head god that he would be there. Now we wanders through unfamiliarity to find an unknown foe. During his journeys he faced the six Saint Beasts of Ardioc which guarded the tools of the god Lang Shin. He narrowly defeats each of them with some help, though his helpers all died in the process.

[Euphoria]

The bio was lovely >.>

Firstly, I want you to edit the changes into your pre-existing profile. If you don't know how to do that, click the 'edit' button beneath the post then copy and paste your changes in.

- Not everyone has played Final Fantasy 7. Don't be lazy, give us a proper explanation.

- It hardly matters that he has ten cubic feet to play with his magic if he can run inhumanly fast. To be frank, I hate the boots.

Check up on those few things and I'll be back.

[Storm2754]

Alright, I edited it

[Euphoria]

- Elaborate on his weapons more. For the sword, how does he use it? What do the other weapons look like? Where/how did he find them?

- His strengths and weaknesses need massive fleshing out. If you need some help, go take a look at my third character, Winona Balthier. He needs some serious weaknesses if I'm going to let him excel in combat and magic.

- In his 'Skills/Magic' section, tell me how he uses the elements. You're dealing with some of the loosest terms in the BA, and I need you to put a cap on them so we don't end up with an omnipotent beast.

Lastly, 5'4'' seems a tad short for an elf o.O

All of that still applies. If you want this character approved you're going to have to start listening to my advice. In other news:

- He is incredibly strong. I need some major weaknesses.

[Euphoria]

Only Councillors and approvees are allowed to post in here, thank you. Delete please :3