Azriel O'Curran

[Shaolin247]

Name: Azriel O'Curran

Age: 18

Race: Dark Elf/Vampire

Sex: Male

Hair: Curly dark brown hair.

Eyes: Brown.

Weight: 175 pounds.

Height: 5'5"

Weapon: Dual wields a Rapier and a Katana. Punchblades. His own fists. Shaleli(sp?) stick. (An Irish club with wooden spikes coming out of it) Also uses scorpion knives near his side.

Armor: A chest piece, shin guards, gauntlets. Pretty lightweight stuff.

Strengths: More physically strong than the average person. Smooth talker. (Can easily talk their way out of situations) Good at cooking.

Weakness: Definitely when a body part decides to fall asleep when he's been sitting on it for too long. All vampire weaknesses (stabbed in the stake by the heart, garlic, etc.)

Skills/Magic: Necromancer.

Appearance: Azriel has a muscular build. He usually wears black armor with gold Celtic trimming as well as black under clothing. He usually carries his weapons. His Rapier is on his left side and his Katana on the right. The Scorpion is on his back near his hip. The punchknives are in underneath his arms. He uses the shileli stick as a walking stick.

Personality: Funny, caring, sarcastic, witty, heroic, romantic.

Biography: Azriel's father was a Vampire and his mother was a Dark Elf. Azriel's life was generally peacful. His family and people he knew cared about him and loved him. Azriel would do anything for his loving mother. He was, you could say, a big Mama's Boy. His father taught him how to use Shaolin Kempo, a form of martial arts. He has an older brother whom is extremely silly and crazy, but loving to only his little brother. Back when Azriel was younger, they used to play fight all the time and Azriel would lose. But now that Azriel is older, he is able to defeat his brother.

He believes that the power of love can defeat anything. He would kill anyone in the name of love. He loves to dance and sing.

[Kitsuné]

Okay, this is looking pretty decent at the moment. It just needs some overall fleshing out, though.

Armour: Describe his armour - What does it look like? What can it defend against? What can't it defend again? How did he get it?

Strengths: His attributes - Speed, fitness, etc. Explain just how strong he is. He knows martial arts, that's a strength--how good is he with them?

Weaknesses: Explain his vampiric weaknesses - 'Etc' isn't good enough, because people may make unneccesary assumptions. How and why do his body parts fall asleep? When will they wake up? Is it painful?

Skills/Magic: Okay, simply stating 'necromancer' without giving people any idea of what he can do, what magic he can control. This probably means different to you than others, so you need to either a,) write out a list of his known spells/incantations--describing what they do and how he uses them--or b,) give us an idea of what magic he can control and to what extent.

Personality: This needs to be described heavily, too. A personality is what a person needs if they are to interact with your character--a mergence of words doesn't really fufill this. ;] How does he react to others? To everyday life itself? To danger? What aspects of his personality take charge in all these situations? Et cetera, et cetera, et cetera.

Biography: This just needs to be fleshed out in general - Does he still live at home? (If so, how is he going to actively battle? o_O) If not, when and why did he leave? What does he hope to accomplish in life? I'm sure you can think of more questions. ;]

Fix that up, and you're good to go. ^___^