Exarius.

Name: Exarius Suriaxa

Age: 18

Race: Hylian

Sex: Male

Hair: Light Brown.

Eyes: Hazel

Weight: 135 lbs.

Height: 5’08”

Weapon: Sword, Exarius wields a Family Heirloom as his primary Weapon, This sword named Kalour, Kalour is a sword of speed, It is fashioned as a hand and a half sword it is blue in tint.


Strengths: Exarius is a slow-paced kind of guy with much patience,
His fighting style reflects that he believes 'wait for them to make there move and than plan a counter attack that will not allow him to move' He can out match most all in a race, and can land many blows with his sword, He has always preferred to out-think the enemy, instead of charging into battle. He is also very Headstrong and think he can take on anyone and anything alone, he however does not posses the ability to kill because his friend was murdered in such a cruel fashion he cannot bear to see anyone suffer, if he has to fight he will simply knock them out and leave,

Weakness: Being the speed demon that he is, his attacks lack any true power, he also can be struck unaware by the opposition as he plans a counter-attack.

Skills/Magic: Exarius had a very open mind to studying, He has decided to master only a few elements instead of knowing little of all of them, being that he was raised in a large metropolis he has had very much to learn in the world of magic, yes he has decided to go away from the hustle and bustle of the city to find a quiet peaceful place to train, he stumbled upon a hermit and has been there for the last 3 years training, training has been very difficult for him, 3 long years of pain and suffering and sleepless nights he has finally learnt all that his master has to offer. Which include a wide array of spells, fluctuating in complexity and damage, these are but a few of his skills,

Raigeki- A lightning storm, which more often than not is use as a ‘Psychological’ weapon instead of actually physically damaging someone.

Gogyekku Kaiten
[Fire Whirl] is used as a more defensive type of attack, when used, a wall of fire surrounds Exarius so intense that it can raise the internal temperature of his body several degrees, and can roast any organic material that clashes with it, This is Exarius’ favorite spell to cast so he is very well attuned with it.

Hinotama Assault [Barrage of Fire] Fireballs explode out of Exarius' palms and lay waste to his enemy. This spell is very recently learned by Exarius and he is not quite as adept with it.



Appearance: Exarius is Fast, slim and Moderate in stature,however he is relatively skinny. he wears dark colors, his hair is long and black. his skin is moderately tanned, he is not the most attractive person there is but not the least attractive either. This he preferred so he does not get so much attention. He wears a long black leather coat with studs and fingerless gloves.

Personality: Exarius is a Quite kind of guy, he rarely makes the first move, but when he does he has much self-confidence, in his ability to perform, he will not kill anyone, if he is forced to fight he will simply knock them out, he cannot bear to see others suffer, he is very kind hearted if anyone cares to know him, he is very squeamish of blood, and if he gets it on him he cannot move, it's as if he was paralyzed

Biography: Exarius was born in a large Metropolis and he never was very talkative. However he lead a fairly simple life however he was often picked on, and for that reason he never made any friends. He had found one person that he trusted and that was the person that he had known since his childhood, and she was murdered over a few gold coins. She was beaten in such a fashion he cannot dare inflict death to others.

Ever since seeing his friend beaten he wishes to cleanse this world of all murderous acts, his eyes are sought on justice for all criminals. For those who break any law no matter the severity he often uses the dull edge of his weapon to stun, and knock out, his opponent. He doesn’t seem to care that his one true friend has died.

However in his heart he is suffering. The loss of the one person in this world that has believed in him is more tremendous than he could have imagined. He has been in training for the last 3 years and has trained vigorously. His heart set upon aught but justice, he wishes that his friend could see him now. With that thought is the driving force in his entire life, making sure that no-one is capable of such inhumane acts ever again.

Ever slowly Exarius is loosing his conscience and his going mad, loosing all control of himself to grief and the madness within.

[EDITED] Any better

First and foremost: for someone who is twenty-four years old and is skilled in combat (at least moderately so) he has a very small and uneventful history. You might want to work on that.

His magic needs a lot more explanation that you have there. You gave us numbers for general aptitude, so let me just say this: the Battle Arena does not function on a statistic system. You will find that, more often than not, your numbers will be used against you. Try explaining what he can and cannot do for each element, rather than just giving a number for each one. Also consider that his briography could elaborate how he learned his magic. That's always fun.

Apart from that, try checking for grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Pay especially close attention to capitalization. Words should only be capitalized under these circumstances:

1. They begin a sentence.
2. They are a name.
3. They are a special thing or place (examples being rivers or cities)
4. They are special in some other way (examples being words you want to have more obvious importance)

Okay, I have edited it, lemme know what you think

Alright. I want you to do something for me. A little exercise. Read your biography out loud, pausing for one second at every comma (that's the , mark) and two seconds at every period (that's the . mark).

Fix anything that sounds strange out loud.

Done, wow I really should have listened more in school.

^_^

Fantastic. You'll be a natural proofreader in no time. As far as I can see, the only thing left is putting your biography into paragraphs. Do that, and you'll get my scholarly stamp of approvalization.

Originally Posted by Exarius

Done, wow I really should have listened more in school.

Edited it again,

Alright, good job. ^_^ Approved.

Originally Posted by Honour

Alright, good job. ^_^ Approved.

Thanks, now the real fun can begin