Faite

Name: Faite

Age: 150

Race: Mountain Dwarf.
A mountain dwarf is a dwarf that lives in the mountains. This specific mountain dwarf village lived right on the edge of a volcano thus giving Faite and everyone else better fire resistance.

Sex: Male

The god to wich he praises: Night (very un-original)
Hair: Long, messy auburn hair that blends in with his armour. It is hard to see where his hair ends and his armour begins.

Eyes: Hazel.

Weight: 230

Height: 4’ 4''

Weapon: Battle Axe of destruction, Blade of Healing.
Crafted by the finest smiths in his village it gives the power to hurl fire balls with every 5 hits. 'Twas once a horn of a King red dragon who after having been beheaded from a giant stalagmite had both horns cut off and made into two different weapons as the Blade of Healing (his sword) and the Battle Axe of Destruction(his axe). Given to Faite as a present for a birthday from Danzi, they were best friends even though Danzi was a Drow and Faite was a Mountain Dwarf who lived in a cave next to Menzzoroban. (The blade of healing looks kind of like Fierce Deity’s sword but is Red and black. It gives him the power to heal himself and others.)

Armor: Dragon armor crafted by the finest smiths in his village it gives him resistant to fire. 'Twas a scale of the same dragon that the weapon of destruction and the sword of healing were made that his battle axe was made of it was forged after the great battle of Bioples fought by the gods themselves. It is less resistant to water and ice...

Strengths: Fire and stone. he uses fire to power up his weapon and he uses the stone to heal himself by going into stone skin ,extra strength, when his weapon gets powered up it turns his Axe into a Sword for a short amount of time allowing him to use it and the sword of healing at the same time.....

Weakness: Light especially bright lights because he was born underground and has no need for that it only distracts him and thus makes him easier to hit he is slow because the dragon armour is heavy. Water is a BIG weakness to him.

Skills/Magic: Sense door (allows him to see hidden doors) sense enemies, Summon Fire (Faite carries around a little amulet that gives him this ability it was fused with his armour...)Summon Night, allows him to summon a shape changer for a little bit, he is vulnerable during each summoning, and is able to be hit harder.


Appearance: Covered in head to toe in dragon scale armor. He has a rather large axe laid across his back to use in the inevitable fight to kill the dragon. His deep and a distinguished tone allows him to control his emotions you will have no trouble picking him out from a crowd. Faite carries around a small figurine of a stag/lion, with the lion part being the head and front two paws, from this he can summon Night, a shape shifter.

Personality: Faite is a character of huge proportions. He can be stern and headstrong, but also quiet and caring. If he is Mad you WILL know because he speaks his mind quite often...in fact, you could say he is quite annoying.


Biography: In the mountains of Villibar: All day he helped his father in the mines becoming stronger and stronger. He had hoped to be a great warrior like Danzi was. He and Danzi had been best friends since they had met in the Drow school in Menzorobanem, He was the only dwarf to go to that school because he was the best warrior in his village and had defeated many monsters with his bare hands. The Drows were surprised and tried to kill Faite, but Faite was a good Tactician and had been one step ahead of them. Then he met Danzi...his superior. When Danzi went out to slay FlameSword Firespite, Faite went along to learn and perhaps even become even stronger himself. They Killed the FlameSword Firespite and gathered his weapons and Danzi took them.

FlameSword's Death:

And so it came to pass that the flaming being inside of the river of lava Appeared. He was Ten feet tall and had a Mane of Lava He rose from the depths and Bellowed, “WHO DARES TO DISTURB MY MILLION YEAR REST!?"

"Danzi and Faite have disturbed you and we have come to banish you ETERNALLY!"

"FOOLS, YOU THINK YOU CAN DEFEAT THE GOD OF FLAME!? NONSINCE I WILL EAT YOUR SOULS!"*begins to hurl giant balls of Lava at them*

Faite steps in front of him while Danzi begins an ice shard spell Flames word’s only weakness. Faite Bats the giant Balls of Lava away from Danzi with his Sword of Stone (his basic weapon) The sword slowly disintegrates but by the time it does Danzi has already Defeated FlameSword and together Danzi and Faite say the Incantation of Binding.

Before I read through it all, there are quite a few capitalization and spacing issues that need to be taken care of. The first letter of every sentence needs to capitalized, and there needs to be a space between the period concluding every sentence and the first word of the following sentence. Run it through MS Word's spell/grammar check if you have it to make things easier and quicker. If not, please make the edits manually.

Once you finish that, post here and I'll take another look.

ok i have edited it as best i could

I still see many of the same errors. If you can't spot them, I'll run it through a MS Word spell/grammar and send you a PM pointing them out and explaining any errors you don't understand to you, if you'd like.

yes please

All right, I suppose this character is approved now. *approved*