Zargin

Name: Zargin

Age: 97

Race: Form one: Xiagru/Crystal (See race background). Form two: Created "Puppet" (See biography).

Sex: Male

Hair: None

Eyes: Form one: None. Form two: Black.

Weight: Form one: 25 Pounds. Form two: 341 Pounds.

Height: Form one: 1 foot, 9 inches. Form two: 7 Ft, 4 in.

Theme Music: Giygas Battle Music Phase 2

Weapon: Form 1: Psychic powers. Form 2: Claws.

Armor: Form 1: Crystal body. Form 2: Metal plating.

Strengths: (Forms are listed as: 1- or 2-.
1-Telekinesis and telepathy.
2-Shapeshifting powers.
1-Able to possess things.
1&2-Regenerative powers.

Weakness: (Weaknesses listed in the order of the strength they weaken.)
1-Can only use telekinesis and telepathy while in form 1.
1-Can't speak, has to use telepathy to commmunicate.
2-Can only alter arms and legs.
1-The being must surrender to it, or have no will.
2-Only regenerates when not in use.
2-Metal plating only cover head, shoulders, elbows, and knees.

Skills/Magic: 1-Capable of lifting multiple objects at once. Can also send messages through telepathy everywhere within a 10 meter radius.
2-Superhuman strength.

Appearance: 1-A blue, transuculent crystal with a light inside. About as big as a human head.
2- A bipedal reptile with metal plating over head, shoulders, elbows, and knees. Legs similar to that of a bird (Talons, the joints). Has yellow-green scales. His metal plating is a tad rusted, but curves along with his body. There are hinges at the joints. His legs are the same, joint wise, as a human,s, but are still covered in scales.

Personality: 1-His race believes that the only evil is betraying your own kind. Due to this, things like stealing, killing, and using someone for your own gain isn't always evil. Unless they're doing that to another of their kind, it's called being smart. Otherwise, it's being a traitor. And the Xiagru despise traitors. Because of that, some may consider the Xiagru to be evil. Zargin himself does whatever is in his interest. Usually, if someone fights him, he'll show mercy. If the one he is fighting manages to break his crystal body, the crystal slowly rebuilds itself due to the seal. He is not intended to be free from it.
2-Doesn't have a personality, mind, etc. Is only a vessel for Zargin.

Biography: Zargin was born in a hive, like most other Xiagru. He had a mother, and father, but they only conceived him, they didn't raise him. He was raised by the caretakers of the hive, and eventually was released into the world at age 10.
Zargin was courteous, he helped the rest of his kind in affairs such as disputes, raising larvae, helping to craft weaponry. He trained in the arts of Xiagru combat, using everything from swords and staves, to lasers and missiles.
He was chosen by the Sages of his colony, to become a psychic, or as they called them, Druids. He was trained in telekinesis, telepathy, and pyrokinesis. Zargin tended not to use pyrokinesis, due to the Xiagru's natural weakness to fire.
At age 50, Zargin had already become a High Druid of the Xiagru Order. Some said he was touched by the gods, other said he was just lucky, but one thing was for sure. He was good. At age 75, he was fully trained as an Agent of the Xiagru Sages.
He resolved disputes among the Xiagru colonies during his time as an agent. His skill was so great, they thought him to be ready for the greatest honor of all. He became a High Sage of the Xiagru Order. However, at age 80, an invasion occured on Planet Xiagru.
The invaders swept through the city, like a fire, destroying countless Xiagru. Even the Druids couldn't defeat them. Zargin did what he could to stop them. Hecreated a massive fire, to wipe out the attackers. What was left of them retreated, but all was not well.
Zargin had also killed countless Xiagru, he acted too soon, his fellow sages did the worst punishment they could to him. They sealed his mind in a crystal, and exiled him from Xiagru, forever. Feeling betrayed, he made a pact to one day get back at them.
He floated through space, controlling his trajectory through his telekinesis. He crashed on the invaders homeworld. They heralded him as the one who beat power itself. He used their worship of him to scan other planets for intelligent life, as far from Xiagru as possible.
He found Earth, and they agreed to take him to the Moon, for if they landed on Earth, they would surely be outnumbered. After Zargin landed on the Moon, he proceeded to fly towards the Earth.
Zargin crashed just south of the city, Postuco. A citizen found him, and began to converse with him. Zargin, knowing he had an opportunity to get stronger, fed the civilian false information.
The citizen's name was Argo, and he believed Zargin was a manifestation of wisdom. Argo began to hand out flyers, detailing "the corruption of the Postuco leaders."
He eventually made a small army, composed of over half of the city's population. He owned half of the city already. Zargin detected which soldiers had the most psychic power. He made Argo form them into a squad.
The squad, composed of four members, Hex, Liz, Saser, and Marcus, was sent to cripple the Postuco Militia. They succeeded, and the main army quickly overtook Postuco, and the leaders were killed.
Argo created the Postuco Empire in it's place, and forged a great power, with Zargin's help, of course. But Argo wanted more. He wanted immortality. He had the best metalworkers, jewelers, and surgeons try to graft a mask, containing Zargin, to his face.
It worked, but Zargin possessed Argo, and made them remove him from the mask. He then had them seal the hole, causing Argo to die of suffocation. The Postuco Empire collapsed immediately afterward.
Zargin possessed the scientists, and gained their knowledge. He used science to create a part-live, part-mechanical body. It had no mind, so Zargin could possess it quickly. He took control of it, and set out.

Race background: The Xiagru are an insectoid species. They live on planet Xiagru, where they live in scattered colonies. Xiagru is mostly barren, with an abundance of minerals.
The Xiagru eat a jelly-like mineral, that exists within the planet's crust. Thus, there are many mining facilities. They also have great mechanical prowess, building things from swords, to airships.
The Xiagru are divided into three social groups:

-The Highers, this includes everything from Druids to High Sages. They usually wear robes, and are psychic.
-The Horde, this includes everything from larvae, to soldiers. They do not wear clothing, they breed through scents.
-The Lessers, this includes those who willingly kill other Xiagru. They're usually either executed, if they are one of the Horde, or banished, if they're a Higher.

Part two is done. What do you think?

Fairly good. He does need a few touch-ups, however.

First, you had probably ought to be a little clearer in the Weaknesses Section. Instead of saying "Can only use them while in form 1," say "Can only use Telekinesis and Telepathy in form 1." You can leave it how it is but it might confuse some people who read it. I was confused when I first did.

I would like to see more detail to his appearance. Just a little to his crystal form, such as how big is he, but much more for his lizard form. What color is his scales? What does his metal plating look like? Does his legs look any different than the rest of him since they're similar too a bird's? His appearance should be at least a paragraph long.

Finally, his personality needs to be expanded. What are the morals of his race? What exactly would make him considered evil by others? Not all people have the same perception of evil, either. Does he kill whoever he meets? Would he be merciful to an opponent or just kill them outright? Like his appearance, his personality needs to be at least a paragraph long.

Okay, expand on those things and I'll take another look at him.

I've added what you've said...I think.

That works. ^^ *Approvedeth*

Originally Posted by Ranarath

That works. ^^ *Approvedeth*

Thanks!