Deann

Name: Anna Lawson

Age: 17

Race: Hylian

Sex: Female

Hair: Brunette with blond streaks going down the middle. It is past shoulder length,

Eyes: Ice blue

Weight: 110 lbs. 6oz.

Height: 5'8"

Alignment: Good

Theme songs: Sweet Child o' Mine YouTube - Guns.N.Roses-Sweet Child O'Mine
Walking on Water: YouTube - Walking on Water
YouTube - Link and Zelda tribute
Weapons: Anna has a basic metal sword and wooden shield The sword is a gleaming silver with ancient Hylian inscripitions. Her shield is carved out of the best wood in Hyrule. She has basic melee weapons which include a hookshot, bow and arrows, and a pair of iron boots. Her sword's symbols help to make her blade a continuous sharpness, and near indestructable.

Armour: She wears heavy metal armour that covers up her torso and shoulders. Anna has weak leg and arm armour which goes down until it reaches her ankles and wrists. Anna doesn't normally wear the heavy metal armor, because it limits her fluid mvements and hinders her arms moving as well.

Strengths: Anna's strengths are her mind and body. Her rock hard determination and toned body help her to succeed in battling even the toughest foes. She uses her foes strengths to her advantage by first studying their strategy and then attacking. Most fire attacks are useless against Anna, because for most of her life she has trusted and used almost nothing but fire moves.

Weaknesses: Anna's strengths reach a limit but her weaknesses do not. She is weak to earth and partially weakened by water. Anna's dilemma is that she can't swim too well. She's recently went from floating to walking. Anna wears very weak armor that protects very little of her body. Water and ice are two elements Anna can't stand, but if she is forced near them, she will do what she must to avoid them. Even though she can use many ice attacks, Anna will try and evade using them until her life is on the line.

Skills/Magic: Since Anna was previously part of the shadow race, her skills and magic levels are off the charts. Her ability to contact spirits is matched in level with her magic skills. Anna's magic rules over fire, ice, dark, light, and energy.
Fire:/100
Ice:/91
Energy:/35
Dark:/42
Light:/100
Anna is a novice sorceress who dreams of fighting the masters one day. She trained under the Twili until they were banished into the Twilight Realm about 3,000 years ago. She took up training light just days after she met X Vitros. He helped her gain control over the powers Anna has now. For many years, she used her powers to help steal her food, and still enjoys using them to cause mischief, even though they are more controlled now.

Appearance: Anna is a normal Hylian with pointy ears. Her eyes are a dazzling ice blue, her hair long and curly with light blond streaks. She is tall, thin and built up with muscle from shoulder to foot. Her armor is a metallic silver with blue streaks from top to bottom. She wears a one piece blue jumpsuit she discovered walking through a forest. The jumpsuit is sky blue with white stripes going down the legs. If you look closely at Anna's hand you will see a glowing X in the center. From TheEvilSquirrelGirl! Pretty awesome!

Personality: Anna is considered by many people to be the most serious person ever. She rarely laughs at jokes and always smiles. If you battle Anna you are in for a shock. She looks very weak but is strong when she's angry. The happiest her friends have ever seen her is when she is training with her powers. Just recently she had met someone she really loves and cares about. To become her friend you have to battle and win or lose with honor. Some of her new found friends can describe her as mischievious, arrogant, emotional, and an easy to set off temper.

Biography: Orphaned as an infant, Anna has never seen her mother or father. They had supposedly died from an illness unknown to anybody. She grew up in an abandoned cottage east of Hyrule Castle and stole for her food. She found some friends years later that would take her in from the streets. They helped Anna master her powers so she could defend herself but they (the sorcerers) were sealed away before her training was complete. She wanted desperately to learn how to control her powers but knew she had to teach herself.
She's still an orfaned teen and struggling along through life. A few months back she met a young man named Vitros who helped her overcome a spell cast on her by the shadow spirits. She told him that they would meet again someday and fate did just that. Anna was walking along a beach when her friend teleported beside her. Anna asked Vitros to help her train with her powers even more. After a few hours of fighting Anna and Vitros exchanged embarrassed glances, Anna knowing that she had feelings for the warrior that no one but them knew about. They parted paths and met other people on their journeys. Later on, Anna ran into one of her old allies, and spent some time with her and her gang. Nobody, not even her friends has ever heard her full name, which in her language means spirit demon.

Pretty good. She just needs some expansion in the usual places.

First off, her appearance. The only real problem with this section is the phrase "Deann looks like any other Hylian..." Not everybody is going to know what a Hylian looks like so go into detail about that. Also, expand a little more on what her black outfit looks like.

Next is her personality. What does it take to be friends with Deann? How does she act in battle? Is she ruthless or does she show mercy to those she defeats? Why is she so serious? This section needs to be a little longer.

Finally, her biography. Why was Deann orphaned? When did she meet her friends and why did they become friends? Why were her powers sealed away before she completely her training? Or, do you mean her friends were sealed away? Why do people always refuse to help her? And how would she know Princess Zelda? Remember, a biography is a character's entire life.

Alright, expand on those three things and I'll take another look at her.

Originally Posted by Ranarath

Pretty good. She just needs some expansion in the usual places.

First off, her appearance. The only real problem with this section is the phrase "Deann looks like any other Hylian..." Not everybody is going to know what a Hylian looks like so go into detail about that. Also, expand a little more on what her black outfit looks like.

Next is her personality. What does it take to be friends with Deann? How does she act in battle? Is she ruthless or does she show mercy to those she defeats? Why is she so serious? This section needs to be a little longer.

Finally, her biography. Why was Deann orphaned? When did she meet her friends and why did they become friends? Why were her powers sealed away before she completely her training? Or, do you mean her friends were sealed away? Why do people always refuse to help her? And how would she know Princess Zelda? Remember, a biography is a character's entire life.

Alright, expand on those three things and I'll take another look at her.

I modified her to a new state. She isn't Shadow Hylian or very serious anymore.

Alright, her personality is great now. However, she still needs some work in those other two areas. Mainly, in her appearance, it would be nice if you could describe what she's wearing and go into a little more detail about her armor. Also, I would still like to see a little more in her biography section.

I fixed the mistakes. Is it good enough now?

Okay. *Approvedeth*

Originally Posted by Ranarath

Okay. *Approvedeth*

Thank you.