Katie

Name: Katie
Age: 14
Race: Human
Sex: Female
Hair: dirty blonde
Eyes: hazel
Weight: 95 (minus wings)
Height: 5’ 4”

Weapons: Kate has wings that are metal but light so she can protect herself from attacks. they are so light and powerfull that she can fly like any angel or bird. She can shoot feathers out of the edge of her wings. They act like daggers since they are sharp and metal. She has two 2 foot long feather swords that are kept in her wings.

Strengths: She has a biomechanical skintight suit that grants her enhanced agility, speed, and strength. She’s really good with her swords and can block attacks with her metal wings and attack with them as well. She is also small, agile and surprisingly fast. Because of her size she’s often underestimated witch can sometimes give her the upper hand. The suit provides a healing factor and can dull pain. (Her arm can get cut off and she can still fight.)

Weakness: Although she is a lot stranger than she looks she’s not super buff and is small so she can get thrown around easily. Kate has a weakness to magic since there is no magic on her would. Her armor and wings are rather heavy and she won’t be able to swim and will be forced to deactivate her armor. Out of her armor she is just as weak as any other fourteen-year-old girl.

Appearance: Her armor theme is a falcon. She looks like a helpless girl but then she fights like a 20-year-old. She is thin and long. She is quite tall for her age. She thinks she is ugly but is actually very pretty. Out of armor she usually wears a regular T-shirt and jeans that she rolls up into capris.


Personality: She’s kind of a tomb boy, outspoken, goofy at times and easy to get along with. She gets along with everybody who gets along with her whether there mutant or not. But if someone teases her, she doesn’t take it seriously, but she still spits right back at them. She is kind of offended when people say she is too little to do what she does.

World History: Everyone on Earth 4500ac wears a suit like Kate’s when they are above ground to protect them from the Xyanide virus. The suits are all individualized and utilize subconscious thoughts to function like an extra skin for their users. Many are very stylized, and they reflect the person’s very persona and character because they are formed by a program that builds off the person’s own imagination. They are given to each person when they reach the age of twelve and at that point they are given the privileges and free access to the outside world, before which they live strictly underground. As well as protection from the virus the suits also provide the wearers with a slight increase in different abilities. The virus was not a virus as they knew it in the twenty-first century but a powerful mutating agent that uncontrolled completely changed the form of those infected. This created a world where the only humans that existed in this future timeline were ones that lived under ground or were protected by their technology from the very elements. All other forms of life mutated into monsters, the humans affected generally remained bipedal and just as intelligent but most became savage, warmongering, or very alien to their human counterparts, and some lost humanoid appearance altogether.

Biography: Katie was born into a loving family, but then her home was burned down and her family was killed. Then she was kidnapped as a baby. The bandits raised her because they noticed her power. The bandit’s leader taught her how to fight like an expert. While she was going on her first robbery, she noticed it was an evil thing to do. One day, she ran away and was taken in by another mutant when she was 9 years old. (This mutant was Blade He is a seven foot tall lizard mutant worrier that took pity on the little girl.) There, she was taught to be an even better fighter. She heard of J and that her “dad” was working with him, her “dad” being Blade. At first, Blade didn’t want her to fight with them because it was too dangerous. During one mission that Blade and J were on, she had secretly followed along. An unsuspected fight had broken out and Blade and J found themselves against overwhelming odds. Just as it the situation started to look hopeless for the two warriors, Kate and flown in and took the enemy by surprise by taking out a few before flying in front of Blade and protecting him from a huge blast with her wings. Then with the help of Kate the three were able to escape from the battle alive. Since then, Kate has had the privilege of accompanying the warriors in different missions.

Not bad for a starting character. There are a few things I would like for you to add on, though.

First, you need to expand her appearance section. Mainly you need to describe what her armor looks like other than that it has metal wings.

Second, her personality is a little short. Not all teenagers act quite alike. Does she get after anyone that teases her or does she sometimes understand that they are just doing it for fun? What about other beings that aren't human? Does she get along well with them or is she only comfortable around Blade? A couple more sentences would be good in this area.

Okay, expand those two areas and I'll take another look at her.

I didn't really describe her appearance that well at first because I was originally going to put the picture there anyway. I'll make those two changes and hope you like it.

*Approvedeth*

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