Exodus (The Mutant Runaway)

Okay since I decided I didnt want my other character and Ive waited about a week, Im gonna make this one.

Name: Exodus
Real Name: Klyde Droneson IV
Age: 16
Sex: Male
Race: Mutant Human (Looks like human but is actually a mutant)
Birthplace: Kingdom of Droneson
Height: 5'11
Weight: 160lbs
Hair: Dark Brown and ragged
Eyes: Emerald Green

Weapon: An Emerald Sword . It is called the Emerald Sword because on the hilt it is golden with a bunch of emerald stones imbedding it around the grip, making it easier to hold with a tighter grip. The blade is also silver with melted emeralds running down the tip of the blade to the hilt, making a bright green line. The Sword itself is 3 feet long, The hilt is 1/2 a foot long and the blade is 2 1/2ft long. It is also almost indesctructable and takes ALOT to break

Armor: Sapphire Shield. This is a shield that is about 2/12 foot high, and 2 foot wide in the shape of a pentagon. The shield is made of solid silver, and has blue sparkling sapphires surrounding the outside border of the shield. The design on the shield is a golden dragons head with two sapphires for its eyes. The Sapphire eyes always stare directly at the enemy they are facing.

Strengths: He is well trained in hand to hand combat for his age. He is also very strong and can lift up to 8 tons max. He does well in close range and in areas with lots of stuff for him to hurl at the opponet and hide behind. He trained as well as a regular warrior in terms of defense, but in terms of offense he is very dangerous. He has the power to smash stone, bend metal and lift heavy objects making him super human compared to a regular warrior. His mental attributes, which include strategy in battle, and sneak attacks are also state of the art, making him an excellant planner before he strikes, and while he strikes.

Weakness: He is only a human when it comes to taking hits. He is extremely vulnerable to fire, thunder, and acid based attacks as he has little defense against them. He is pretty much dead useless in ranged combat as he has no way to attack his opponet and he does not do so well in wide open areas like a field or sand desert. Though in offense he is powerful he does have his drawbacks. If he is gonna punch through something like concrete, it will hurt his hands, and he cannot do this repeadetly without injuring himself from recoil. Though he plans his battles well and knows how to sneak attack, he does have draw backs in his mental state. Flashbacks can sometimes occur on him while he is battling, making it hard to focus.

Skills: He knows how to use his sword and shield tactics extremly well and is pretty agilic. He uses his strength alot in his battles, tossing his opponet across the field, hitting them with all his might, and tossing heavy objects at them. He also uses his strength with his sword which makes a deadly combanation in offense.

Appearence: He wears a long blue torn up robe, much like a kimono. His hair style is about neck length and it is very ragged. It shines a brownish color when in the sun. His face is slightly tanned with several scars and cuts covering, but still his sheen shines through it. His boots are guoloshes, they are black, and are torn up a little bit as well. He also wears white pants under his robe, with black gauntlets on his wrist. He carrys his sword in a sheathe on his belt, with is nothing more then a a white cloth tied around his waist, and he wears his shield on his back.

Personality: A loner. He rarely talks when in public, even if spoken to, and hates to have to get help from others and He never trusts no one unless he for sure knows about them, even then he will rarely open up to them. In battle he will taunt his opponet, and he will fight to the end. Though he rarely gets honor back he still shows honor to his opponets, even if they shun him. However though he is usually calm, he does have a bad temper when he gets angry, When he is mad for whatever reason he will not stop fighting until either him or his opponet falls.

Bio:

Prologue:
Far far north of the globe, in the vast Mountains of Molodrom, There exhisted a Kingdom. This Kingdom was a peaceful and prosperous place to live, ruled by King and Queen Ihsimia. The people lived in harmony and the Kingdom stood tall high on the peak on Molodrom. Warriors from this city would often go into the Cave of Courage, which was a cavern located at the highest point in the mountain, in this cave beasts were slain for training, and their pelts were used to make goods for the city.

One day however, a group of warriors headed out for the caves, but never came back. The King started to panic, it had been three days but still no word on them. Fearing the worst the King sent out a small scout party to look for signs of them. Several days later one man from the scout returned, he was bloody, bruised and Trying to cath his breathe, The word he brought was horrible, 2000 Soldiers of the Thieves armed and ready were camped out at the caves. Before anyone could do anything arrows started falling out of the sky and loud screams were heard outside the gates. Suddenly the huge door that guarded the Kingdom busted open at the hands of a Thieve. He was no human though he was a mutant whom possessed unbelivable powers. With no time to prepare to counter attack, the guards were killed by the 100's. The Mutant who was the head leader charged into palace of the King and Queen, Several Minutes later The flag of the thieves was raised, and the once peaceful kingdom now became The Kingdom of Droneson Ruled by the Czar Mutant known as Klyde Dronseon I......

Three generations later....

The Kingdom of Droneson was a very harsh place to live, it had even become famous for its increased death count every few days, Still people insisted on staying as it was the only rest stop on The Mountains of Molodrom. The leader of the Kingdom Klyde Droneson III was very discriminative. He banished people and even had them killed for their race or species, from Blacks to Gerudos to gorons ro Zoras to Elves, all were slaughtered if the Czar ordered so.

Until one day The Czar had a son. His name was Klyde Droneson IV, future ruler of Droneson. For years the Czar raised his son, teaching him in the ways of Combat, like his fathers taught him, and training him in fencing. In whatever Free time Klyde IV had he spent working out or running to increase his stamina. Until the day he turned fourteen, then something strange happened.

While Young Klyde was walking down the street, A Horse was startled By the sound of a trumpet. It charged forward at an incredible rate, right at Klyde. Klyde threw his hands at the horse in a last ditch effort to save himself, and amazingly he knocked the Horse at least 20 feet back, right into a black smith shop! The horse was knocked out and Klyde was left unscathed, But the town watched in awe at Klyde, Never before had they seen such strength, even from a goron or an ogre!

Howver the Czar would not stand for having a mutant as his son, so he had him locked away in a tunnel deep underground, with archers ready to shoot him if he made any sudden movements to escape. The Czar wondered how his son aqquired such great strength, then it dawned on him! His grandfather was the one whom had the gift, his grandfather was the mutant! His genes must affect every fourth generation, which would explain why Young Klyde had this gift.

For almost one year Klyde lay in the dungeon. Dreaming of freedom from this cespit he lived in. One day though A woman dressed in bright fancy clothes came to the dungeon and killed the two guards guarding him. She claimed that she was his mother, whom was forced to runaway after she had him. The Czar was unruly and surly and tried to beat her out of anger. She returned and gave him two gifts. The Emerald Sword and The Sapphire Shield. Young Klyde Graciously took the gifts and he and his mother set off out of the dungeon.

However outside The czar and his men were waiting for them. He angerly stabbed Klydes Mom to death and looked at Klyde with her blood on his hands. Klydes temper began to rise, and suddenly he lost all control. He began stabbing everyone who surrounded him, civilian to soldier to peasant, they all fell dead....

Klyde ran off and didnt look back at the mess he had caused, for he knew that this was the end of his life in Droneson. Had he killed his father and freed the city, or was his father alive, waiting to kill him again, he did not know, nor did he want to know. He was now the runaway from his hometown, No longer was he Klyde Droneson IV he was now known as "Exodus"......

Excuse me for this double post, but I am gettin kinda fed up with waiting. I would not say this IF there were not other characters that have been approved AFTER I posted mine! On top of that this is my first character and I am itchin to battle, its been almost a week too, someone please approve this!

Quite interesting overall, there are however some issues. Lifting eight tonnes on your own is quite some feat. That's 8,000 kilograms there. The horse you mentioned in the bio would most probably weigh about 500-600 kg. Which makes a strength of 8 tonnes quite... unrealistic, don't you think? Maybe you could tone it down somewhat?

Another thing, your strengths/weaknesses need a bit more work. You should compare him to a standard warrior, and point our how he differs from that mould, what mental and physical attributes give him a leverage or a hindrance. You could check up on one of my chars for examples.

As for the skills part, it should describe the skills and strategies he employs in battles, not what he can do in general.

His personality is okay, but adding to it would be a very good bonus

See to all these matters, and I'll get back to ya.

Quite unperfect I am, yes? Only a couple things wrong with your...judgement:

1. He's a mutant, so super strength is quite normal
2. Your speaking as if he just stood by the horse and lifted it up, he pushed the horse 20 feet back into a building, that has to tell you something.
3. He was much younger when he did that, so he is older now.

Okay I'll edit this soon, wait for my next post and I'll tell you when he's fixed up....

Okay I fixed it up, and even added to the personality!

(I kinda wanna keep his strength at this level, because that and his sword are the only tools he uses in a fight!)

Okay then. Just... don't overdo the super-strength in battles, 'mkay?

*approvifies*

I wont, Im sure there are other far more powerful abilities out there then just super strength!

I Emerald Sword hereby give this character and all its trademarks to BlueFox. If anyone is battling this character is now belongs to BlueFox.

Sincerely,



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